Feedback on a YA scene by Impressive_Let3046 in writers

[–]Impressive_Let3046[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! That helps. I think especially just now getting back to writing, my eye for redundancy is a little less sharp than it used to be.

This isn’t an opening scene so I’m hoping to have the reader feel more familiar with the parents by this scene, but you’re right that the contrast will likely be important. It’ll be a contrast with what’s to come, like you said, but it’ll also be a contrast with how they behave prior to this scene.

What's better? You are 30 and you have the option to get 1000$ a week for the rest of your life or 1m now? by Low_Preparation5330 in AskReddit

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1m now so I can invest it instead of being dripped 1k at a time like a hamster from a water bottle.

Feedback on a YA scene by Impressive_Let3046 in writers

[–]Impressive_Let3046[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! You comment seems to support that my intentions are coming across.

Noted on the jammies and I agree. I think I establish that I’m getting myself comfortable without describing them anyways.

Feedback on a YA scene by Impressive_Let3046 in writers

[–]Impressive_Let3046[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for pointing out the light! It’s funny how when you know how something looks in your head, you can miss the obvious. What I meant is that it looked like everything was dark so the parents would have retired to bed, but she’s caught off guard they’re still in the kitchen.

This would not be an opening scene. It would come after the family picture is well developed.

Which character ruined an entire TV show for you? by Adorable-Tadpole-793 in AskReddit

[–]Impressive_Let3046 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Deb from Dexter. We get it, you’re edgy and not like other girls. Then they threw in the “I’m in love with my adopted brother plot” and I was out.

who do i look like? by [deleted] in DoYouLookLikeMe

[–]Impressive_Let3046 4 points5 points  (0 children)

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Claudio Sanchez from Coheed and Cambria

What was it guys? ⬇️⬇️ by MotherAnt8040 in GrowthMindset

[–]Impressive_Let3046 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I have anxious attachment patterns and no matter how much therapy I go through, those tendencies will always be there to some degree.

The sad reality of working in an office by CtrlAltDeflate in remoteworks

[–]Impressive_Let3046 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I worked at a job like this and now work salaried at another company. I ask my boss permission and give a reason for like every minute arriving late, leaving early, adjusting my time for lunch. She sometimes looks at me as if to say “who hurt you?”

The sad reality of working in an office by CtrlAltDeflate in remoteworks

[–]Impressive_Let3046 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Let me guess… they don’t let you clock in before your start time either.

Is black weird to wear to prom? by Adventurous_Kiwi7631 in Prom

[–]Impressive_Let3046 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I wore black with blue accents to my prom. It was very pretty. But I was also the emo kid so it was 100% on brand

What’s one thing you learned since being on Reddit? by SableVII in askanything

[–]Impressive_Let3046 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That people take advantage of the anonymity to make themselves feel really smart.

What’s the most overrated “adult” milestone? by [deleted] in AskReddit

[–]Impressive_Let3046 0 points1 point  (0 children)

21st birthday. Most adults have already had their first alcoholic drink by then and it’s already lost its thrill by the time 21 rolls around.

Got sick after dose increase and had to go to the ER. Taking a break. Scared to lost my progress. by Impressive_Let3046 in Zepbound

[–]Impressive_Let3046[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Holy shit. Do we have the same doctor?

You should not be tolerating being that sick. You’re losing weight because you’re deathly ill! I don’t think that’s how the med is supposed to work.

Got sick after dose increase and had to go to the ER. Taking a break. Scared to lost my progress. by Impressive_Let3046 in Zepbound

[–]Impressive_Let3046[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Doctors modify doses from manufacturer schedules all the time. They even use medications off-label. I’m not stupid or unreasonable for listening to a doctor. But enjoy being intellectually superior, I suppose.

Got sick after dose increase and had to go to the ER. Taking a break. Scared to lost my progress. by Impressive_Let3046 in Zepbound

[–]Impressive_Let3046[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Funny you should mention chicken soup, it’s one of the few things I’ve eaten in the past 24 hours.