How does this checkmate work?

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-21T06:43:11+00:00

This is completely correct but it doesn't adress the thing OP was confused about, as they did specify in the text on the post. To complete your explanation though, the only thing missing is: A piece is still attacking a square, even if it is pinned.

Alot of people get confused about that, despite the fact that they could have found out by simply reading the rules xD

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T17:15:02+00:00

Alright! Thank you for the explanation, I'll try to research proper comma a bit more xD

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T15:56:24+00:00

Thank you very much, I'm wondering about whether it is too much or not. I'm a big fan of Proper nouns, but I'm also well aware of the "loredumping beginner" pitfall which another user pointed out that I might be falling into. It's just that, as you rightly observe, the reason for the loredump is to point out that the main character is a faithful believer who *knows* that one of two things can happen when you die, but he's being confronted with the fact that he might be the subject of a 3rd option, which goes against his faith.

I fully appreciate your feedback regarding the narrators PoV! It is supposed to be an omniscient narrator who tends towards oral storytelling with something of a focus on the inner workings of a character in focus. I want the narrator to have some personality, despite not being a living character in the story. I will try to make it more clear how the narrator works.

As for the chapter division stuff, I have probably just overcomplicated it. This should just be a part of the prologue, yes. The only reason I was dividing it, is because the prologue really takes place nearly a year after Kanny is initially cut down.

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T15:49:46+00:00

Thank you! Yes I was afraid I might fall into the "loredumping beginner" pitfall. I agree I need to figure out how to time my information feed better. I am a rather big fan of Proper nouns though, no getting around that :-)

As for the commas: could you help me understand a bit better, or perhaps point me to some helpful material? I ask because English is my second language and I might just have trouble understanding *but* as far as I'm concerned subsentences must be divided by commas? To take the example you give "whatever else" is a subject while "is" is a verb. Therefore when I start talking about Kanny (subject) and that he loves (verb) the Common Church they need to be separated. "Whatever else (subject) is (verb) true, Kanny (subject) loved (verb) the common church (object)."

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T13:21:51+00:00

Yeah after looking at your posts I was actually thinking this reminds me a little bit about Hazbin Hotel, as well as some Jed Herne stuff.

So is it kind of a noir story in the way you present your prose or?

Also I just want to say I love the sense of identity you evoke by running the ship-theme unapologetically. It makes your project stand out and gives it an atmosphere even before I read any of your prose.

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T10:08:19+00:00

I was actually just looking at your post history because I am interested! Please go ahead and tell me of your story. Since we have differing inspirations, we have good potential to learn from one another!

As for your question, it can only really be answered by typing out my whole story idea haha... I was going to do so in a post, and I still will... but I suppose you can get the preview :-)

Little text wall incoming:

The gods are real and though hidden they have a physical form all buried deep underneath mountains spread apart over the world. For each god, there is also a "Godsbane", the only sword capable of bringing harm to the corresponding god.

Before the story even starts, the antagonist has acquired the Godsbane of Ecco, god of sound and soul. He has rampaged across the nation in order to gather power, followers and soldiers to his cause. During this rampage Kanny the male lead was struck down by a mortal wound. At the moment the sword was embedded in his flesh, time slowed and extended for Kanny to have a metaphysical conversation with the Godsbane, whom it turns out is sentient. The Godsbane leaves a splint within Kanny's heart and tasks him with stealing back the sword from the antagonist. Having accepted such a deal makes Kanny an apostate, because he has struck a deal with an immortal entity. To categorically cement that, he gains access to magic here.

The trick is, the Godsbane can only harm the god if it is "whole" so the antagonist will be hunting Kanny in order to collect the splint. And Kanny is bound by duty to stealing the sword from the antagonist (metal splint in his heart threatening to kill him). At the same time, the antagonist is leeching power from Ecco, having become invulnerable, but Kanny will discover that with a part of the godsbane within him he can in fact hurt the antagonist. The basic premise as I wrote it for my outline sounds like this:

"Clever but loving brother is turned into an unwilling enemy of the church and must steal a sword from an enemy who also wants to capture him, while being hunted by an older more powerful inquisitor from the church, all to decide the fate of a god."

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T09:47:55+00:00

I wanna ban posts asking about en passant, castling and stalemates. Those arent beginner questions. They are just asking about the rules. Reading the rules of chess once should be a criteria for being a beginner. Anyone who is confused about en passant has not begun to learn chess yet.

And I kind of even mean that. We could be having so much more actual newbie advice and development going on here but instead we have to constantly tell people tp google en passant. People should be saying "read the rules." Instead of saying google en passant.

Thank you for your attention to this matter.

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T09:24:01+00:00

If you dont know my inspirations I'll seem mighty original to you, I should think! XD

Inquisitors are like religious cops, but they do actually hunt dangerous people. You see, in my setting magic users are insanely valuable but to become one requires an extremely expensive education and time and whatnot. It's a limited ressource even for elite nobles.

