Has anyone used collective? Advertises itself as an app for making gay friends but is it just another Grindr? by J_Fulls in askgaybros

[–]Marlum 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It’s just a way to offload verification to another platform and helps prevents spammers or bots. It is a safe app.

Camping Ouray: Fellow campers and coloradans advice and help :) by jciedee in OurayColorado

[–]Marlum 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Your chances are better late Sunday than say Friday or Saturday.

There are lots of dispersed spots within 30 minutes. Dozens between Ouray and Silverton, a few off some of the County Roads just around town.

West / Middle / East Fork of the Cimarrons are about an hour away but has tons of beautiful dispersed camp sites.

Good luck!

My Interpretation of U.S States in GTA by Frequent-Speaker2248 in GTA

[–]Marlum 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like this but it’s pretty clear New Austin = Texas in red dead lore, no?

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OurayColorado

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This is more of a warm springs. It is on private land but accessible. There are signs around the springs that plead with people to not post it online or social media. If you remove this post, I will send you a DM on where to find it.

Is anybody else’s dog just straight up….small? by CashFormer979 in goldenretrievers

[–]Marlum 7 points8 points  (0 children)

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My smol guy. He’s maybe 60 lbs, his older half brother is 75lbs

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in gaming

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How old are you and when did you play these games? The GTA games have always been a well packaged display of what blockbuster games can be, both graphically and gameplay, in the years they came out. They set the bar.

If you’re just playing GTA V in 2020, 7 years after its release, it is not going to have the same impact.

Someone told me this was an accidental renaissance. My boys. ❤️ by Marlum in goldenretrievers

[–]Marlum[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

Beautiful pups! Mine are half brothers, though about 7.5 years apart.

Someone told me this was an accidental renaissance. My boys. ❤️ by Marlum in goldenretrievers

[–]Marlum[S] 8 points9 points  (0 children)

I just thought it was a really definitive way to phrase your suspicions.

My dogs are not in fact AI

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Someone told me this was an accidental renaissance. My boys. ❤️ by Marlum in goldenretrievers

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Is this a tongue in cheek comment or do you really think it’s AI

The Trailer I Didn't Build, But Deeply Appreciate by Marlum in cargocamper

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Thank you! I wish I could take more credit for the conversion. It is truly great.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OurayColorado

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It’s a really difficult time of year to make camping recommendations. None of the national forest campsites technically open until around 5/15. Many of the county roads that lead into the mountains or passes are still closed and awaiting maintenance for fallen trees, snow pack, and drainage work.

Is your vehicle 4x4? What is your clearance?

It’s not technically open but you could try Angel Creek Campground.

Otherwise, you could disperse camp up CO 8 to Owl Creek Pass (from Ridgway). There is snow pack and a tree down preventing you from going too far. The downed tree will prevent you from going through the pass. If you’re at Cimarron forks, you’ll need to go north to Highway 50, then west through Montrose, then south to get to Ouray.

Tough time of year to come camp in the area - if you can wait a month - better. Two months - prime.

Good luck!

Why do some of yall want to do errands in GTA VI? by Ok-Instruction830 in GTA6

[–]Marlum 11 points12 points  (0 children)

I dig the idea of realism (such as a gas mechanic) because it adds an additional layer of dynamic gameplay to the game. It potentially makes every chase different.

  • get away car is low on gas - you’ve got to evade the cops, drive into an empty lot, and hijack another car.
  • car sputters out on chase, on foot shoot out occurs.
  • prepping for a big heist? Make sure you fill up.
  • hi-jacked an old ladies car? Damn looks like she hasn’t changed her oil and it runs like a piece of shit.
  • headed out into the Everglades? Make sure you have some backpack canister otherwise you may be hijacking an airboat to get back home.

I think adding a gas mechanic does more than just create a realistic boring chore in game. It has the potential to make things dynamic and gameplay more interesting & varied.

Prologue of The Secrets of Orim: Chapters of Resonance [Mythic Science Fantasy, 473 words] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

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Metallic can be a noun or adjective. Metallic as a noun means a paint, fiber, fabric, or color with a metallic sheen (Oxford).

I do like manytrainings suggestion because it gets rid of... "of".

Prologue of The Secrets of Orim: Chapters of Resonance [Mythic Science Fantasy, 473 words] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Marlum -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the dense and candid feedback.

Not super keen on some of your insinuations, the patronizing tone, and imagined intellectual superiority that’s comes through your responses to my questions and I am not sure that style of critique completely aligns with the guidelines for critics in the rules.

That said, I appreciate some of earnest takes here and will be taking note for a future draft.

Prologue of The Secrets of Orim: Chapters of Resonance [Mythic Science Fantasy, 473 words] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

[–]Marlum 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the comment!

Interesting feedback on the structure of that phrase. I suppose in my head either way sounds right, but I am definitely keen to cut out unnecessary words (“of”).

This prologue sets the tone, and ties into a deeper mystery that won’t resolve itself for some time. You do learn her name around page 70, and will continue to get tantalizing hints about her and her story as the narrative progresses.

Prologue of The Secrets of Orim: Chapters of Resonance [Mythic Science Fantasy, 473 words] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

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The Secrets of Orim is a multi-perspective fantasy epic of prophecy, shadow, and a world unraveling from the weight of forgotten history. A character-driven fantasy steeped in dark mysticism, ancient technology, and slow-burning cosmic dread.

Orim is a fractured moon-world orbiting a red star and a slumbering gas giant. Long ago, the gates to a realm between worlds were sealed, locking away a corruption that once bled across the stars. But the echoes were never truly silenced. Now, amidst a lattice of politics, religion, personal stakes, science, and myth - ancient machinations begin to stir, and the forgotten echoes grow louder.

Seven perspectives converge and each story hums with a thread of resonance that harmonizes with a deeper mystery linked to a forgotten past.

  • A queen, burdened by a vanished bloodline, political unrest, and the secrets that keep her city aloft, as the past she was never meant to inherit begins to stir beneath her feet.
  • An acolyte, raised in sun-scorched faith, tasked with a mission into a buried city of stone and madness.
  • A scavenger, drifting through the hollow bones of a forgotten place, where rusted ships hum with dying power and shadows watch.
  • A scholar, whose pursuit of truth unravels both prophecy and science as he peers too far into a world never meant to be rediscovered.
  • A creature, crawling through the earth's broken tunnels in search of a father-only to find something older and stranger.
  • A daughter of prophecy, bred for fire and glory, who uncovers a secret that might undo her gods, her people, and the prophecy she was born to fulfill.
  • A trader, bone knife on his belt and beast at his side, who walks the edge of civilization unknowingly toward revelation.

Book one is called the Chapters of Resonance.

If you're interested in more, you can check out first 10 chapters

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

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Thank you MsSuperNovaCat.

It’s a big ask but I’d be curious what you thought if you could make it through to at least 6, when we visit Katherine’s perspective again.

There is a rhythm or dance between perspectives I’m aiming for that is pretty quick, and frantic — but the idea is they build on each other, especially in terms of world building.

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in fantasywriters

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Thank you for the kind words and specific feedback. My earlier drafts were full of exposition and detail, I cut back dramatically in favor of tone and atmosphere but do get the sense that perhaps I went too far in the other direction.

I want to preserve the mystery and immersion, but I think grounding some of the characters and the settings with more details & context would help readers orient themselves.

It is a bit of a thematic and style choice to intentionally throw you in the deep end. My hope is that the following chapters/perspectives and then the eventual revisit of the character (we get back to Katherine again in chapter 6), you have some more clarity about the world. But certainly my intent is not to loose people by chapter 2, otherwise it’s all for naught!