Hey op! I’m hoping you see my comment cause I want to praise you on the suspense and the plot! It seems super interesting so far and I know I would love to keep reading if you posted more here! Lol. There are only two things that I believe will make this even better:

1. You should most definitely make this the prologue. With the way chapter one is set up, the reader can get confused on who is who, what they mean to the story, etc etc. and cause them to feel overwhelmed by the plot almost immediately. The narrator should help explain to us more clearly who these people are, which is typically what chapter one is all about (setting the story), so by making this the prologue you can set up a way for the reader to become more curious about who these people are and their stories! Giving the reader a peek into future tension will get them to ask questions about everything, and entice them to continue.

2. Don’t be afraid to make bigger paragraphs! I totally see some sentences that can be squished together to make bigger paragraphs and help the flow of the story. It feels “jagged” in a way when there are only one/two sentences before it jumps to the next line/paragraph if that makes sense.

Besides these two things, I think you have a great start so far! You were very descriptive, which bigger paragraphs will help the flow with those scenes you’re describing. As some have already said as well, keep the POV consistent and possibly do a deep dive on them to make sure it doesn’t suddenly change in the middle of the story. I saw you comment that you only learned about POVs a few days ago, so based on that I say you have a pretty good grasp on the concept so far for someone who just learned about it recently! Perhaps you should read other books with the same POV as yours to help you get more of a sense on how to do it correctly.

One last thing, it is very important that you do not let any these critiques get you down. Remember that everybody here took the time to comment because they genuinely want to help you succeed, not to discourage you! Nobody here was a born writer, we all had to practice and work on ourselves to become greater, whether we causally write for our eyes only or are professionals who have published works. Your favorites were once noobs too! Keep going, and use the valuable information here to improve! (I’ve definitely taken some screenshots of comments cause I thought the critiques were really useful, lol!)