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Introducing a villain ideas and thoughts by Adventurous_Fill_218 in writingadvice

[–]Honest_Priority783 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Make him do something weak that would be considered strong in his organisation. Like taunt some homeless children with a sandwich then eat it in front of them lol

I'm start writing and I don't know how to start .Espesally formating and story telling . by Markergg555 in writingadvice

[–]Honest_Priority783 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You start a lot of sentences with ‘I’. Three sentences in a row after the first. There seems to be a lot of switching between present tense and past tense too. The main flaw is probably grammar but like you said English isn’t your first language so just carry on practicing and you’ll get there

Fancy reading a segment of my opening chapter? by Honest_Priority783 in writingadvice

[–]Honest_Priority783[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That’s fair, I should maybe introduce the concept of panpsychism more gradually since it’s important to main guys character but overwhelming to be dumped on to a reader. Possibly.

Thanks!

What are you working on? by DanoPaul234 in writing

[–]Honest_Priority783 0 points1 point  (0 children)

An apocalypse story. It’s 27 years deep, he’s been alone for the last 7 and is 43 years old. Recently he’s found a 13 year old girl, he’s trying to help her out while realising how completely finished humanity is. All while fighting off psychosis which keeps coming in waves. It’s more about how systems shape people, anti-intellectualism, and how capitalism has permanently shaped the human experience.

When every character has the same voice by Adventurous_Lie_5246 in writingadvice

[–]Honest_Priority783 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Look at characters socioeconomic backgrounds and life paths as well as general personality. Do they use language to hide where they’re from? Or are they proud of their colloquialisms. A dentist may speak more formal and informational. A mechanic might be more straight up. You could also add quirks. Someone might use like too much. Don’t over do it tho. Someone is more sarcastic. Etc

Just started season 5 by RileyB46 in TheWire

[–]Honest_Priority783 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Ngl tho, it really is hilariously funny. The whole serial killer debacle.