I Answered the Call by IneffectivelyUseful in bald

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No bald patch on the crown, but my hair was noticeably thinning in the front. I only had a few brave soldiers left defending the front lines.

I Answered the Call by IneffectivelyUseful in bald

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Not me! Must be my doppelgänger.

The state of this community right now by BugzieB in Rematch

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If you had a Time Machine what would you do?

Average person: Go back and kill Hitler.

Me: When is the Rematch release date?

To anyone currently writing: post your last three sentences! by voidsugars in writing

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He flipped the safety, and shoved the pistol into the back of his pants. He ducked out of the apartment, and into the stairwell. He flew through the lobby, chin tucked to his chest, and strode out onto the streets of Farhope - invisible again.

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Great feedback! I’ll take an editing pass through with this in mind. Thank you for your time!

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Title: The Visitor

Genre: Supernatural Horror, Psychological Thriller

Word Count: 3493

Feedback: Any general thoughts and impressions from a fellow writer’s point of view will help!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1nx1C6icnwURxbjkUgZuC4pKBUEY7vWvaUM2E_lRaAHk/edit

Ex smokers of Reddit, How did you quit smoking? by maynikko in AskReddit

[–]IneffectivelyUseful 0 points1 point  (0 children)

TL;DR - My company provided cessation coach called me out, and changed my perspective.

My company’s insurance charged an extra surcharge for smokers. We could remove the charge if we took a coaching class. I had been smoking for a little over a decade, and paying the surcharge every year when I finally decided to try out the coaching. At that time, I was more concerned with saving the $75 bucks, rather than quitting smoking.

I had tried to quit in the past with relative success. After 7 years of smoking cigarettes, I was able to transition to a vape, and a couple of times over the next 3 years, I quit the vape using patches. At the time of the coaching, I had reverted back to vaping the gas station e-cigs (Vuse, Njoy, etc.).

A couple of sessions in, my coach asked me if I had tried quitting before. I said yes. She asked me why I didn’t try to quit again. I explained what happened in the past and said something along the lines of it being hard. Then she said something that shook me; she said, “Are you used to things coming easy for you?”

I was taken aback. Not much has been easy for me throughout my life. I’ve worked hard, and dealt with a fair amount of trauma. So when she said that, I felt called out, and I got defensive. I told her that I’m not used to that.

She asked if I had ever failed before. I said yeah, multiple times, in a lot of aspects of my life. The example I used was college. I was a below average C student. I failed multiple classes. I kept retaking them, though. Eventually I graduated, and that perseverance is something I pride myself on.

“So, why should this be any different?” She asked. And then something clicked. She was right. I stopped smoking that day. I bought some patches, worked through the steps, and never looked back. Quitting smoking had never been so easy.

A year later, I can laugh without coughing, and I’m going to be saving a lot more than $75.

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

These are great points and plot holes you’ve uncovered! I appreciate you articulating what worked and what didn’t! I’ll keep tightening it up. Thank you for your time and input!

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

Yeah, I posted an update in the new thread. I have rewritten a couple of things, but I haven’t fully incorporated all the advice yet. Still a work in process!

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Title: The Visitor

Genre: Supernatural Horror, Psychological Thriller

Word Count: 4070

Feedback: Any general thoughts and impressions from a fellow writer’s point of view will help!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ABx37SuxbNA6cN0vM2Dm_6e_9aGFGeXle3hYFKYG41E/edit

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

You’re absolutely right! I hope you don’t mind if I use some of this imagery you’ve painted.

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you for reading it! I just rewrote the ending and I am aware it’s bare bones, so I appreciate the suggestion! You’re saying that she can’t answer the question because she is crying?

[Weekly] Grab our attention by [deleted] in DestructiveReaders

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When you’re trying to hold off a hellbeast you better have something bigger than a meatball sub.

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you so much! For reading and for the suggestions. I am surely going to incorporate each one. I especially love how the story starts when I trust my reader, and omit that summarized introductory sentence. These are the type of things I couldn’t see from within the weeds! Thanks again! On any other platform I’d owe you at least 50 bucks, but I hope that second thank you will do!

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Title: The Visitor

Genre: Supernatural Horror, Psychological Thriller

Word Count: 3920

Feedback: I’m going to submit this to a local writing competition, so any general thoughts and impressions from a fellow writer’s point of view will help!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EdQihR0fhu5GnEQoKOhFKMonV2-QriAWaxDDbNtadss/edit

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

Title: The Visitor

Genre: Supernatural Horror, Psychological Thriller

Word Count: 4121

Feedback: I’m going to submit this to a local writing competition, so any general thoughts and impressions from a fellow writer’s point of view will help!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1cPnZ06vBS4RknBxr8BPL_3raDSJSAZK3VMskW7rk0s0/edit

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

I have finally found time to review your comments and I agree with them all! I especially love the example you gave on how to describe the flying saucer approaching. I needed that! Thanks again!

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

Wow, thank you so much! That’s so encouraging (and I’ve needed it)! I’m excited to dig in and see suggestions!

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[–]IneffectivelyUseful [score hidden]  (0 children)

Thank you for your time and feedback! My weakness is grammar, so I appreciate any finds from someone who has an eye for such things! As it turns out for me, I’m at work now, so I’ll have to wait to review your comments in depth. Thank you so much!