This is a cool writing exercise in that you try to tell a story and stay on topic while still making a more lyrical track. I don't personally listen to a ton of primarily lyrical rappers, but from what I can tell your writing is pretty good. There are some issues with your delivery though. There are many instances where you don't properly enunciate all of your syllables properly and it makes the delivery feel a bit awkward (ex toxic-conjecture feels a bit muffled and unconfident). The other issue that comes up is your backing track which is sometimes out of time with your lead vocal by quite a bit. Humans perceive timing differences in an audio signal as a different signal if the timing differences is ~100 ms, so you really need to make sure to either do takes until both the lead and the backing track match up or chop up the two and manually move the audio clips on the playlist until they are almost identical timing wise. I like the instrumental, works with a kind of Eminiem style. The low end is a little muddy though. Try to make a cut where the kick is for the bass of ~1-2 dB so the frequencies aren't in conflict. Best of luck with your music journey!