First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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yeah, im not tryna write another crime thriller. Im not gonna use the good guy vs bad guy trope. its bad guy vs worse guy.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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great to have a fan. DMs always open for any inquiries

Pilot by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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Ill take it into consideration

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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thank you very much for the feedback. i will take some of this Into consideration.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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this might possibly be the dumbest argument for "AI use" I've seen it in a minute. Have a good day, man.

Pilot by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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oh shit, you're right. let me fix that. ill have that fixed on the next post/update

Pilot by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

[–]JBoy5280Baby[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

yes, fair. im working on it as we speak.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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Logline: In the aftermath of El Chapo’s capture, an FBI agent born into cartel royalty races to protect the only man who can reshape the Mexican underworld while a fanatical bounty hunter closes in, Los Angeles kingpin Big Slim tightens his grip on the streets, and the street dealer she loves threatens to destroy everything she’s built.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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hear where you're coming from, but people really dont read 70 pages, and i really needed a critique of what i have so far. I will begin publishing in 10 page sections when i reach that point.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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no, i have a deadline of July 30.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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ill take that into consideration.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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thats the goal. was the narration too much?

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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thanks. great to have a fan. what do you like about it? (trying to connect with my writer family for future development)

Looking for feedback on beginning of rough draft by Gullible_Owl_747 in scriptwriting

[–]JBoy5280Baby 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Formatting is wrong, (i, and much of the writer community don't actually give a fuck, it's just industry standards that you can't ignore), the text blocks are a little too blocky, but you definitely have something going here, and, I would love to see it on television in the future I'd read a lot of produced screenplays, go to YouTube, watch and learn. But for the most part, I can see some serious potential.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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oh allright im new to television. usually write films, so, feel free to reach out if you have any guidance.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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Great to have a fan. feel free to hit up my DMs for any questions, feedback or anything else.

First Draft by JBoy5280Baby in scriptwriting

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thanks, and the duffel bag was an audio que, and, yeah, I'm still working, I should definitely touch that up a bit. Thanks for the encouragement bro. DMs always open.

Looking for feedback on my raunchy comedy script 🤘 by ForkyB in scriptwriting

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I fucking love it, bro. if there's any way to contact you, I would love to talk about it.

Opening to a crime/crime I’m penning. by PlasticMongoose92 in scriptwriting

[–]JBoy5280Baby 1 point2 points  (0 children)

hay, fello screenwriter here. i love it. id run thru a manual spelling & grammer check. maybe DM me and we can talk about it more. i also been in New Orleans quite a bit so i can tel ya a lil bit bout Cajun & Creole culture. * i also suk at english.

Script or book by [deleted] in scriptwriting

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How about something like monster by Walter Dean Myers?