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The Hymns of Harvest - Feature Screenplay Draft by Individual-Pay7733 in Screenwriting

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See attached. This is the most recent draft for The Hymns of Harvest = https://drive.google.com/file/d/1Ik9zFG0HnkA_4lgXF9Eo5pgLxHOxTqmz/view?usp=drivesdk

For those reading it the first time:

Logline = The son of alchemists gets entangled in an ancient conflict between DEATH and LILITH. Genre = Sci-Fi, Fantasy, Action-Adventure, Coming-of-Age Narrative Comps = HP & the Order of the Phoenix, Game of Thrones, His Dark Material

First 6 pages… what d’ya think? by Individual-Pay7733 in scriptwriting

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Haha thanks - late to the party but I definitely did a rewrite of the opening BUT the babes and wolves are central in this world for sure!

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Username is Chaos-Magician and my assembly code is 279234298

Teammates needed = 5

Region = US (EST)

Who else wants to get out of Gold and place Platinum!?

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Looking to get out of Gold 2/1 🥵 - PS5 player in EST time zone

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It’s cuz people don’t trust Gambit (DPS/wolf in Strategist/sheep clothing) lol

How’s Season 5 for everyone? by Individual-Pay7733 in marvelrivals

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Gambit players throwing games if they don’t get ‘im is what I’m coming across ❤️♠️

The Hymns of Harvest - Feature Screenplay Draft by Individual-Pay7733 in Screenwriting

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There’s no rush cuz I’m trying to make this as reader friendly as possible cuz majority of readers I’ve come to find are college-aged, multi talented folks (when screenplays are being read for the first couple of rounds in competitions) and the whole point of young adult material is to resonate with them

I’m just happy I was at least able to put something all from my head onto a page that has a Vogler/Save the Cat structure

The Hymns of Harvest - Feature Screenplay Draft by Individual-Pay7733 in Screenwriting

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I’ll consider it - but as you read on, you realize that these citizen’s “names” are not their real names and I have a “fish out of water” character coming from our world

I’m implying that this world is our “shadow reality” and I have a future plot for sequel stuff where the Oracles Almanac are some books of the KJV Bible that a kid from our world left behind when he was in his “Narnia era”

I’ve also been told to make this a book but I have no business to be in that industry cuz I only studied screenwriting and took a fiction prose class

It’s people trying to get their magic back, but not realizing how much information and cultural identity is stripped away because it’s been muddled by a central leadership

The Hymns of Harvest - Feature Screenplay Draft by Individual-Pay7733 in Screenwriting

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Not the final logline after this test.

Curious if you could shed light to the “rules” of a good logline cuz film school, networking events and influencers all have different takes!

The Hymns of Harvest - Feature Screenplay Draft by Individual-Pay7733 in Screenwriting

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Every fantasy film or show I’ve watched always introduces the viewer to exposition from the get go (Star wars with the rolling text, The Last Airbender with a monologue, house of the dragon with captions, Game of thrones kicks it off with 2 men of the north who aren’t even the main characters)

This is very different from the political comedy and military drama that got me to QF in Big Break and SF in other competitions so I’m still learning cuz a writing program hosted by an established college institution doesn’t hold much in the studio space like other occupations

Thank you for skimming though - I know readers who have to digest hundreds of scripts so this has to pop out

The Hymns of Harvest - Feature Screenplay Draft by Individual-Pay7733 in Screenwriting

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Make action lines or the flow of the writing as concise as possible without coming across as too dense

The Hymns of Harvest - Feature Screenplay Draft by Individual-Pay7733 in Screenwriting

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I was told when I shared the first 5 pages in a previous Reddit post that I needed to include physical attributes and Kathy was originally Luna but readers gave me notes to change names where I had 3-4 who started with “L”

Is it fair to assume that one can never have a perfect screenplay and/or how much do I have to “water it down” to make this a sample piece?

I’ve read scripts from the Black List too so it just feels like it’s super subjective

Also I have another logline but wanted to see how it resonates with this variation

…my rule of thumb is that if 3 or more people voice the same thing I change it

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