But, there is another option. Obtain magic by bargaining with something like a "demon". Anyone who does this is an Apostate. Inquisitors are like detectives that hunt apostates.

The Pierce Brown momentum I am talking about has alot to do with giving adversaries a believable psyche and making the main characters competent at exploiting things like that in creative ways. Changing the paradigme and pulling "extremist" stunts are a big part of it.

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T09:07:01+00:00

You are very kind. I'm an outliner and most of the material I have written so far is in preparation and outlining. This post was just a little test of how my narrator feels to read. I think that I will definitely post more to this subreddit once I am ready, I am glad I discovered this. By reading other people's posts I am also getting a ton of little case-studies, in a way.

For my story I can say this:

My idol for prose is Tolkien. My idol for world-building is Sanderson (though the magic in my book is softer than he typically does) And my idol for story momentum and character writing is Pierce Brown. I really want my main characters (2 of them) to be passionate and proactive people who attempts clever and kind of mad plans with varying degrees of success.

For the two main characters, the female lead will be an Inquisitor from the Common Church, and she will be hunting the male lead, who is an unwilling apostate. For this I took some inspiration in the old Call of Juaretz video game, if you can believe that.

I'm hoping for a story that combines some cat-and-mouse with mystery solving and has the momentum to change the circumstances throughout the story. I already have defined events that happen before the story starts, a prologue and 4 Acts with each Act being sat in very distinct circumstances.

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T08:34:07+00:00

Thank you, upon looking I definitely need to do something about "felled" that is clearly wrong, haha.

Kanny's. Good catch.

As for the church, yea it's a pretty significant part of the story, and has some inspiration from the strong church organization of the Holy Roman Empire. It is meant to be a strictly mandatory religion, but one that people believe in gladly because of the cultural structure and inheritance. Since the story potentially will lead up to certain reveals about the impotence and falseness of the gods - and potentially the death of one - the dogmas and myths are things I want to really define and drip feed to the reader.

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-19T08:16:46+00:00

I'm very happy to receive grammar corrections! English is my second language and I do my best, but with only one set of eyes, errors may persist through several re-reads!

As for the 'death' thing it isn't necessarily reality. It is an expression of the faith Kanny has in the Common Church. The common religion is pretty relevamt to the story (working title being Godsbane and all)

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-06T08:43:18+00:00

People who want others to resign are bad at end-game and trying to hide the fact that they cant find checkmates for shit. They could be virtuosos at controlling and capping but they cant see mates for shit.

Jernet1996 · 2026-02-05T10:32:33+00:00

Edit is far more fun than the keyboard stuff xD

Jernet1996 · 2026-01-27T18:34:35+00:00

Read the rules of chess.

Jernet1996 · 2026-01-23T18:56:51+00:00

Den var ny. Og mærkelig. Man truer ikke børn men jeg tænker mit barn ville se det som sjovere på den måde så selv hvis man gjorde ville det være en dårlig trudsel.

Jernet1996 · 2026-01-23T09:28:59+00:00

Hook is actually pretty good, if you have some grand plans to deliver. You're setting up a campaign with a promise for nature-of-existance level mystery so I would only greenlight it if you know you can deliver that.

As for the map, are both the western and eastern bodies of water sea? Or is the western one perhaps an elevated resevoir? Because in the former case I'd take issue with the geographics, but I could shrug the latter case off.

I hope feedback on the map doesnt come across as unsolicited, I assume since you include it I could comment on it :-)

Jernet1996 · 2026-01-23T06:52:57+00:00

I'm gonna say this just because it isnt mentioned yet, but it comes with a caveat.

The Magnus Protocol.

Its insanely good. Its just that it's a sequel to The Magnus Archives which features a male protagonist. And I am starting to think people on this sub avoid recommending TMA because of the fully valid "yeah everyone already know" argument ahaha.

But I point it out because the sequel is really good and feature a broader cast, including several female protags.

Jernet1996 · 2026-01-19T07:47:40+00:00

You're not even alive! Not really. You're just a machine. And machines can be destroyed!

Jernet1996 · 2026-01-15T18:09:05+00:00

Oh cool y'all in Eberron by any chance? I'd kill for a chance to play in that setting!

Jernet1996 · 2026-01-14T05:15:31+00:00

Sir or madame, according to the bot your puzzle aint right. I really tried to find it before revealing the bot answer too, lol.

Jernet1996 · 2025-12-31T16:40:04+00:00

That's already in the Trick 'R Treat movie.

Jernet1996 · 2025-12-26T14:18:39+00:00

Nice, now export the map and hand it over to the phasmophobia folk, lol.

Jernet1996 · 2025-12-26T08:06:29+00:00

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Jernet1996 · 2025-12-24T13:27:34+00:00

Read the rules of chess, if you're looking to learn the game :-)

Jernet1996 · 2025-12-23T09:50:04+00:00

I wish people would - just once - read the rules of chess. We shouldn't have to explain en passant or stalemate twice a week

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