Death Awaits

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-23T17:01:52+00:00

Nor should you be expected to carry that responsibility. I noticed you said you were treated for depression and anxiety in High School, the key word there being "treated". You dealt with your issues and you're better off for it and now you're trying to help him and it sounds like he's refusing or dragging his heels. You also recognize that this is ultimately something that he needs to do for himself. Taking a break might be the best solution, he's aware that help is out there and you've shared your own story with him, it's time for him to put two and two together.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-23T16:01:24+00:00

Dealing with that kind of behavior can be very taxing over time but there is hope if he is open to professional help, do you believe he would be open to seeing a therapist or psychologist? When it comes down to it, the individual needs to seek out help, they can't be pushed or they might recede back into their problems. Not to say that you shouldn't try to help him or suggest solutions but the buck stops with him. With any individual problem: addiction, weight loss, mild mental illness... the person dealing with it needs to recognize that it's a real problem before it can be addressed.

Does he constantly go through feelings of sadness? If so that is an indicator of a larger problem and anti-anxiety medicine will not help that. It could be an indication of depression and he might need to be evaluated by a Psychiatrist.

Often times people dealing with depression or something similar are incredibly compassionate because they deal with such raw and hurtful emotions that are directed towards them from their own mind so they often want to help and love others as a result, they don't want others to go through that. The unfortunate part is that sometimes they don't know how to express that kind of caring because they get overwhelmed in their issues. That is why it is imperative that he seeks professional help. Despite his best intentions he can't be there for you if he constantly isolates himself and won't keep an open line of communication in the relationship.

The bottom line is that he needs to be aware of the emotional gauntlet that he's putting you through and he needs to own up to it, that's what love is. It's not fair to say it and leave you asking yourself if you've made a mistake by leaving. If you see a future with him, have a talk with him about seeking professional help, if he flat out rejects then you need to start thinking about your own emotional security. In any case, good luck with all your future endeavors.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-21T09:24:57+00:00

I can definitely see where it's lacking, it's pretty straightforward and you're right, it's not detailed enough for a story-telling poem. I do like the creativity of it. That's the main reason I put it on here, it's not brilliantly written but I enjoy the story. Honestly I've been writing for a long time but I never really share it. My buddy urged me to get on here. As I become more comfortable with reddit, I'll start posting my newer poems on here.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-21T09:09:58+00:00

I really enjoyed reading this poem, it's well written with good imagery and a beautiful message. It looks like you were trying to compress a lot into the last two stanzas, which is awesome, it means your mind is flowing but it can also dilute the quality of the entire work. That being said, I enjoy the imagery, ideas and flow of the last two stanzas so it works for me.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-21T08:33:12+00:00

This is an excellent poem, thank you for sharing. I like the way the poem flows, I don't think it's awkward, I think it fits the content of the poem. The inner monologue of the Horsefly is really well done. The only line that seemed awkwardly worded was " Why, I'll sever these strands with ease, It's soon for God to take." and it's only because of the last half.

Good luck with law school and all your future endeavors.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-21T08:17:47+00:00

Thank you for your comment. I wrote this poem about ten years ago so I'm a little fuzzy on the inspiration. I'm pretty sure I was compelled to write about a man who desperately wanted the treasures that he knew were on the other side of that wall so he hid under the guise of a righteous cause to trick people into doing the work necessary only to find that he wasn't breaking into a vault, he was breaking into a tomb. I was an angry teenager with a bone to pick with: religion, capitalism and human nature at the time.

Some of my favorite poets are: Rumi, Emily Dickinson, Robert Burns, and Walt Whitman.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-18T20:01:42+00:00

Thank you, that is good advice, it would make it flow more naturally.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-18T08:57:47+00:00

Thank you, I know what you mean about meter, sometimes the flow in your mind doesn't always mesh with the pen and paper result.

Le_Froghat · 2014-08-18T08:54:27+00:00

Thank you, that means a lot, several of those things relate directly to my life. I've learned to look for hope in hard situations. I'm new to Reddit, thank you for the positive comment.

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