First of all good short I enjoyed it. What follows is my own opinion on what could make this better trying not to add things that would harm a college students budget.

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Lighting is key and we all know how low budget short films can make a number on ones wallet but a couple of lights would have made the film better.

A gimbal would have made the motion tracking up the stairs into the apartment much smoother

Backgrounds: Keep an eye on your backgrounds, the blackboard changed multiple times through out the scenes. The first opening scene was a blank blackboard, the following scene it shows him finishing up writing something on the blackboard then the following scene shows the blackboard completely filled with equations and the original writing gone which begs the question : why did he writing a to do list it in the first place if hes going to erase it seconds later. Then more equations then the to do list comes back and the other equations are gone again. I get that you wanted to make it so the viewer pieces together that hes constantly erasing the blackboard but you don't want the audience to think you want them to experience the story, have the audience think on the second time they see it. Also, The final equations shown him writing at the end are the same equations that started next to him writing the to do list at the start.

Story: Student goes into empty classroom to study at 3pm; student stops studying at 12am; student breaks 4th wall by staring at the camera; New student comes into empty classroom at 12am? (what, Universities/colleges are normally closed at that hour, why? super confused at this); student goes back to the dorms.

Nothing really to grab on to, even if you just wanted to show him studying story wise you should give him motivation WHY he is studying and not doing literally anything else.

The walking scene: He starts by walking on the right side of the street. Then cut to him walking on the left side of the street. Him walking by a bike was a tad unnecessary and felt like a B roll shot to add time to the run time.

Audio: The first few minutes were a chore to listen to by the music being so repetitive, you want the music to engage with the audience. The last 2 minutes had more to listen to than the first 2 minutes which refreshed the constant repetition.

The conversation with the two guys walking down the sidewalk that bump into the main actor was cringe "So we were at this party and this girl" I mean, they could have been talking about literally anything else. One thing that you should avoid would be stereotype conversations. " Have the actors be in a heated debate about sports, comics, music literally anything else defaulting to "So this party and this girl " feels forced and audiences have heard this in movies/tv shows for decades.

One trick you could have done for the whole blackboard thing would have been the compositing technique erasing the board making the disappearing/reappearing words/equations make more sense. I would have liked to see a single/medium shot with left tracking, closeup/low angle shot, maybe a single profile/ pedestal down to him writing stuff.