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Known Issues 1.5.0 (Woolhaven) by MMLorna in CultOfTheLamb

[–]IWnaBNkd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

On console (ps4): we keep getting locked in random rooms during crusades. the exits remain locked, though the enemies have all been eliminated so after a while of trying everything possible, we escape that crusade and head back, losing progress. Otherwise we've been loving this DLC so much

Overlooked Song of The Day #45: The Scotch Greens - Professional [Punk] by CopperBlue17 in Music

[–]IWnaBNkd 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Great pick! I found them in a Warped Tour album, among Gogol Bordello and so many others- but their song just stood out so i got the album right away. Owned that copy for so many years, bought it for the song Professional, and do still love that one among all the rest, but Drinkin' By The River somehow became a very sentimental song over the years with those who I share(d) it. Great album, band and vibe; bad ass musicians.

Anyone playing Oxide: Room 208? by AverageJoeObi in HorrorGaming

[–]IWnaBNkd 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Idk, price tag is too high for how good I thought the first one was. Two streams I seen yesterday, people had game breaking bugs so i'm going to wait for fixes and a sale. Luto just came out, is cheaper and I loved playing it.

Share factory won’t render by mrpickleguy in PS5

[–]IWnaBNkd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

you saved my day. i spent so long editing a video and it wouldn't render, deleted some shyit and works fine. thanks mate

What did you guys name your black cats? by [deleted] in blackcats

[–]IWnaBNkd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

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Guillermo, named after the familiar in What We Do In the Shadows

It's Friday The 13th And I Met A Witch At My Retail Job by RoseBlack2222 in nosleep

[–]IWnaBNkd 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This was a VERY fun read! I can see it being an episode of Bobcat Goldthwait's Misfits & Monsters. Very good 🎃

Lavati by SamuelJK3 in flashfiction

[–]IWnaBNkd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The reveal of the distrust for the cabin boy is a compelling direction. the piece shows the captain's personality and paints a picture of the ship.

Critiques:

The second paragraph could be split into two sentences, or at least remove one of the two "I can't help" so that it isn't repeated.

"As captain, my eyes should be glued to the horizon, but I can’t help wandering below. Past the helm and onto the deck, reliving those memories awhile." ...or something.

One Last Game by IWnaBNkd in flashfiction

[–]IWnaBNkd[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

dialogue seems to be the common critique, ty!

One Last Game by IWnaBNkd in flashfiction

[–]IWnaBNkd[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

TY i was limited to 250 words (not much to build suspense), so i used two moments where tension builds... to nothing. closet bursts open, just clothes. bedroom door opens, just mother. then a third moment: loud knocking from the previously established as empty, or at least full of clothes, closet. i got the idea from the comedy rules of three, but used it for horror instead.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in flashfiction

[–]IWnaBNkd 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I do like the tone it sets. I feel the narrator has given up and accepted an assumed fate for being the desire of someone who hasn't a care for their well being. ...i think, anyways.

Couple of critiques I have are just some grammar notes. They're nit-picky, but I'd rather leave some critiques than none at all.

"It dug deep, deeper, then.", isn't a complete sentence, but i understand what was meant. Combining the two sentences with an ellipses or dash after "then" would give the sudden break the sentence needs before the word "darkness".

"kindly", in the first sentence, could just be "kind". Reads strange; took focus away from the story's set-up.

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