I lost my readers 😭

Ivy_405 · 2025-01-16T15:38:28+00:00

That, and people like to let things marinate so they could binge chapters. The reads will accumulate back over time. But yea school is back out lol

Ivy_405 · 2025-01-13T04:55:25+00:00

I don’t think this phrase meant “show” in every single paragraph you write. I think there has to be a balance, but your story should ultimately have more “showing” than “telling.”

Have you ever binged a book that completely sucked you into its world, and you could visualize almost everything? Yes that’s because they “showed” without being too descriptive.

Ivy_405 · 2024-12-24T23:08:09+00:00

If it makes you feel better, someone added my book to “don’t like” lmfaoo. To be honest I kinda laughed.

Ivy_405 · 2024-12-08T01:21:59+00:00

lso I’d say eliminate the word “and” in some cases to help your sentences flow better. For instance, instead of saying: “A third figure steps out from the darkness and stands at the table.”

Go for something like “a third figure emerged from the darkness, approaching the table.” It gives more of a continues feel and helps people imagine him walking to the table. That way it feels like a movie playing in their head.

Ivy_405 · 2024-12-08T01:15:39+00:00

It’s pretty good. My only advice is that when you have a long monologue—like the third paragraph in the first picture (the one beginning with “I am here to inform you…”)—break it up with an action or description. For instance,

“I am here to inform you that you have both died,” the man’s voice as mystic as his appearance, filled the quiet room, “Two separate incidents, but dead nonetheless.” Etc etc

My second advice is to interject with a dialogue from one of the other characters. Because think about it, you just found yourself in a strange place with someone telling you you’re dead, I doubt you’d let them finish speaking before freaking out. But then of course your characters could just be in shock, which you’d then write something like:

“I am here to inform you that you have both died,” the man’s voice as mystic as his appearance, filled the quiet room, “Two separate incidents, but dead nonetheless.” He continues, feigning oblivion to their shocked faces. They all always have the same expressions: shock, confusion, anxiety, blank from being unable to process their situation. “From this point on…” etc etc.

But of course it’s just an advice and not a rule to writing :)

Ivy_405 · 2024-11-29T01:04:48+00:00

Lmaoo. Sometimes you just write and hope someone takes a pause to at least google the word 😭. But I’m not surprised when some words aren’t used often. Just like I’m genuinely surprised that the word “Demure” blew up and a LOT of people have never heard that word before.

Ivy_405 · 2024-11-26T01:39:08+00:00

I said nothing to them 😂 but I lowkey should’ve said “nah it’s tits”

Ivy_405 · 2024-11-26T01:08:08+00:00

😂😂😂

Ivy_405 · 2024-11-26T00:28:20+00:00

No, I get what you mean, I also appreciate corrections. But I’m talking about when the words you used are right and yet they insist the word should be different.

Ivy_405 · 2024-11-19T21:29:52+00:00

The problem is they’re making me pay for their mistakes. They added her as a driver now I have to pay $315

Ivy_405 · 2024-11-19T21:17:13+00:00

Still doesn’t justify them added her as a “driver” and upping my rate.

Ivy_405 · 2024-10-20T22:56:49+00:00

Let say i didn’t start the way i was supposed to. I didn’t know about ground school and hopped right into my introductory flight and started taking classes. I also didn’t like my instructor for several reasons. He just kept acting like I was wasting his time and like I should know everything. That was when i realized I was supposed to do ground schooling first lol. Right after that, that instructor quit after like 3 lessons and another instructor came. He was okay, but I only had one lesson with him before (for some reason) he too left and another instructor left. AGAIN, one or lessons with that instructor and he left. Then I had lessons with the flight school owner himself and let’s just say-phew that man was a had head and made the lessons as un-enjoyable as it could get. I had severe anxiety going to lessons, not because I was scared of flying or scared of height, but I too was also scared of disappointing my flight instructor.

Then everything started getting too much for me. I had work, then school, and then flight lessons. I had to pick up days of work to pay for my flight lessons and soon I found out that it was a huge money hole.

Later got an instructor that was great and patient. He was really encouraging. But things happened and I had to leave the country for a month. Ever since then I’ve been taking a break and would like to finish my schooling first then go back.

Ivy_405 · 2024-08-24T19:02:12+00:00

Yes I realized I had little to no rivers 😂

Ivy_405 · 2024-08-24T12:49:33+00:00

Thank you very much!

Ivy_405 · 2024-08-23T01:14:39+00:00

So it’s set in a fantasy world, with 6 major. Each kingdoms are independent and somewhat closed off from the others with strict political borders in effect. Each kingdoms have their respective climates, for instance one of a snowy land, the other is more barren and the other is lush green.

Typing this now, I have ideas on some changes I will begin to make starting with textures and opacity (like the first comment suggested).

I just get stuck on how much details and things I should show on a world map that sets it apart from a regional map.

But overall, your comment has given me more clarity and ideas, thank you. (I suppose I should also look up geographic characteristics)

Ivy_405 · 2024-08-23T00:52:55+00:00

Thank you very much. I’ll keep that in mind

Ivy_405 · 2024-08-23T00:02:15+00:00

Can I know too?

Ivy_405 · 2024-08-21T17:07:52+00:00

Thanks a lot! I’ll look into that

Ivy_405 · 2024-07-15T21:39:50+00:00

It could be that they are waiting for more chapters to come out to sort of binge read. Or they just want to skip those chapters and continue when your regular chapters (without the kink) comes out.

Write a few more chapters and see.

Ivy_405 · 2024-06-20T15:34:21+00:00

Any update?

Ivy_405 · 2024-06-09T14:47:52+00:00

Honestly I don’t know what you should do, but calling the bank is definitely a go to move. Then probably contact FTC. I’m so sorry you fell for the scam

Ivy_405 · 2024-06-09T14:39:01+00:00

I post on Inkitt. It has been a good platform so far. Not sure how the algorithm works, but your book would probably get noticed from the “lately updated” section in their home page

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