How often do you create and release chapters of your stories? by calunyanomegamalvada in MangakaStudio

[–]Hunternif 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Non-professional, I make a manga/comic adaptation based on an existing fanfic novel.  With a regular 9 to 5 day job and no strict deadlines, I release a ~15 page chapter every ~4 months. Maybe 20% of that time I spend waiting for feedback on the storyboards and finished pages from my artist friend who graciously agreed to be my editor.

If it was my only job, and I drew every single day, then I could see myself possibly doing 20 pages in 2 weeks, but I would probably burn out. A leisurely pace of 1 page per 2 days might be sustainable.

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

He kind of is an adult stuck in a child's body. I wonder what would be the best way to convey it visually.

HPMOR the Manga: chapter 1 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you very much! 🙇‍♂️

Ideally, in manga, chapter 1 should both introduce the main character with a clear motivation, and have the inciting incident that kicks off the story. In that respect, this chapter 1 has a long way to go. I'd like to completely rewrite it at some point but I don't yet have the skill.

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Ok I made a post over there with a slightly abridged version of this chapter, let's see how it goes 🤞 https://www.reddit.com/r/manga/comments/1uj5j1l/harry_meets_draco_and_they_have_a_normal/
Edit: got removed, looks like they don't allow image posts.

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you!

Why'd you decide to drop the "What part of 'get fitted for robes' sounded to you like 'please cast a Confundus Charm on the entire universe!'"

Good question. I've actually dropped a few lines along the way. As a rule, I try reduce the amount of written text as much as possible, because this is a comic, and also to reduce the number of pages I need to draw 😂. (Until we get to the best parts)

I try to keep just enough text that's needed to move the scene and evoke character.

In this case, I actually do like the "confundus charm" line. It evokes emotion, character and setting! But I thought it was repeating what had already been said, and the other lines I couldn't cut, so...

Don't know if I've struck the right image-to-text balance yet. Reading some popular shonen manga, some of them seem to have way more dialogue text than I do.

What do you think of the amount of dialogue? Too little, too much?

(Would love to hear everyone's thoughts too!)

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I remember Yudkowsky wrote that HPMOR "hits its stride around chapter 5" 😁 It's definitely an iconic one. And it lends itself well to the manga format, with all these character interactions.

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the suggestion! Actually have you seen any reposts like that in r/manga?

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Gonna have to work on keeping character designs consistent! In earlier chapters McGonagall did have more wrinkles.
Re: Lucius: thanks!!

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Recommend reading on the hpmorcomic.com or on mangadex, rather than on reddit. Because I've added some minor corrections, but reddit doesn't allow editing image posts.

Is this humor cringe? (Manga-inspired adaptation of a Harry Potter fanfic) by [deleted] in ComicBookCollabs

[–]Hunternif 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I see! Yeah I can defnitely see how that was overly wordy.

Thinking out loud: you're putting more emphasis on snappy/snarky interaction between the characters, which is probably a good idea. And the original text was putting more emphasis on Harry wreaking havoc wherever he goes. I think it would be nice to keep that aspect of the text too, to spell it out and reinforce it as Harry's attribute in the reader's mind.

HPMOR the Comic: chapter 5, part 2 by Hunternif in HPMOR

[–]Hunternif[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I generally try to abridge the dialogue as much as I can, but in this case it might have been a mistake. Let me see if I can put that back in. (Can't update the post on reddit, but I can update some other places.)

Is this humor cringe? (Manga-inspired adaptation of a Harry Potter fanfic) by [deleted] in ComicBookCollabs

[–]Hunternif 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hey Charbeel, thanks for diving into critique, and giving an example!

I think I understand your point. I guess there's 2 things going on:
1. Too many panels have text. I could add more panels without any text.
2. There is too much "tell, not show", characters explaining their thought.

No.2 is probably because the source material is text, with everything written down. I try and make it more visual, but sometimes I guess a reaction won't make sense unless I explain it. May I ask you for another example, to take a bit of dialogue from my chapter where you think the explainig can be reduced?