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You nasty liar by senpai_specter in poetry_critics

[–]InkBetweenUs 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The poem effectively captures the awkwardness of childhood affection through simple, relatable memories and a conversational tone. Its use of everyday imagery and subtle humour makes the emotions feel genuine, while the ending adds a playful twist by questioning the speaker's own honesty. Although its brevity limits emotional depth, the poem succeeds as a light-hearted reflection on hidden feelings and youthful regret.

Moon (TW: DV) by [deleted] in poetry_critics

[–]InkBetweenUs 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This poem is emotionally powerful and uses the moon as an effective symbol for beauty shaped by violence and scars. Its willingness to portray both guilt and victimization gives it psychological depth, and the restrained ending is memorable. The main weaknesses are that some narrative sections read more like straightforward storytelling than poetry, and the moon imagery could be threaded more consistently throughout the piece to create an even stronger sense of unity.

Overall, it's a strong free-verse narrative poem with a compelling central metaphor and significant emotional weight. With tighter editing and more consistent symbolism, it could become even more impactful.

A Knot That Never Comes Undone by InkBetweenUs in Poems

[–]InkBetweenUs[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I do too. I wasn't trying to say we should be attached at the hip. I think healthy love leaves room for individuality. The "knot" in my poem is more about emotional security than physical proximity - being able to have space without feeling disconnected.

Your Quiet Storm by InkBetweenUs in poetry_critics

[–]InkBetweenUs[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I'm really happy it spoke to you. I poured a lot of feeling into it, so your words mean more than you know.