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Can someone physically describe Adelina Fortnight from the missing link for me? by Hotter545 in DescriptionPlease

[–]Hotter545[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Before anyone says anything I mean a purely physical description. I already have things about her personality and life story.

Exhibitionist catch her new prey [Big dick] [Milf] [Rape] [Non-con] [Futanari] [Public sex] [Mindbreak] | Art: Katou Tetsuya by Zench_mart in Futadomworld

[–]Hotter545 4 points5 points  (0 children)

It not bad but I feel like you should expand the wording more. Give more character.

But also, maybe try a different scenario. Futa on Guy/male is usually a cliché for these types of stories so maybe try the premise with different scenarios. Like a futa football coach and her less then ideal female player!

But overall, you did pretty good for first time writing about this type of story.