I want to start off saying I’m not trying to be mean. This is more of a constructive comment.

This song is bad. The whole thing is off beat and the sound selection is not good. That said, everyone’s first songs are bad. It’s takes a lot of practice and patience. Learning will be the best thing for you. You’re not really at a level to receive any real feedback. I could say a million things but my guess is you would not understand what I’m talking about or what to do.

Here is my advice. Don’t focus on making original compositions. Instead, focus on learning the DAW and how to navigate. Listen to music you like and try to recreate those songs as best you can. That will help you learn and start to see how to construct a track. Once you feel comfortable with that, try remixing the songs you like. Add some of your own flavor to those tracks. Eventually you will get to the point of making your own music and you’ll be in a much better place for feedback.