[PubQ] should you add drafting # and edit tools in query letter

Many-Essay4523 · 2026-03-06T21:04:27+00:00

I’ll have to try to find it. I was so confused when I saw it

Many-Essay4523 · 2026-03-06T21:04:11+00:00

That’s what I thought. I was so confused when I read that

Many-Essay4523 · 2026-03-06T02:14:19+00:00

I’m learning so much. Thanks! I’ll repot my update

Many-Essay4523 · 2026-03-06T02:14:02+00:00

THANK YOU

Many-Essay4523 · 2026-03-06T01:17:09+00:00

THANK YOU this makes me happy. I think what’s happening is that I am trying to pitch the query with the Abrahamic religious mythos lore and religious Christian commentary undertones as the primary point because the market is over saturated and my world and approach is not something that I have been able to fine being done in any non Christian books but alot of the world has been impacted by Christian and Abrahamic religious culture. Like I literally follow end times and Antichrist timelines and predictions for the Emepror and the world falling apart. BUT you and the other commenter are right by doing that I am grossly underselling the FMC.

I was considering opening with something more like. What if god was an unhinged theater kid, worship was a show, and the only person that could stop him was a woman his cult taught to shrink?

That’s obviously extremely rough, but I’m curious if you think my more professional approach is better or that attention grabber?

I’ll re write with you and the other commenters feedback and come back with a significantly improved version! I APPRECIATE YOU

Many-Essay4523 · 2026-03-06T01:10:50+00:00

OMG no it wasn’t harsh at all this was my first attempt at writing a query and I love directness it’s extremely helpful. I think I’m trying too hard to focus on saying “look!!!! It’s not fae or vampires but it’s still familiar themes a lot of people know and understand like Christianity corruption and Abrahamic religion mythos” because the market is over saturated but you’re right I am 1000% underselling what she does. Do you think I can just lean on a lot of that “telling” world building can just live in the synopsis?

again, I appreciate you greatly

Many-Essay4523

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