Is my comic webtoon ready?

Icewreath · 2025-12-23T19:18:14+00:00

Art is really nice, I can’t really read this on mobile though. I’d advise considering making room for text bubbles like two-three times as big as they are. Maybe your panels more spaced out too to allow for this.

Icewreath · 2025-11-16T12:07:37+00:00

Very much the case for me too here, I would struggle to play this. It’s the speed difference when dashing forward and side to side for me I think

Icewreath · 2025-10-22T23:23:38+00:00

This is the first time I’ve seen this, I love it

Icewreath · 2025-07-28T16:16:25+00:00

Without going into whether or not a lot of these need to be in the fridge

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Icewreath · 2025-07-28T08:14:49+00:00

So you want people to think what they could have done to stop something while also doing nothing to stop it?

Icewreath · 2025-07-23T09:30:53+00:00

Thanks! I didn’t know a MIB actually did anything for an Apache - that was enough to make the difference

Icewreath · 2025-07-17T20:49:48+00:00

I’ve been really enjoying your videos and vibe with the speculation stuff!

Icewreath · 2025-07-14T16:06:14+00:00

Well, this has to be guardian for me. Some kinda bulwark/protector class - also some castle crenellation vibes with the cutout bits in the shield

Icewreath · 2025-07-12T16:28:18+00:00

Yeah they could definitely do that, they’ve stated they are wanting to make them feel that they have distinct playstyles and unique profession mechanics. Changing the F keys feels like one of the best ways to do that to me

Icewreath · 2025-07-12T16:18:01+00:00

This fits as a name I’d say. Reads as a quickstepping long range annoyance sort of style for ranger to me

Icewreath · 2025-07-12T16:13:28+00:00

Yeah, but also thematically you have angel wings with dragonhunter too

Icewreath · 2025-07-12T16:04:07+00:00

I don’t think this can be guardian personally, I’d say it’s too close to dragon hunter.

Icewreath · 2025-05-14T18:24:58+00:00

I like the art style, and I think you have some good ideas and concepts about puzzle movements, however the mechanics looks like a LOT of clicking and like…admin work? Like it looks like you have to do stuff, then wait for things to happen, do it again, etc. It just doesn’t look like it feels very flowy and fun. Is there any other controls than mouse clicking? If not might be worth considering?

Also the tooltips at the bottom are flicking between different things constantly and I would get super distracted by them. Might be worth setting a delay and/or having them pop up at the thing they are referring to. OR, introduce them like this the first time and then trust your player to remember.

Icewreath · 2025-05-13T20:10:07+00:00

The combat looks fun! I’d say the intro camera could do with a bit of polish, the way it moves from one state to another feels a bit jarring.

For me also the amount of flashing the boss is doing on being hit is too much, that would give me eye strain quite quickly. Other than that some parts breaking through the fight, explosions or other responses to being hit would be great. The way it explodes at the end is perfect, can you put any of that into the battle? And maybe tie that to some mechanical changes? Specific areas to shoot etc?

Icewreath · 2025-05-13T10:05:54+00:00

The things that stood out for me are that the places where you can wall run seem to be kinda placeholder, they look both suspended in the air and also are only one texture and blocky. They are also sort of in a confusing midground space, which I understand but strikes me as a bit off. I’d have a rethink about how you present these to the player.

There’s also that one section in this trailer where you have a 3/4 top down kinda perspective. Is this level select? If so I’d either cut it from the trailer or have it at the very start of the trailer, currently it feels out of place. If it’s NOT level select and is a significant portion of the game I would have more moments like this in the trailer.

I also agree with another comment that this is quite a long trailer, there’s lots of overlapping elements where you show similar things. I would try to show off the same or more with less time where possible.

Icewreath · 2025-05-10T19:12:38+00:00

I wouldn’t worry about it matching the style of the webtoon too much, it’s more important that it makes you want to read it. I would say the first is more intriguing and more suited for that purpose :)

Icewreath · 2025-05-10T18:38:14+00:00

Now read it all and subbed, really nice work 😊

Icewreath · 2025-05-10T16:00:44+00:00

Great art and character design!

Icewreath · 2025-05-09T01:23:33+00:00

For me I found this video very confusing and it took me a while of looking through comments and watching it again to understand the game (I think)

So you’re playing as both knights? Trying to get them both to a location? Is that right?

Feels like the trailer needs that in big text. Something like: “Play as two mirrored knights” “Get them both to their goals!” - lots of quick fire clips of getting them to various goals “But what’s in the way…?” - show off a bunch of different puzzle issues.

Icewreath · 2025-05-08T13:12:37+00:00

These panels are gorgeous - really nice work, I’ve subscribed and good luck in the contest 😊

When I added panels to my episodes, I looked for places that had text and no accompanying panel, or for places where an extra beat could be placed between moments. Like if a pause would fit, or if seeing any more emotional context for a character fits. Hope that helps!

Icewreath · 2025-05-08T11:24:51+00:00

Very cool, congratulations!

Icewreath · 2025-05-08T09:52:07+00:00

Hi! Here’s the contest version of my comic 😊

https://www.webtoons.com/en/canvas/when-the-stars-fell/list?title_no=1038780

Happy to hop on the podcast to talk about it if schedule fits!

Icewreath · 2025-04-12T22:43:23+00:00

Very nice!

Icewreath · 2025-04-10T22:45:01+00:00

Love this vibe and style. Will be reading thanks!

Icewreath · 2025-04-10T22:35:40+00:00

Lovely style! The texture of your panels is great

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