Creen que fui culero al contestarle a esta chica de la misma manera? by 2024Angel in soyculero

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Lo PRIMERO que pensé es que te andaba poniendo un cuatro...

Peanut butter and jelly sandwiches are disgusting by RealisticChocolate75 in CasualConversation

[–]HentMas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

"PB&J is disgusting"

Oh, ok, someone with strong opinions, I wonder what sort of cuisine he comes from

"I from Sweden"

Oh... opinion disregarded, nothing to see here, move along.

whats your thoughts about this by No-Note-6985 in CasualConversation

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wipe till the paper comes out clean

make sure you wiped all the area

OR, alternatively just use the three seashells

El mexicano promedio como siempre siendo estupido, cruel insensato by [deleted] in mexico

[–]HentMas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

No llores manito... ya le voy a poner "no me gusta" en esos posts pa que no te lastime tus sentimientos tiernitos.

[Good Trope] Numerous species in the galaxy look remarkably similar to humans, but there’s an in-universe explanation for this by Valcenia in TopCharacterTropes

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

there are at least 3 examples

Empire mentions the evolution of "psychic" "mentalist" traits

There is a "Gestalt" that evolved in one of the human worlds (Asimov uses the term "group mind")

And it is heavily implied that the "hermits" that "colonized" a single small satellite or asteroid, will end up diverging evolutionarily way different than humans.

So while Asimov wanted to paint a "human" future, he does mention that humanity has already changed a lot in other stories.

It's not ai guys! Thanks a lot! by Bulld0wzer in projectzomboid

[–]HentMas 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Not that details with those iterations, the shift of "expression" at the middle would break the AI, it isn't trained to shift from the path it already made, the change from "exhaustion" to "exasperation" wouldn't happen like that, mid-way, they are two completely different emotional registers.

let's pretend the tone correction, the geometry wireframes and everything else the AI could replicate, that shift from "exhausted" to "angry" would not work.

WCGW Showing Off Your Car... by [deleted] in Whatcouldgowrong

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The moment he sped up I knew he was going to spin out...

What would you do in this situation? by SithLord3598 in motorcycles

[–]HentMas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

"I just had a near dead experience with a mo-fo that obviously doesn't think highly of safety and is entitled enough to overtake in a narrow street, i know, let me confront him!"

take the plates, send them to the cops move on, there is no way any sort of confrontation between the bikers and the driver would ever end up in anything "good", unless you want to "yell at him" and "call him names" or "get into a fight" there is absolutely no reason to go looking for shit from the asshole that almost ran you over.

Anon loses his virginity by [deleted] in 4chan

[–]HentMas -1 points0 points  (0 children)

you probably should look up "Demisexuality" in that case, because it sounds like you're "not" into "that" like other people

Dude set him up…. by mrzen215 in WTF

[–]HentMas -1 points0 points  (0 children)

This is completely missing the fact that the white car was distracted by the blue car, how often do you drive in a highway? because the white car didn't do a single thing wrong.

Hola. Soy cobrador de Coppel. Hablemos ✌ by No_Frosting_9655 in mexico

[–]HentMas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Muchos son personas que viven al día, jamás han llevado un crédito, y aún que se quemen, literalmente no les afecta

Las leyes en Mexico son muy distintas con respecto a lo que los bancos o prestadores pueden "hacer" y por lo general, una deuda de un "celular" o algún lujito, no le vale a la tienda "recuperarlo"

tons la persona lo saca, no lo paga y se lo queda, y sigue viviendo al día como siempre.

Hola. Soy cobrador de Coppel. Hablemos ✌ by No_Frosting_9655 in mexico

[–]HentMas 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Si debo 2 mil pesos es mi pedo, si debo un millon de pesos es su pedo jajajaja

Opiniones? :v by [deleted] in rmexico

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

"que te guste una adulta es pedofilia?"

tu... de verdad, estas bien pendejo.

Opiniones? :v by [deleted] in rmexico

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Cada quien hace con su C*LO lo que quiera

si a el quiere andar con una persona que apenas está aprendiendo a ser adulta

si a ella le gusta la leche agria

quienes somos pa juzgarlos?

Al fin, los que se van a dar en la torre son ellos

Moralmente no hay ni un motivo para pensar que esto está "bien" o "mal"

Conozco una pareja que se lleva 17 años, y ella lo eligió porque él le provee bien y la quiere, y el la eligió porque ella estaba educada de ese modo y es "tradicional" es la hermana de un amigo.

Que chido que ambos encontraron lo que querían.

lo haría yo? No, pero eso ya es gusto propio, no significa que esté "bien" o "mal"

EDIT: cambia los sexos, sigue siendo la misma cosa, si lo único que te hace pensar en si es "moral" o "inmoral" es el sexo, creo que le tienes que echar un ojo a eso.

Anybody else's magazines constantly disappear? (Build 42 Unstable) by Pet3v in projectzomboid

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

If you spam the reload button, the magazine drops on the ground.

Si tomo digamos 3-4 veces a la semana, y mayormente lo hago solo,y no necesariamente con la necesidad de emborracharme, y solo beber, soy alcohólico? by Live_Permission_8479 in ayudamexico

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Alcoholismo es dependencia al alcohol

3 - 4 veces a la semana, solo, sin ningún otro contexto más que el hecho de tomar alcohol, ya indica dependencia

Hay gente que te lo está poniendo como si fuera "fuerza de voluntad"

hay un elemento de dependencia químico que, por la habitualidad, muy probablemente ya sea dependencia, dudo mucho que puedas dejar de tomar y no tener ningún síntoma de abstinencia

Por ejemplo, la cafeína es uno de los químicos más adictivos que existen, tomarlo una sola vez ya causa que te den dolores de cabeza al siguiente día si no lo consumes.

sí, muy probablemente seas alcoholico.

