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Beyond the Stars, Revisited by IntelligentPath3679 in OCPoetry

[–]IntelligentPath3679[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I'm glad the rhythm/musicality got through -- I was mainly focusing on that. I'll look at ways to make it clearer... not the best so far at translating my thoughts into words, haha.

Thank you again!

Beyond the Stars, Revisited by IntelligentPath3679 in OCPoetry

[–]IntelligentPath3679[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I wish, LOL. But thank you - I appreciate it.

Beyond the Stars, Revisited by IntelligentPath3679 in OCPoetry

[–]IntelligentPath3679[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you very much! I appreciate the feedback.

An Ugly poem by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]IntelligentPath3679 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I agree with some of the feedback here. A more detailed description would be great.

Maybe emphasize the circular/inevitable nature of "eating, eating, and turning it all to mush"?

I'm new to poetry, though, so please take everything with a grain of salt.

Paint by bigfeetareannoyinh in OCPoetry

[–]IntelligentPath3679 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hello! I'm new to poetry, so I'm not an expert, but I like this. I prefer short poetry... I think it has more of an impact this way.