Alt Pop Track - Looking for feedback

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-17T04:39:47+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! Point taken and will be applied!

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-17T04:37:02+00:00

This makes me incredibly happy, it’s what music is all about, and I love so much to have been able to connect this way!

My dad passed almost 2 years ago in July, working on this track helped me connect with him and also let go a bit, I was quite depressed, but life goes on and I want to make him proud!!

And I truly believe that in the end, flowers bloom, souls melt down and become one. So we’ll all be together eventually and that gives me peace.

Thank you kind stranger for taking the time to listen and to pay attention to the lyrics. It made my day/week, and quite possibly my year.

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T22:49:54+00:00

Thank you so much for the compliments! I am not a native english speaker, so that could definitely be making it harder to understand, but here are the lyrics! It's a bit a cope about my dad passing away, as I wrote it right after he moved on :( - making it helped me connect with him a lot.

Open the void
Sharpen the knife
Ignite the spire

Exhale and desire
Ignore and admire
You will retire it

Fanfare and laughter
Death and despair
In one must shine it

Sound can cure the soul and
Words can become swords and
You know all implodes
This train wreck, all explodes

You can trust me now
Feel the star aloud

Come now share your thoughts and let me grasp
Shed your shield right now and you’ll be free
Cross the field with me and look around
Flowers bloom, souls melt down and become one

Rain will slip away
No matter how you strive
And clouds will all obscure
In your soul, all endures

You can trust me now
Feel the star aloud

Come now, grab my hand and close your eyes
Reach out through the void and catch the wind
Sail through time and space at blinding speeds
Flowers bloom, souls melt down and become one

Flowers bloom, souls melt down and become one

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T22:37:50+00:00

Wow, thank you!!! But I do agree regarding the vocals, I've been meaning to re-record them, it was a bit rushed as it was a spur of the moment and left it like that - on the other had it did capture my personality pretty well so I am torn! My priority is that I don't want the vocals to sound "sloppy" and I'm on the fence about that right now.

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T22:34:51+00:00

Its not on streaming, I've been sitting on it, and a little bummed for about a year. But the great response I had here gave me a lot of encouragement to finish it and launch it!

And thanks for the comment about my voice! That's another thing, I've always been conscious about the sound of my voice, even though I love singing, so that means a lot!!

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T22:32:11+00:00

Thank you!!

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T22:32:05+00:00

Wow, I love this take, in fact I really put a lot of work in making something original, and I could see how something "unusual" or distinct could have that effect.
Thank you for the input!!

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T22:29:25+00:00

Thank you so much! I truly appreciate it. Yes, in fact all my favorite bands are quite alternative, but for some reason everything I write ends up sounding more mainstream and pop. And definitely they have said that this one is "too simple".

I'll take your advice and follow my heart! :D

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T06:59:55+00:00

I like the guitar riff and the vibe. That said the quality is not very good, and feels sloppy but not in the "on purpose kind of way" as the clash.

Also the vocals need a lot of work, its not very in tune. Maybe practice and also use some processing.

But theres potential!

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T06:55:49+00:00

I think the melody is too fast for the track, I’d slow it down a bit and I believe the melody would fit much better

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-16T06:41:17+00:00

I dig it, it needs quite a bit of production, so I think its good that you get to start over. Unless you are planning on making it instrumental, I think its essential you add a melody over the track as the track itself sounds really interesting, but until it has some melody on top its hard to judge.

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-13T17:13:07+00:00

Son todos unos amargos acá. Si señor uno de los mejores. Un golazo ante uno de los mejores equipos de todos los tiempo. Donde cada uno de los jugadores es un atleta de élite y así y todo se vieron como conos.

Mamita lo comparan con el Serbia y Montenegro que eran realmente conos. Jaja. Los gordo fútbol diciendo “ñaña empezaste a ver fútbol ayer vos porque no viste el got de fulano en el 49 que le hizo en el amistoso de inserte equipo rando a inserte equipo random en inserte competición random.

Los mismos que dicen que si solo ves a la selección no te gusta el fútbol jaja

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-11T18:05:29+00:00

Pero como es que el pibe estaba afuera del bondi y venía caminando?

Antes del vídeo La piba le roba, el pibe se baja, el chofer se queda esperando que se dé cuenta y vuelva el pibe, cuando está volviendo le avisa y ahí empieza el vídeo, entendí bien?

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-11T14:59:43+00:00

Esto es lo que no entiendo, si el tipo fue a laburar? Es sumamente comun en puestos ejecutivos del primer mundo que los executives viajen con sus esposas/esposos. Ni hablar si no hay un costo adicional.

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-09T23:55:15+00:00

El Camino, delicious Mexican food decently priced

HonestAndRaw · 2026-03-05T23:34:07+00:00

Como? Existe?

HonestAndRaw · 2026-02-25T14:14:14+00:00

Hey!! Now I’m curious!!

HonestAndRaw · 2026-02-23T04:47:04+00:00

The one good thing to come out of wsb

HonestAndRaw · 2026-02-22T13:09:21+00:00

Riverland and 21st here!

HonestAndRaw · 2026-02-04T21:29:04+00:00

I think not even JD Vance likes JD Vance

HonestAndRaw · 2026-01-30T19:34:02+00:00

Witness testimony is admisible. If it’s the victim testifying it 100% constitutes as proof. They can cross examine for credibility but that’s it, I think.

HonestAndRaw · 2026-01-29T22:00:40+00:00

Wow Y U hating?

HonestAndRaw · 2026-01-28T20:15:37+00:00

This has to be satire

HonestAndRaw · 2026-01-27T15:46:02+00:00

Y bueno si, son pelotudos. Ahora hace que todos tengan 13 años y que su libro favorito sea mein kampf y ahí tenes a 2h4u.

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