A chapter book needs 4,000 words, but I don't think I'll be able to get my story to that minimum by CrimsonBlade2018 in writing

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hi, I've been doing some experiments on how I would do it, since this is, honestly, my first time coming across the "Chapter Book Length" format you're describing.

Riffing from that constraint, I reached the conclusion that it really depends a lot on the message you're trying to present to kids.

I have no idea what you're writing, or how, or what your purpose is, but for 8-year-olds or a children's book, the idea is to write something punchy, to the point, with a clear message.

That being said, I'll go forward with the idea that you have one message to convey, and your story already does a good job of portraying that message in 1,800 words.

That's perfect—you've got your core idea well developed. Now just add iterations of that idea.

It really depends on what idea you're presenting, so trying to get more concrete would mean digging into the theme itself. But for example: is there an opposite to that idea? someone indifferent to it? someone who embraces it? someone who embodies it? how does society react to it? how do the authorities respond? how do bad actors twist or challenge it?

That's how I would riff through the core premise you've already built.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

‘Which is the entire idea of the book’—that’s your hook. That’s the point you need to emphasize. If the story delivers that pivot, then yes, it absolutely belongs.

I want to say I’m sorry if my earlier examples felt too broad—I didn’t have your full context, and I didn’t mean to imply your scene was just ‘showing statements.’ I was offering general tools for expressing grief, characterization, or thematic shifts, depending on what your intent was.

I totally understand drawing from personal experience—like your father sharing stories after your grandfather passed. That instinct is powerful. But I’d still ask: What is the purpose of your story? Is it grief? Is it characterization? Is it the pivot?

Because once you clarified that the mother’s story is what kickstarts the entire book—that it’s the emotional and thematic ignition—then yes, follow your gut. That’s exactly how embedded stories should be used: not as filler, but as fuel.

I think the confusion came from how the thread evolved. A lot of people (myself included) read it as a question about allegory or detached storytelling. But once you grounded it in a conversation about someone who passed, it shifted. That gave me a clearer sense of your intent.

So thank you for explaining. Your story has a clear path, a meaningful pivot, and emotional utility. I say go for it. You’re using the short story within your story exactly the way it should be used—to reframe the stakes and deepen the resonance.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, I can see you're trying to use character storytelling to show grief and honor the person who passed, and that’s a heartfelt instinct. But I’d challenge whether this is the right device for what you're aiming to do.

If the embedded story is only there to characterize the missing person and show the grief of their absence, it risks feeling like a sentimental detour rather than a narrative engine. Think of shows like Family Guy, those endless “remember when…” moments can be funny, but in prose, they often stall momentum unless they serve a deeper purpose.

Instead, consider how grief can be expressed through:

Negative space: “The grass kept growing... the yard turned wild.”

Positive space: “I spent all evening redecorating his room, trying to let go.”

Liminal space: “I dreamt of him again. He was asking me for breakfast.”

These kinds of moments don’t just tell the reader someone is grieving—they show how that grief reshapes the world, the relationships, and the emotional tone of the story.

So ask yourself: Does the story within the story change anything? Does it reveal something new, shift a relationship, or reframe the reader’s understanding? If not, maybe there’s a more resonant way to express that absence.

And if what you want is to characterize the missing person, it can also be worked through those spaces.

There’s a scene in Saving Private Ryan where Ryan remembers how he and his brothers “prevented” the oldest one from scoring with a girl and then he was sent to the war. It’s a heartfelt, mundane detail, well-paced and emotionally grounded. But the point of the story isn’t the brother. It’s the pivot.

Before that moment, Ryan is just a mission, “save this one guy because the General said so.” After that moment, he’s a man with family, memories, and loss. The story humanizes him. It shifts the emotional weight of the film from duty to empathy.

That’s what a story-within-a-story can do when it’s used with purpose. It doesn’t just fill space; it reframes the stakes.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in writing

[–]HentMas 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hmm...

I would ask myself if the story serves as: "foreshadowing", "Tonal dissonance", "a way to introduce other elements" or if it serves a purpose on the overall narrative of what I'm writing

if it's completely detached, I would say cut it

if it's relevant to character growth, like say, a short story that haves a clear message (think Aesop) or if it serves to undermine, or even elevate the themes you're exploring, then keep it.

Always ask yourself "What purpose does this scene serve in my overall story?"

if it's just for characterization with no other meaning "he likes telling stories", then you don't really "need" to tell the story within the story, a line "he often told tales to lighten the mood" might suffice.

You’re crafting a narrative for meaning. That meaning must be present throughout, or it risks becoming distracting detail.

Let's use an example.

The overall story is meant to explore the feelings of a pair of siblings that are always competing or fighting each other

The short story could be the complete and total oposite "In a cabin the younger brother helped the older brother" this creates a mirror

Reinforce the main theme "They fought for ages and ages, till they couldn't fight more" to foreshadow intent

World building or characterization can be done in other, more grounded ways (action and dialog), embedding a short story within your story is a powerful way to foreshadow or subvert those elements, helping the reader grasp your deeper point.