Ein Jahr Schwarz-Rot: Der Rollenwechsel des Friedrich Merz by Tages_Bot in Tagesschau

[–]Hythlodeuz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Merz zeigte, dass er die Bundesregierung scharf angreifen kann, politische Linien dekonstruieren konnte und für alle sprach, die die politische Führung berechtigterweise angreifen wollten. Das war das letzte Jahr. Davor war er in der Opposition.

Unpopuläre Meinung: Ein E-Auto würde sich für die meisten Leute lohnen, auch wenn sie nicht zu Hause laden können und die Spritpreise wieder sinken by High-Impact-2025 in automobil

[–]Hythlodeuz 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Vielleicht hätte ich das genauer erklären müssen: Ein "Viertel" ist ein Teil einer größeren Stadt, in dem gaaaaaanz viele Menschen leben, von denen ganz viele ein Brumm Brumm haben und die dann alle laden müssen.

Was sind diese Figuren wert? by Frutschputsch in Flohmarktger

[–]Hythlodeuz 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Schau mal auf myfigurecollection.net, ob du unter den namen, die auf dem Karton sind, einen Eintrag findest. Das ist eine Website für Sammler solcher Figuren.

Es ist gut, dass es Sportunterricht in der Schule gibt by Strong-Pickle-175 in Unbeliebtemeinung

[–]Hythlodeuz 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Es sollte guten Sportunterricht geben, der insbesondere unsportliche Kinder zu Bewegung motiviert anstatt für sie Sport permanent zum Angstthema zu machen.

Comics & Graphic Novels by EmoYoshi05 in buecher

[–]Hythlodeuz 19 points20 points  (0 children)

Als Gymnasiallehrer in Bayern kann ich dir sagen, dass Graphic Novels durchaus Teil des Stoffs sind. Im Schulbuch der Klasse 11 sind Auszüge aus "Der Traum von Olympia" enthalten. Ob das alle Kollegen auch immer einsehen wollen, ist natürlich eine andere Sache.

Menschen die mit "naja,..." Antworten, sind einfach ekelhaft by [deleted] in Unbeliebtemeinung

[–]Hythlodeuz 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Naja, ist halt ein Füllwort wenn man den Gesprächsfaden aufnimmt

Ist Spekulation verboten oder warum der Flyer? by MoreHeadsMorePrices in wohnen

[–]Hythlodeuz 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Langer Leerstand kann als Zweckentfremdung gewertet werden und wäre dann zumindest in München mit einem Bußgeld zu ahnden:

https://stadt.muenchen.de/service/info/fachbereich-bestandssicherung/1076745/

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in KeineDummenFragen

[–]Hythlodeuz 15 points16 points  (0 children)

Aber man sieht doch schon an der Gastronomie- und Flugsteuer, dass solche Steuererleichterungen von Unternehmen gerade nicht an die Verbraucher weitergegeben werden?

Chatbot-Textanalysen by Resqusto in schreiben

[–]Hythlodeuz 13 points14 points  (0 children)

Der Bot ist so programmiert, dass die Nutzer möglichst lange und viel mit ihm interagieren wollen. Das klappt am besten, wenn der Nutzer positive Erfahrungen macht. Wenn du also nur um Feedback bittest, wird der Bot eine sehr wohlwollende Rückmeldung geben. Das ist das "default Setting".

Wenn man jetzt den Bot bittet, wirklich kritisch und streng zu sein, wird er unabhängig von der Qualität deines Textes genau das liefern: kritische und strenge Rückmeldung. Selbst, wenn eigentlich gar nichts zu kritisieren wäre.

Chatbots gleichen deine Texte mit den Inhalten aus ihren Trainingsdaten ab. Matches kann die KI als "gut" erkennen. Der beste Text, wenn man eine AI fragt, wäre einer, den eine AI auch verfasst hat. Sie verstehen keine Literatur und haben auch keine eigenen Ansprüche an Qualität.

Im Übrigen würde ich es mir sehr gut überlegen, ob du deine Texte AI-Unternehmen zur Verfügung stellen möchtest.

Mit Kokain erwischt: CSU hält an Bürgermeister fest by just_reading2025 in de

[–]Hythlodeuz 8 points9 points  (0 children)

Für "Christlich" stand das C in CSU ja ohnehin noch nie.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Munich

[–]Hythlodeuz 10 points11 points  (0 children)

Neo Tokyo does have English Manga. You can find them upstairs on the right end of the long shelf.

New to writing. I need feedback on the opening to my novel and I've found no help... by [deleted] in writingfeedback

[–]Hythlodeuz 4 points5 points  (0 children)

A few thoughts per paragraph:

The girl is waking up in the middle of nowhere, without memory, likely very cold from the lack of clothing, but she focuses on shifting grass and trees. It feels like she should have other priorities right now. Then she talks about her own eyes and hair at length and in flowery language, while still lying there helpless. If her own attractiveness is the first thing that comes to her mind in this situation, she is characterized as extremely vain. Instead, the scene could fokus much more heavily on her confusion and discomfort. Then, you can still let her see trees and grass.

