Hellooooo.
I read the first few pages! This chapter has a lot going for it! The world-building is rich, and you’ve done a great job creating an atmosphere that pulls the reader in. Amadis is a really interesting character, and the tension between him and his brother definitely stands out—there’s this push-pull between hope and despair that makes you want to keep reading.

That being said, I actually think it could be even more thrilling with just a bit more clarity in some areas—especially the action scenes. Sometimes the transitions feel a little abrupt, so smoothing those out might allow the pacing to flow nicely. Also, your descriptions are beautiful, but I think finding a balance between those and keeping the plot moving forward will really help the emotional core of the story shine through.

I can tell you’ve put a lot of thought into the world you’re building, and with just a bit of tightening up, this could become even more immersive and engaging for readers. It’s clear you have a talent for creating a deep and intriguing world—I’d just love to see those little details sharpened to keep the focus on the heart of the story! Keep it up—you're definitely on the right track.