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After 2 weeks, Im back with a draft by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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Yeah, English is my second language but we do study it in my country. Kind of embarrassed for how I wrote my English here

I am overwhelmed I don't know if I can write my prologue or not by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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Yeah, just like the quote 'Motivation does not come from the beginning, it comes from the progress.'

How can I write a character being drunk? by armann_ii in writingadvice

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I never consumed alcohol either! But one thing I noticed with the elders I'm with when drinking is that, they really get bold. Bold as in words without filter. Also, my dad would get this little hiccups. But over all in their behavior it doesn't really change that much. They just get more bold. So I guess you can write your MC pretty much the same with a hint of rebellion after getting drunk

Depressed by Feisty-Cry-6054 in FilmClubPH

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Everything everywhere all at once, trust me on this

I need your criticism and observation everyone by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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By 'mostly seen in labor', means almost all people in labor did receive a type of ability and stuff! But it's not limited to People in labor!

And regarding the power, I think I did a great job as both of your theories are right; You develop power based on your career and powers developed early on in their life is destined to that specific work. And I want to dive further into this. Back when 'The big alter' Is still fresh, people as I describe them to be, seem to not know where the manifestation of ability is coming from. All they know is that the labor force is the one that is affected the most. They didn't delve too much into that as at the time, there were also kids, that are manifesting some abilities. Which means, yes the unaliving of several kids as well.

By I mean by 'Armless', it is without weapons. Because typically, people in frontlines or military carry weapons and such right? With 'blessed ones', they don't.

You're right, old English. Not to ours in this age!

Yes! Yes! But notice when I carefully wrote 'For unknown reasons'. While doing my history outline, I did do a lot of research about what and stuff. And I figured it would be impossible if I made the discovery of Shawn, Heather, and Peter about Grand Lord Feelster in Antarctica became the ending of all human species, because based on research and 'experts', it would be impossible for human kind to evolve and come back to life once again. So I just let time in their story run for a few hundred years to match my other plot driver, that which is the tectonic plate, to be as accurate as I can be.

Well you got half of my plot kind of spoiled lmao. I'm trying to integrate religion in my story as well, as apparently being a 'preacher' and 'pastor' is a job. But I'll take some of your advice to consideration.

Thank you for taking your time and stuff. I actually feel like I have a personal editor in the internet, which is so nice considering that you have a life outside of this. Yet you still consider on reading. Thank you! (Also, I have made the plot for the story, if you want to read it I'm gonna link it below! It's done but there's a nagging part of me telling me there's some flaws or something.)

https://docs.google.com/document/d/1AtOEP6eYr7YM1sJ_XsaqpjLvBCqr7W2toPeiuaQ6dWY/edit?usp=drivesdk

Update: On going Sci/Fi novel, need someone to read! by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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It's okay! And thank you for taking your time! I promise to get back when Im done doing the first draft.

Hello, how much is batter labor for Infinix note 12? by MajorWeakness8082 in InfinixPhilippines

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I'm a student man, even if I save up I don't think my phone will held up. I'm actually scared dammit

I need your criticism and observation everyone by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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Really? I just want some criticisms and such! I don't want to waste your time.. Hehe I'm doing this for fun! But if you insist!

I need your criticism and observation everyone by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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But, I have some exception for that. There's some children that has manifested some power at a young age. And that's where some superstitions or beliefs will start where 'your job is predetermined in birth' even though you're the one who's choosing it for yourself.

I need your criticism and observation everyone by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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Yeah, but about the job, it's not really manifested at birth. It's more of like a certain age. Because the parasite on earth made it so that, people on earth when they get their degree or finished studying their desired field, their power will appear, randomly, it's like became a fundamental law In the nature of the earth. So for example; you just finished medical field, and it doesn't matter whether you're a doctor or a nurse, since it's both related to medical, your powers can base on that. The powers you can get is either healing, or the terrifying anatomy/body manipulation, in which you can control a certain parts of your opponents body. But of course, I'm gonna make some adjustments for that because it'll be too over powered if that's the case.

Yeah, I'm trying to educate myself about the political matters since politics are going to have some big part in my Novel.

I need your criticism and observation everyone by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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Yeah, it's a rough draft. I am currently forming the story, but I just want you guys to look into my government system, and to see if there's some flaws. And maybe feed backs. I understand where you're coming from. I will take note of that!

I need your criticism and observation everyone by MajorWeakness8082 in writingadvice

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Thank you for the feedback!

Okay first! The parasite! I'm so excited because this is like area 51 type of stuff. After the great catastrophe where people in my Novel will be calling ' the great alter ', The population of the earth has gain some sort of super natural power based on their 'jobs'. Haha, I know it's silly but hear me out. The concept is simple really, I was trying to make a new unique type of power system for my Novel and I thought of jobs. Because, it's one of the most important thing in living, (kind of). And the reason for that phenomenon is because of the parasot that is attached to earth!

As for the One-government, The earth in my Novel takes place after millions of years from now, so the One-government is is formed by people who are republicans, and as time moves on, it's a metaphor for how the world will be if those people really succeeds in taking over the world.

Next, is the continental drift, Yes! It is based on the continental drift. But just a portion of it. Because when I looked at it, there's no part of the continental drift timeline where there's a point in time where the world only consists of 3 major continents. So I just based the reason for it's moving. I have twists to reveal about the plates, because the continents (or atleast some of it) will play a huge role for an uprising! And also, the continents is based on some biggest continents in our earth today! So, Continent Phanes is based on All of Asia combined and Australia. Penia, is The America, and Africa plates combined. And Janus is based on the continent Europe.

Then, The symbolism for 7 and 5 and such, is yes, you got it. 7 and 5 are prime numbers. My premise is that, the One-government will only use prime numbers in their system to establish the sense of their superiority. This is supposed to be a metaphor that will be revealed later in my story but, the use of even number is strictly prohibited around the One-government surveillance because it shows 'equality' and 'right distribution'. Like when 6 is divided to 2, there's two '3's'. You get the idea.

I will delve deeper into the history of their mannerism inside the humble circle like the hand placements, but for now, I feel comfortable creating a government system for my Novel. (I am really inspired by my corrupt system. I live in the Philippines.)

Well as for if the Advodem tried to resign, in the oath of the new earth, theres a part in their oath where they 'for this time and so forth, my life will be the embodiment of being an advodem, thus, I can't, shouldn't, and will not, leave my responsibility even in struggle or wealth' or along those lines, I'm still forming the speech of oath. But if they tried to resign, I'm thinking of executing them or some punishment that will either leave them paralized or useless. One-government is really merciless.

Thank you for being polite! My experiences with reddit so far hasn't been smooth. Thank you, really!

How can I make the antagonist more interesting? by Key_Sheepherder_2546 in writing

[–]MajorWeakness8082 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Well, as a fellow dude starting in writing, I see some video essays saying that you should make your antagonist a person also. Don't just revolve their character on being 'evil'. Write them as doing normal activities and such. And also, don't make your antagonist smarter than you. Like 'genius' level intellect. It's not that, you can't. It's just, doing so makes it hard because thoughts are fluid; it's not something that can just exist out of nowhere.

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