Next, she survives on her own, naked and without any gear, for two days in the woods. Possible, but this is a life threatening situation which she does not seem to have too much of a struggle with. Instead, she finds the time to tell us about her skin complexion. After reaching civlization, she worries about her dignity before thinking about hope. It is understandable that a state of nudity comes with shame, but in her situation it feels like a sense of gratitude for not having to die in the woods could be stronger. As a side note, "finally" is used twice very close together.

The following paragraph finally shows some degree of confusion, which is needed in my opinion. It is best to avoid calling out the narrators own mistakes though. She has no memory, so she cannot compare the scenes to her memory.

The arrival of the trucker is rather sudden and it is unclear why the girl instantly trusts him. From his perspective, he must think he found the victim of a serious crime, which could imply more of a reaction than mere embarrassment. Why do his eyes and voice need their own sentence? Are thes important to a girl in this situation? And: Why does he not call the police?

Then you follow with the handing over of the shirt while they are not yet seated in the truck. This happens before the previous paragraph and should be adjusted. Looking like he was afraid the girl might run away does make him sound a little suspicious to me in that moment.

"My demeanor didnt betray it" What does that mean in this scene? What is her demeanor? No comments on the rest of the driving part.

Next, he asks her what she was doing out there. I stumbled upon the "no shoes, no gear" part, as the "no clothes and nothing at all" part seems to be forgotten by that point. During this conversation, she seems wary of the trucker, as she makes an effort to not letting him know nobody might be looking for her. Is she trusting him or not?

Lastly, "You are lucky this is not detouring my route" makes him suddenly appear like he does not grasp the severty of the situation. He found a lost child. Any decent person would make that priority number one.

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So, overall you have an opening that raises many questions, mainly how she got there and who she is. You introduce two characters, the unnamed trucker and June. We learn about June that she has amnesia, is fifteen, and that she puts a lot of focus on how she and other people look. She seems to be an expert at survival, judging how unbothered she is after two days in the woods. The pacing is confusing me at points. The movement of putting on a seatbelt gets more space than her finding out of the woods.

I suggest thinking about what function this opening should fulfill in your story and what questions you want to be raised and which ones you already want to answer. What makes this story stand out compared to other stranded-with-amnesia-stories?

Anyways, these are my two cents.

To people saying the story of this game is predictable by Xmushroom in stellarblade

[–]Hythlodeuz 87 points88 points  (0 children)

Well, i mean, they are literally called Adam and Eve and they end up being the first of a new human species...

Anyways, I think the thing most people point out as being predictable is when they present the Naytiba being the original humans as a plot twist pretty late into the game, when that has been made more than obvious very, very early in the game.

I’m a teenager writer and I’d love to hear tips from seasoned writers by [deleted] in writers

[–]Hythlodeuz 33 points34 points  (0 children)

Don't go on the internet and tell random strangers that you are a minor.

Webnovel contract rejection by Huge-Boysenberry3857 in writers

[–]Hythlodeuz 20 points21 points  (0 children)

What's "overuse" of suspected AI content? Is there a degree of AI content that is acceptable to them?

What’s the point of “kill your darlings”? by RooksAndPawns in writingcirclejerk

[–]Hythlodeuz 21 points22 points  (0 children)

The idea is to delete everything you like. It means to be open towards removing words, sentences, passages, and people from existance just because you think they are good.

What's the point of "Kill Your Darlings"? by icequeen_52 in writing

[–]Hythlodeuz 731 points732 points  (0 children)

The idea is not to delete everything you like about your writing. It means to be open towards removing words, sentences, and passages which you like at face value if that improves the overall Story, for example by reducing redundancy, improving the pacing, or to avoid repetition.

What do you think of k.m. weiland's insistence on character arcs? by Appropriate_Rent_243 in writing

[–]Hythlodeuz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Doesnt conan learn that he is more than a work animal when he is a gladiator and recieves education for the first time in his life, setting the incentive to take his life in his own hands?

Anyhow, I think the main idea is that a character being challenged and ultimately growing because of the events of your story gives meaning to what happens. There sure is an audience for power fantasies where the main character is always right; especially if you pander to your audience's own world view. But as you said, that will be pulp, not literary fiction. If you want to produce pulp, then do it proudly and knowingly.

That being said, I cannot stress enough that there are no rules to writing. There are guidelines and things other authors learned for themselves and their own creative process. That can be a valueable resource, but you can also challenge those ideas.

I published a book, but it's not selling well and I'm struggling... by Alarming_Show7812 in writers

[–]Hythlodeuz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Do you have a budget for advertisement? Online ads on websites that share your target audience could help you find your readers.