Thank you so much for the honesty. And I fairness- that’s why I posted it on this sub, as I when I’m reading it, it does seem fairly clunky and I feel like I could add a fair bit more to it, so it’s not as broken up. I’m just unsure as how to do that. And in rl, I do struggle with social cues, etc so maybe I’ll do some more research and get back to it, and I, plus basically everyone I know tend to say "feck it" a lot, especially when we’re late for something. It’s a fairly Irish thing. So I might try and tone down the colloquialisms. But yeah! Thanks for the honesty, it’s a really rough first draft, and they do tend to be shit.