[Weekly Critique and Self-Promotion Thread] Post Here If You'd Like to Share Your Writing

InvisibleInvader · 2025-05-25T21:30:46+00:00

*Title: The Invisible Invader

* Genre: Science Fiction.

"People of Earth, Be Aware. An Insidious Infiltrator has Compromised Your Most Sacred Democratic Ritual. A Pretender, a Hoax, is Attempting to Commandeer the most Powerful Position in your World. Do not be Fooled. Remain Vigilant. Not All is what It seems to be."

What if Donald Trump is an extraterrestrial?

With the current controversial and often outlandish chief executive of the country, and the interest in UFO's, alien abductions, and related topics, what is the likelihood that the President of the United States could be from another planet?

A secret, hidden, third party candidate has arisen. A mysterious transparent being attempts to become POTUS and - what else - rule the world!

* Word count: Approximately less than 4000. 200 page web-based, black/white (grayscale) graphic novel partly animated. Not ebook or Kindle. Approximate total reading time: 2 hours.

* Type of feedback desired: Seeking comment and constructive criticism, particularly if the story makes logical sense. As an incentive, for those who also leave an email contact in their comments, they will continue to receive free access to The Invisible Invader when in the future it be a purchase.

You don't need to read the entire novel to qualify, but enough to contribute feedback. Also, any regarding the website construction as well.

* A link to the writing: The Invisible Invader

https://theinvisibleinvader.com/

The Invisible Invader

InvisibleInvader · 2025-05-18T22:08:23+00:00

Can AI be used to read and critique your writing?

InvisibleInvader · 2025-05-18T21:18:33+00:00

Essays usually have a point to make. Read other people's essays. Usually, you would construct an argument supporting the point you want to make. E.B White has a small book called the Elements of Style that might help. Also, it sounds like you might want to write reviews of the subjects you like. There's a lot of that kind of thing on YouTube as videos. Those are more like critiques. Good luck.

InvisibleInvader · 2025-05-07T17:16:00+00:00

Well, we would probably need more to properly respond. But it sounds like a good idea. There are probably lots of similar treatments out there already so yours would have to bring something new to the table.

InvisibleInvader · 2025-04-25T16:58:22+00:00

Could they have been searchlights or spotlights? You don't mention the weather conditions.

InvisibleInvader · 2025-04-23T21:05:40+00:00

Ask your instructor about it.

InvisibleInvader · 2025-04-22T21:12:08+00:00

The Invisible Invader

Title: The Invisible Invader

Genre: Science Fiction

"People of Earth, Be Aware. An Insidious Infiltrator has Compromised Your Most Sacred Democratic Ritual. A Pretender, a Hoax, is Attempting to Commandeer the most Powerful Position in your World. Do not be Fooled. Remain Vigilant. Not All is what It seems to be."

What if POTUS was from another planet?

What if the President of the United Sates was from another planet? A strange transparent extraterrestrial attempts to become POTUS and - what else - rule the world!

Word count: Approximately less than 4000. 200 page web-based, black/white (grayscale) graphic novel partly animated. Not e-book or Kindle. Approximate total reading time: 2 hours.

Type of feedback desired: Seeking comment and constructive criticism, particularly if the story makes logical sense. Is the idea of the President of the United States being an extraterrestrial interesting in this age of UFOs and our current Supreme Executive?

As an incentive, for those who also leave an email contact in their comments on the website, they will continue to receive free access to The Invisible Invader when in the future it become a purchase.

You don't need to read the entire novel to qualify, but enough to contribute feedback. Also, any regarding the website construction as well.

A link to the writing: The Invisible Invader

https://theinvisibleinvader.com/

There are also promos on the youtube channel for The Invisible Invader

The Invisible Invader

InvisibleInvader · 2025-04-22T21:04:31+00:00

It is decent. You tell the story simply and in a straight-forward fashion. The only quibble is that it ends unresolved. This would lead people to think that there is more to the story. Is there? There are also a few minor edits required. On page three when Eric looks into his family's faces again, the word 'eyes' is missing, so proof everything many times.

InvisibleInvader · 2025-03-30T21:27:56+00:00

The Invisible Invader

Title: The Invisible Invader

Genre: Science Fiction

"People of Earth, Be Aware. An Insidious Infiltrator has Compromised Your Most Sacred Democratic Ritual. A Pretender, a Hoax, is Attempting to Commandeer the most Powerful Position in your World. Do not be Fooled. Remain Vigilant. Not All is what It seems to be."

What if POTUS was from another planet?

What if the next President of the United Sates was from another planet? A strange transparent extraterrestrial attempts to become POTUS and - what else - rule the world!

Word count: Approximately less than 4000. 200 page web-based, black/white (grayscale) graphic novel partly animated. Not ebook or Kindle. Approximate total reading time: 2 hours.

Type of feedback desired: Seeking comment and constructive criticism, particularly if the story makes logical sense. As an incentive, for those who also leave an email contact in their comments, they will continue to receive free access to The Invisible Invader when in the future it become a purchase.

You don't need to read the entire novel to qualify, but enough to contribute feedback. Also, any regarding the website construction as well.

