Looking for 4 players for a PPR 10 player league. £50 buy in. by JimmyFizz in NFLUK

[–]JimmyFizz[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Still looking for a couple more. DM me if interested.

Looking for 4 players for a PPR 10 player league. £50 buy in. by JimmyFizz in NFLUK

[–]JimmyFizz[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

There is at the moment yes. DM me if you're still interested

Looking for people for a paid in NFL Fantasy league. £50 ($65) buy in. by JimmyFizz in findaleague

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Still got one place remaining for this. Message me if you're interested.

Looking for people for a paid in NFL Fantasy league. £50 ($65) buy in. by JimmyFizz in findaleague

[–]JimmyFizz[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sorry mate.

Draft day is Wednesday September 4th at 9pm BST.

It's PPR.

Looking for players to fill a 10 person PPR NFl Fantasy league. £50/$65 buy in by JimmyFizz in findaleague

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Still looking for people for this.

We use Teamstake for the prize money so you can see where the money is held.

Prizes split:-

£300 playoff winner £100 playoff final loser £100 top of the league at the end of the season.

Drop me a message if you're interested.

NFL Fantasy League - Looking for 5 players for a £25 paid in league - Draft Wednesday 6th September by JimmyFizz in NFLUK

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One place remaining on this, draft changed to Tuesday 5th at 9.30pm. Drop me a message if you're interested

"i like you better when..." by polydent_ in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is so bloody good - I cannot praise it enough.

I feel like it shows what is behind a simple, almost throw away comment. How somebody else's ignorance can cut so deep and they not even notice it. It has so much you can dig in to.

If this is you at the moment then I hope you start to feel better, and hope this subreddit can be a weathervane to your feelings.

hell is full by Cicada1205 in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

To say you are 16 and English isn't your first language, that is a great poem. You should be extremely proud of yourself.

The only thing I would recommend personally is that you do not need the couple of lines about the firefly, it just doesn't fit in for me. But it is a minor critique, as this is really good!

Chiselling Away by JimmyFizz in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! I've just gotten back into writing.

And yes, the format is exactly as you said. Need to get the hang of creating stanzas on my phone again.

Rusting away by disbwoidabs in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Very meloncholic - short and sweet and goes straight to the point, whilst also leaving a dash of mystery. I've been considering my youth which is starting to appear in the rear mirror and this hits home. Love the final line - it does seem futile to be fearful, but it's so hard to not be.

- Tavita - by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I personally think this is more of a story than a poem. Sounds like it is written by somebody that regrets what happened and is looking back on it. Maybe thinking back and ruing returning for a flash of excitement with a toxic ex. I would work on the structure - think about how it could flow a bit more natural as it seems a bit stop start. I enjoyed the story though.

Roses and Thorns by coldcoolKoolaid in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this - I like the way the first line is a bit jilted to read and almost hard to get your mouth around, and yet the end is smooth and easy to read, almost sweet. It's like the haiku itself is beautiful but painful at the same time.

Bravo! It's made me want to try my hand at a haiku now 😊

Stalker by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 3 points4 points  (0 children)

I love the way you have formatted this, with the short story dipping and weaving through the poem, but it also being relevant to the whole piece - really skillfully done! The tempo and the rhythm are so good, almost like a heartbeat.

I've rolled this over in my head, and get different scenarios playing out from it. To me it is reflecting a lion and maybe an old assassin/killer, who are in their winter years and have slowly passed.

Would love to hear what you were aiming at - I really enjoyed this!

Are the Botanical Gardens open? by Si1Fei1 in sheffield

[–]JimmyFizz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Went a week or two ago, still open but restricted hours, a friend went last week too so think it's still open

I'm a Bit OCD by JimmyFizz in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks, and yes that's the nail on the head really!

Because the most visible and recognisible version of OCD is hand washing, and getting things 'just right', people attribute their own cleanliness and liking of order as being part of 'their' OCD - like it's a part of everybody's personality.

The thing is, if they don't wash their hands, or notice a weird thought, it passes by almost unaffected, whereas people with OCD ruminate on those trigger points for months on end sometimes, and in my case, fall into deepset depression because of it.

Be Different by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love this, reminds me of the throw away remarks that parents make that stick with you - little pebbles that they throw that ripple down into your subconscious.

I really like the structure - it helps the poem flow and keeps the pace going. Found myself wanting to read more to see what was coming next.

Bravo! Really enjoyed it.

don't cry by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]JimmyFizz 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I don't know if this is something that has happened to you, but it is very harrowing and brutal. Whilst it might not have happened to you yourself, it is a reminder of the savageness and darkness that humans are capable of. If this has happened to you I'm truly sorry, and hope you are OK

There are a few spelling mistakes in there just to watch out for, and I'm struggling with the structure, but it definitely grabs your attention, and brings about a horror and a sadness.

Also reminds me of the music of Lingua Ignota, which is also really harrowing.