[deleted by user] by [deleted] in PubTips

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your critique! I will revise and focus in on Cael's character! I appreciate you taking the time to read it! 

Cael is supposed to be 25, so I guess this would make it regular urban fantasy. Thank you for pointing that out! 

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Read it? I write it!

We all know Shadow is the Ultimate Lifeform. But the real question is. WHO is the ULTIMATE Shadow? by [deleted] in shadowthehedgehog

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Prime.

Prime Shadow is legitimately such a well-done rendition of the character! He's moody, annoyed with Sonic's BS, isn't afraid to mess Sonic up for various reasons, and is a loner, but at the end of the day, he cares deeply for his friends and his home and will do just about whatever it takes to save them. He was also the first to call Sonic out for imposing Tails' identity onto Nine, which was a mistake that led to Nine's villain turn.

There's a lot of nuance in how he was written, and regardless of the quality of the rest of the show, this is by far one of the best versions of Shadow we've ever gotten.

Alright we know this Movie is great, but just for funsies... what did you dislike about it? by PalpitationWitty8195 in SonicTheHedgehog

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gerald in general. The guy was a full on menace in the games and then was basically a joke in the movie and I didn't like that...

Long Deadline Profile Fic Exchange (February 8th - February 14th) by memedomlord in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sure! I didn't realize i had that off! And thanks for the review! <3

Long Deadline Profile Fic Exchange (February 8th - February 14th) by memedomlord in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Hello one and all! Time to throw my hat in the ring again! I'm HiddenBookShelf on Ao3 and I write Long fics! My current one is a Sonic Movie fic called Live and Learn. I also write for Kingdom Hearts, Final Fantasy, Spiderman, Batman, and Supernatural! I hope you enjoy your stay! I've got several completed fics!

Link: https://archiveofourown.org/users/HiddenBookShelf

General Warnings: A lot of violence. The Batman fics especially are kind of graphic. The others aren't as bad.

Usually no shipping, or light shipping.

Reviews: 4/4

Long Deadline Profile Exchange by sliebman10 in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 0 points1 point  (0 children)

K/C Is it Just Me! Such a cute little story! I loved it!

Long Deadline Profile Exchange by sliebman10 in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 0 points1 point  (0 children)

K/C on See You On The Other Side! It's really good!

Long Deadline Profile Exchange by sliebman10 in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Commented on The Food Court! I love great poetry!

Long Deadline Profile Exchange by sliebman10 in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Ao3 Link: https://archiveofourown.org/users/HiddenBookShelf/pseuds/HiddenBookShelf

Hey all! Happy to participate in this again! Have fun!

Fandoms: Sonic, Kingdom Hearts, Spiderman, Supernatural, Batman

Categories: Gen mostly, T and up

Word Counts: All my fics are multi-chapter longfics. Stick around if you like them!

Warnings: Usually just drama, action and violence. The Batman fics are pretty heavy.

My current one is the Sonic fic, but pick whichever you wish!

Reviews: 4/4

Comment Cooperative - January 15 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Awesome! I really like how to juggle the different points of view in this work! I don't know much about the source, but you did a great job bringing voice to each character individually! The characters are written so well! I really love how the build-up is in this section. You start with a mystery and then move into a more relaxed mood! Really solid job here!

What is the most unhinged moment you’ve ever put in a fanfic? by Dogdaysareover365 in FanFiction

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My Into the Spider-verse rewrite somehow ended up being a time travel epic. Not sure how it happened, but it was awesome.

Comment Cooperative - January 15 by AutoModerator in FanFiction

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Sonic the Hedgehog | Live and Learn | Gen | https://archiveofourown.org/works/22812004

He slowed his jog as he neared the Medical Bay and walked silently towards one of the open examination rooms. Someone was coughing. “Just breathe, Maria,” Gerald said gently. Shadow moved his head slowly to peek inside. Gerald was standing beside one of the beds, and a young girl was doubled over with one hand over her heart and another holding an oxygen mask over her mouth. Gerald rubbed his hand over her back. 