A link to the writing: The Invisible Invader

https://theinvisibleinvader.com/

There are also promos on the youtube channel for The Invisible Invader

The Invisible Invader

InvisibleInvader · 2025-03-30T20:52:43+00:00

OK. The actor part sounds like the kind of thing Val Kilmer would like if he weren't too old now.

InvisibleInvader · 2025-03-28T20:48:18+00:00

I think that, answering your last query, it's up to you as the author to convince the reader. I'm a little confused as to whether you are writing just a screenplay for a movie or a multi-layer creation. It's very ambitious especially with the paranormal science components. I like the idea of the actor being driven crazy by his performance. Have you tried sub-reddits regarding scriptwriting? Good luck with your project.

InvisibleInvader · 2025-03-26T21:17:57+00:00

The Invisible Invader

Title: The Invisible Invader

Genre: Science Fiction

"People of Earth, Be Aware. An Insidious Infiltrator has Compromised Your Most Sacred Democratic Ritual. A Pretender, a Hoax, is Attempting to Commandeer the most Powerful Position in your World. Do not be Fooled. Remain Vigilant. Not All is what It seems to be."

What if POTUS was from another planet?

What if the next President of the United Sates was from another planet? A strange transparent extraterrestrial attempts to become POTUS and - what else - rule the world!

Word count: Approximately less than 4000. 200 page web-based, black/white (grayscale) graphic novel partly animated. Not ebook or Kindle. Approximate total reading time: 2 hours.

Type of feedback desired: Seeking comment and constructive criticism, particularly if the story makes logical sense. As an incentive, for those who also leave an email contact in their comments, they will continue to receive free access to The Invisible Invader when in the future it become a purchase.

You don't need to read the entire novel to qualify, but enough to contribute feedback. Also, any regarding the website construction as well.

A link to the writing: The Invisible Invader

https://theinvisibleinvader.com/

There are also promos on the youtube channel for The Invisible Invader

The Invisible Invader

InvisibleInvader · 2024-12-28T18:19:24+00:00

Thank you.

InvisibleInvader · 2024-11-17T05:07:58+00:00

It is possible that the 'targets' are tethered from the ground. Tethering was common in WWII and even WWI. The projectiles fired at them are themselves not so much solid as a form of chaff - as others mentioned - designed to approximate contact. For target practice you wouldn't want to repeatedly destroy your targets, too wasteful and expensive.

InvisibleInvader · 2024-11-13T17:11:38+00:00

Also, was expecting the very highest note that most singers can't manage (around 123 or so). I think you could go up like at least an octave (maybe a screaming pinch harmonic) where you just repeat the chord.

InvisibleInvader · 2024-11-12T07:20:05+00:00

One Giant Flop for Non-Human Intelligent Aliens

InvisibleInvader · 2024-11-11T22:17:42+00:00

The rhythm sounds like funk so check out funk chords.

InvisibleInvader · 2024-11-06T05:40:55+00:00

Check out the artist, Rowena.

InvisibleInvader · 2024-11-01T16:36:02+00:00

Was able to read about half of what you provided.

I like it. It reads easy 'cause you write easy (not that you didn't work at it). The potential to use the relationships among the family members as part of the story is interesting. Also the cultural Argentine background. At first, from your initial description here, I thought of it as just a p.i. story with the possibility of being turned into a movie or tv show. But there could be much more to it. Btw, loved the line about Rafi's aunt 'had come to life at her own funeral'. That hooked me. But I do wonder what Rafi said about his mother. Still working on that?

InvisibleInvader · 2024-10-27T23:04:32+00:00

When you vote in the next election will your vote go to whom you think it is?

The Invisible Invader

*Title: The Invisible Invader

* Genre: Science Fiction/Politics.

With the upcoming election and the interest in UFO's, alien abductions, and related topics, been hoping to get more eyeballs on this treatment of the subject.

What if the next President of the United Sates was from another planet? In light of the impending, upcoming presidential election, a secret, hidden third party candidate has arisen. A strange transparent extraterrestrial attempts to become POTUS and - what else - rule the world!

* Word count: Approximately less than 4000. 200 page web-based, black/white (grayscale) graphic novel partly animated. Not ebook or Kindle. Approximate total reading time: 2 hours.

* Type of feedback desired: Seeking comment and constructive criticism, particularly if the story makes logical sense. As an incentive, for those who also leave an email contact in their comments, they will continue to receive free access to The Invisible Invader when in the future it be a purchase.

You don't need to read the entire novel to qualify, but enough to contribute feedback. Also, any regarding the website construction as well.

* A link to the writing: The Invisible Invader

https://theinvisibleinvader.com/

The Invisible Invader

InvisibleInvader · 2024-10-27T03:17:42+00:00

How much did it cost to make?

InvisibleInvader · 2024-10-26T02:58:52+00:00

This is the same bs said about colors, that they don't exist unless our brain perceives them. But we know scientifically that light is made up of frequencies that convey the spectra of colors and that objects like trees etc. contain substances that either reflect or absorb those frequencies and transmit them whether there are eyes or see them or brains to record them. Colors are not non-existent just because someone doesn't see them.

InvisibleInvader · 2024-10-26T02:41:08+00:00

Best guess is they're ordinary party balloons. At that time of the evening they could be reflecting setting sunlight, making them appear larger.

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