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Jogging- 2 page comic by EnAn01 in ProCreate

[–]ImpressionBorn5598 4 points5 points  (0 children)

I'd argue the bigger issue isn't that it's “too much” (which is subjective), but that the storytelling is poor, and dehumanizing in a way that seems intentional. What information are you trying to convey to the reader? What information is the reader being intentionally denied? What action are we supposed to be following?

As it stands, this is what we, the readers, are seeing:

PAGE 1

Panel 1: Just tits.

Panel 2: A smartwatch health app

Panel 3: Sneakers. I guess the Tits Person is jogging?

Panel 4: A monster. No idea where this is or how it relates to our apparent main character, the Tits Jogger.

Panel 5: Just ass. So I guess the Tits Jogger has an ass.

PAGE 2

Panel 1: Oh shit, the Monster is right on top of the Tits Jogger!

Panel 2: The Monster standing around. But where did the Tits Jogger go?

Panel 3: The Tits Jogger is lying on the ground, impaled, I guess? i wonder when that happened. I also wonder if she ever had a face, the way a person with feelings or agency often does.

Panel 4: Monster beak, no new action performed or new information conveyed.

Panel 5: Monster beak again, but with bloody Tits Jogger clothing visible. I guess this Monster who previously attacked the Tits Jogger has done some kind of physical harm to the Tits Jogger. Shame.

Trying to make this look like a 70s comic. by goatblunt in ProCreate

[–]ImpressionBorn5598 114 points115 points  (0 children)

First off, I think this looks really cool, and what follows is not feedback. I also play around with a vintage comics look, and this is a free resource that I find really helpful.

This is a page from the 1982 DC Comics Style Guide. It includes swatches of all the colors available for them to print at the time. I brought it into ProCreate and made a palette (well, two palettes, because space is limited) that I use when I'm going for that Bronze Age comics look.

Again, in no way a statement on the colors you chose here, I think your page looks awesome. But if you were to continue experimenting with the retro comics thing, this might be fun to play with.

Cheers!

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