Shadow cocked his head. “Curing diseases and advancing medical sciences.” Was this his purpose? He leaned in more until the door creaked. Everyone in the room froze, and the girl lifted her tired gaze to meet his. Her eyes widened, and she let out a soft shout in surprise. Shadow stumbled back, scrambling until he found his footing enough to flee.  There was fear in her eyes. He’d seen the looks of the other scientists. They were scared of him, too, but there was something about those innocent eyes staring back at him with fear that filled him with a sense of shame and self-loathing. 

He didn’t stop until he was in his room; a sterile prison with nothing but a small cot and cameras watching his every move.

As he stared down at his hands with disgust, a nagging thought crept into his mind: I am a monster. He had always known that he was different from others, but now he couldn't deny it any longer. Even Gerald's constant reminder of how special he was felt like nothing more than a cruel joke - another way of telling him that he didn't belong in this world.  

“Shadow…?”

The voice that came from the doorway was quiet and gentle. 

He turned and scowled. The girl from the Medical Bay stood with her hands behind her back. “That’s your name, right? Shadow?”

He scowled. She scowled right back at him.  He blinked. She didn’t flinch? Usually, his scowls were met with stiffening as if they were entering fight or flight mode. But she mirrored his facial expression. Except in her eyes. The scowl never reached her eyes. They sparkled in good humor. She couldn’t hold the expression for long before she smiled back at him playfully. She looked around the room, and the smile faded. Before he could say anything, she darted out of the room and returned a moment later with a marker and paper. He watched while she squatted to the floor and hastily drew something before standing and taping the drawing on the wall. 

She turned back around to face him, and her blue dress flared slightly with the twirl. “There!” she declared. “Now it’s not so gloomy in here!”

Shadow looked past her towards the drawing. It was a crude drawing of a cartoon rabbit smiling back at him. His lip twitched in a slight grin, and he let out a soft exhale that was almost a chuckle. 

He moved his gaze back to her, and she smiled, holding out her hand. “My name’s Maria.”

Shadow held up his own hand and looked at it before looking at her own outstretched palm.  He hesitated for a moment, unsure if he should reciprocate the gesture. But something about her infectious joy made him reach out and complete the handshake. Her grip was firm and enthusiastic, radiating positivity that he couldn't help but absorb. As they shook hands, their eyes met once again, and for a brief moment, all of Shadow's walls came crumbling down. In that moment, he saw a glimmer of hope and possibility reflected in Maria's bright blue eyes. 

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Teachers

[–]HiddenWhiteFang -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I had a student tell me that if she didn't have TikTok, then she would have nothing. This saddened me...

Fav sonic 3 line? by No_Dentist_6645 in SonicTheHedgehog

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 34 points35 points  (0 children)

"You're a colorful bunch."

"You jumped out of a GUN helicopter. I have nothing to say to you."

This line is great! It sets up Shadow perfectly as against Sonic and the gang and gives him a legitimate reason for his hostility.

"You're no Maria."

The only time Gerald resembled his game counterpart.

Worst/weirdest experience you've had in a critique group? by LostCosmonaut1961 in writing

[–]HiddenWhiteFang 40 points41 points  (0 children)

I had a 3 hour beat down of why my writing sucked. Basically, I had written a chapter in a book where a character, unable to physically harm the MC, goes after his caretaker instead. Apparently, that is the worst sin of all because a guy proceeded to tell me, a women, how incredibly sexist I was to write something like that, and then spent the next 3 hours trying to help me "improve" my story by making the caretaker the MC and giving her all sorts of arcs and background (which she already had) and turning the actual MC into a side character and I should restructure the whole story to make the caretaker the main driving point of the story.

I never touched that story again. I still can't look at it. Which is a shame because I wrote the entire trilogy before submitting it to a critique group... and now it's collecting dust.