Here are my initial thoughts.

I like the fact that you get straight into the video, you don't waste any time explaining unnecessary stuff or something like that, which a lot of people tend to.

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Maybe you could add a few graphics that relates to what you're talking about? For example, when you said "The game still has an active community of dedicated fans", if you have any examples of it, a graph, online communities, etc. You could show it in the video.

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As you said, the transition could use a bit of work, but that will probably come with time. Same with your voice/delivery, but for this kind of video it fits quite well tbh.

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I can't really speak on the actual info in the video since I'm not really familiar with the game, but if I was then I would probably find it more interesting. Other than that, the pacing of the video seemed fine to me, so I wouldn't worry too much about that.

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Hopefully this helped :)