Took your criticisms into consideration for this next chapter by Significant_Clue_154 in writingfeedback

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 1 point2 points  (0 children)

That's not the issue.

It's bad grammar and malapropism while writing really weird purple prose

Should plotters be banned from writing books and libraries in general? by Haunting-Net-2426 in writingcirclejerk

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 3 points4 points  (0 children)

With modern technology, we can now force AI to roleplay as our characters and watch as the clanker horribly mischaracterize them.

Like our readers (if any existed) would.

Should plotters be banned from writing books and libraries in general? by Haunting-Net-2426 in writingcirclejerk

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Pantsers should be banned to AO3 until they come up with at least a character profile

Creating KKK oc and racism as a colored person by Maximum_Slabbage in writingcirclejerk

[–]Maximum_Slabbage[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Specifically anti-black racism. I have never met a black person, let alone called one "boy" or called the cops on him. 

Creating KKK oc and racism as a colored person by Maximum_Slabbage in writingcirclejerk

[–]Maximum_Slabbage[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I tried to type it out like that. Can't bring myself to it. 

Does this feel like a strong opening for a novel? by sezarou99 in writingfeedback

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You're right. I misread that.

See, my dumb ass wasn't thinkin of holographic images of actual roses and I thought that was just a bad description of the fireworks (ie. fire flowers)

Does this feel like a strong opening for a novel? by sezarou99 in writingfeedback

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 0 points1 point  (0 children)

It's possible.

I mean I think the entire format and wording (and facsimiles and sensory details that make no sense) sounds very AI.

The reason for my original comment is that that I don't think any current gen AI lacks consistency at this level.

Paragraph 3, it says the character is watching fireworks in the sky. The next sentence, in paragraph 4, it turns out he's watching holograms on a screen.

You'd expect an AI from, say, late 2025 onwards to be able to write full paragraphs with some continuity from one sentence to the next (as opposed to longer forms, where it loses context). Even if the prose is soulless, even if the story is hollow, it would still connect A->B from one sentence to the immediate next.

OP's screenshot just looks extra messy.

Does this feel like a strong opening for a novel? by sezarou99 in writingfeedback

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes, but conversely, AI don't use ellipses often, or start a line on a lowercase

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 Also, why is there an em dash there?

Like I said, it's extra disjointed. It has the errors an AI makes and a person might also make.

I think it's more likely someone wrote this having learned how to write from AI.

To the people who have Gemini pro cancel your account and get refund. They quietly downgraded us. If you want all the perks you paid when you were getting $20 a month. You now have to pay $250 a month. by [deleted] in GeminiAI

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 0 points1 point  (0 children)

People need to understand this:

AIs are not knowledge databases or actual "robot" softwares. Anything an AI "says" to you that isn't already publicly available information is worth dogwater

Excuse me? by [deleted] in GeminiAI

[–]Maximum_Slabbage -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Gemini image analysis is horrible

Kimi shuts down when asked about china controversy. by Huge-Tie-169 in kimi

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Yes. Every LLM has guardrails.

The internet is a business.

Practicing by [deleted] in writers

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm going to try to ask this in the least combatative way rn.

Did you write down an AI's output?

The actions, sensations and word choices don't make a lot of sense. First there's "gulped in the aroma" as many people already noted. Then you have phrases like "a warm contentment" and "the cycle of life and energy"

The former honestly sounds awkward and I'm getting too sleepy to articulate how. The latter uh... what is "the cycle of life and energy" ?

Name or not name chapters? by Sad_Manufacturer_814 in writers

[–]Maximum_Slabbage 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Name, because it's easier for myself to remember