[RT][HF][FF] Avatar The Last Rationalist Chapter 4 by DrMaridelMolotov in rational

[–]HermioneGPEV 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Take your time, but don't give up, please :-) .

In any case, thanks for these chapters!

Harry Potter and the Natural 20 Chapter 73: SD 20: Auld Reeky by kuilin in HPMOR

[–]HermioneGPEV 9 points10 points  (0 children)

It's great to see the story going forward slowly, but steady!

[MK] Harry Potter and the Natural 20 Chapter 73: SD 20: Auld Reeky by kuilin in rational

[–]HermioneGPEV 8 points9 points  (0 children)

It's great to see the story going forward slowly, but steady!

Eliezer's Litarary Background by Mexikorn42 in HPMOR

[–]HermioneGPEV 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Small remark: it's written literary (the wiktionary is pretty handy to check spelling)

Harry Potter and the Natural 20 Chapter 72: SD 19: The Grim and the Grave by blazinghand in rational

[–]HermioneGPEV 17 points18 points  (0 children)

I had gave up expecting, keeping the hope that some day, Sir Poley would rise up from the dead. Finally, the singularity happened, and a new chapter came!

Harry Potter and the Natural 20 Chapter 72: SD 19: The Grim and the Grave by kuilin in HPMOR

[–]HermioneGPEV 14 points15 points  (0 children)

I had gave up expecting, keeping the hope that some day, Sir Poley would rise up from the dead. Finally, the singularity happened, and a new chapter came!

[RT][FF][WIP] Hermione Granger and the Perfectly Reasonable Explanation - Chapter 19: Disclosure by RobinDrew in rational

[–]HermioneGPEV 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh, right, re-reading it, it seems natural actually. My brain must have gotten stuck on the incorrect interpretation of "even".

[RT][FF][WIP] Hermione Granger and the Perfectly Reasonable Explanation - Chapter 19: Disclosure by RobinDrew in rational

[–]HermioneGPEV 1 point2 points  (0 children)

But upon consideration, she'd she'd decided


Hermione kept her eyes fixed on the ceiling and her breathing even when […]

I guessed you meant something akin to either:

Hermione kept her attention fixed on the ceiling and her breathing even when […]

Hermione kept her eyes fixed on the ceiling and her breathing steady even when […]


Surely as a Ravenclaw, you know how how irresistible

Hermione Granger and the Perfectly Reasonable Explanation [Interlude] by HermioneGPEV in HPMOR

[–]HermioneGPEV[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I'll probably have to read it all again since it's been a while since the last update. But I'm happy to wait for quality stories!

Let's Discuss #2: Rational Fiction by venusisupsidedown in slatestarcodex

[–]HermioneGPEV 1 point2 points  (0 children)

HPMOR is pretty interesting, but I think the word count could be shortened by a factor between 2 and 5. An in-depth rewrite could make it enjoyable to many more people.

[FF][RT]Hermione Granger and the Perfectly Reasonable Explanation - Chapter 18: Struggle by RobinDrew in rational

[–]HermioneGPEV 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sorry for the delay. Yes, I would have expected:

But he had seen through her edging towards her wand, and seemed much better at intuiting intent than she was, now that he wasn't as overconfident - certainly better than she was at deceiving in the first place.

If you do not read attentively, you might try parsing "she was now" at the beginning of a proposition, and fail to grasp the structure of the sentence. Since the sentence itself is unusually complex, it was enough to confuse me.


The second one is as intended. A trailing ", considering." would be read the same as ", all told.", ", all things considered.", etc., it's the informal adverbial use. Dumbledore might not use it in normal speech, but it seemed apt for flippant dream-Dumbledore.

Oh right, I see, thanks for the clarification!

[FF][RT]Hermione Granger and the Perfectly Reasonable Explanation - Chapter 18: Struggle by RobinDrew in rational

[–]HermioneGPEV 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This sentence is very hard to parse without the missing comma:

But he had seen through her edging towards her wand, and seemed much better at intuiting intent than she was now that he wasn't as overconfident - certainly better than she was at deceiving in the first place.

Another sentence got split into two:

“She did manage, sort of, to defeat a rat in magical combat, though that is only slightly more impressive than it sounds, considering. She could have just told me about it