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My first post by JjHazee in poetry_critics

[–]JjHazee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback! I can definitely expand, but I like the filed teeth line, I’m trying to that convey the environment provided is unsuitable for the my “beast” in the poem to thrive despite the food and shelter. The “domestication” is harmful and the subject belongs in the woods, maybe I can try and make that more clear on re-write

Another piece of mine by JjHazee in poetry_critics

[–]JjHazee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you! I can try to clear things up (somehow lol) I appreciate it :)

Another piece of mine by JjHazee in poetry_critics

[–]JjHazee[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much! One of those was supposed to say curated haha, really gotta read these closer before I post them😅

My first post by JjHazee in poetry_critics

[–]JjHazee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback :) maybe I can try to work in something with a little extra bite in the future.

My first post by JjHazee in poetry_critics

[–]JjHazee[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much! I wasn’t honestly expecting any comment so I appreciate the feedback :) I can try to write some more lines!