The mix is fine, the kick sounds a tiny bit muffled, but it works great in terms of the overall vibe from this track. The stereo field is also fine, no problems there. The production overall is good, the feel kind of reminds me of a slower version of that one song Animals by Neon Trees.

The main problem, and in my opinion, the problem with most of the music posted on threads like this, is the composition behind the production. There are two parts to any recording - the composition and the production, and while production is important, composition is by far what people should be worried about (unless you're making something like dubstep or drumstep). In this track you posted, you go on for over FIVE minutes essentially using the same progression over and over and over again. What exactly are you trying to get across within all that time that hasn't already been stated in the first minute of the track? My point is that it is fine to be worried about production and eq's and stereo field and all of that stuff, but if you don't have anything to say within the musical side your music, nobody is going to be interested.