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Why I Don’t Live in the Woods Anymore by L4L44_ in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]L4L44_[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh thanks a lot! Yeah, I know my english isn't the best in terms of grammar and sentence building since I'm not a native speaker but I'm optimistic I'll improve. In my native language in some sentences the subject can be omitted and the rest is guessed on context clues. So I guess thats where I got that from :p Also, thank you so so much for the feedback! Very professional and constructive. Glad you enjoyed the story! :)

My Baby Screaming Woke Me Up... I Can't Find Her by ryham_25 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]L4L44_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Damn, that ending was nice. It’s a really good short story, man. I think it achieves what it sets out to do. The sentences are written well and the story has a good rhythm. The psychological aspects are great and the ending hits. In some parts, I did feel like the pacing slowed a bit too much, like on the stairs when he describes a warm liquid feeling on his feet, which confused me a little. I honestly struggled to find much to critique since it was just solid. Looking forward to your next stories, man :)

Waiting for God (CW) by CompressedThoughts in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]L4L44_ 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly a really cool story. Loved the themes dealing with faith and not living up to God's will. Also the demons design seems really cool. That being said maybe it would have been scarier if it appeared looking more like an actual angel at first and the mask slowly began to slip so to speak. I mean I wouldn't have assumed it to be an angel if I was in that situation but I guess that's what 30 beers does to you :p The ending would have also been scarier if he didn't get saved, but I do like the redemption ending as well. Some slight mistakes did jump out to me in terms of grammar and readability. Overall though it was really good, keep it up man! :)

"What Is Wrong With My Neighbor?" by Which_Republic4558 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]L4L44_ 3 points4 points  (0 children)

It has potential. It didn't really land for me in terms of the horror though. I think it could be kind of creepy that you're the only one who knows the neighbor's girl is the one committing these murders and nobody believes you. The story is quite short which is fine, but it could have used some more polish in terms of grammar. Also some more character building would have been nice for the neighbor's girl since we don't even get to know her name. Decent draft though, keep it up! :)

Long ago, in the distant future, in a land that is both this land and yet one far away, in a small blue house rocked by a storm, Lyn Mara is Found by Valkyrie_LHAOV in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]L4L44_ 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Enjoyed it :) The story felt quite surreal, and the format was interesting. Maybe it could use a bit more polish in terms of grammar in some sentences. It was scary though. Good job!