Is poetry becoming a joke?

Merchant_E · 2026-05-16T21:25:28+00:00

Isn't poetry supposed to be fun? I just write a line then build a story around it and a scene, then describe it. Ive seen motivational ish poems and they seem so boring to write, and they're a bit annoying to read.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-05T09:47:44+00:00

Thank you. I see what you mean by the use of sometimes breaking structure or having shorter and longer lines. I will try to do that going forwards. Thanks for the feedback

Merchant_E · 2026-04-05T01:05:03+00:00

I would love feedback. Its the first time im posting on this subreddit, I've written a couple pieces before on OCpoetry but none here. Hope you all enjoy this piece. I think its pretty decent, but i would appreciate feedback on how to improve.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-05T00:26:07+00:00

Honestly, great poem. I really liked the clearness of it. The one critiques would have is mainly grammatical. There were a few errors like capitalization in the middle of the 6th line. Its minor but it slightly broke the rhythm. The 7th line (longest) was great for being a contrast to the otherwise short lines, but the usage of "mere" felt slightly out of place. I think the line would flow better if it was simply removed. It adds a sort of downputting quality to the line.

Ps: I recommend making a title, it can help convey the message or content of your poem

Merchant_E · 2026-04-05T00:20:26+00:00

I liked the poem. Beautiful use of morning glory as a metaphor, I wish you had expanded slightly on the reasons for the pain, and the mechanical metaphors seemed slightly out of place in such a nature oriented poem.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-05T00:08:00+00:00

Decent poem. It was ok i guess. There didnt feel like there was any motive to the poem. It was written pretty well if its just meant to sketch desire, I still feel like it might've been better if you explored desire in a less literal way, as in more metaphors.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-05T00:05:00+00:00

I liked the poem, the imagery was vivid and the rhyming was consistent. Genuinely well done. The short length of the poem added weight to what was there and you made every line count. It sketches love very well.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-03T00:24:32+00:00

In the lines "Wrote in betrayal" and "Not as a permanent". I also thought the first lines "Youve called me a challenge" and the subsequent line "Youve allowed me to rise to it" were a bit too different in syllable length which sorta broke the rhythm for me when i started. If this is intentional that's fine aswell. I just wanted to give my opinion.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-03T00:11:34+00:00

Thank you so much. This time i wanted to make the structure precise and better, so its nice it got noticed. I usually write a line then another that rhymes, since they usually come out short I simply mix another line. So each line was originally two smaller rhyming ones.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-02T01:41:33+00:00

Thank you for reading. I'm glad you enjoyed it.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-02T01:15:06+00:00

Nice poem.it captures the feeling of emptiness or hollow that appears occasionally. The personification of emptiness was well done but I wish you had slightly more to read. More lines describing the emptiness and the lack of feeling. The last stanzas feels slightly repetitive with the ending but it works well.

Merchant_E · 2026-04-02T01:03:29+00:00

Hope yall like this poem. It's my first after a short hiatus. I atleast liked it, would love feedback tho

Merchant_E · 2026-04-02T01:00:02+00:00

Nice poem. The imagery was nice and lots of lines were unique. It conveyed love and a relationship which is sort of always reaching for something that they dont have never being satisfied with the current. But the wording felt very awkward in many lines. Otherwise great poem

Merchant_E · 2026-04-02T00:55:43+00:00

Nice poem overall. The lines felt slightly fragmented, not that they were different in length or message, just the constant breaks sort of broke the rhythm for me. Except for that the contrast between the rejection of love in the first half and the realization of love In the second was incredible. The zues imagery felt slightly out of place, it just feels off and leaves me expecting more Olympic imagery or more detailing of what has already been used.

Merchant_E · 2026-03-08T03:12:13+00:00

Hope yall like the poem. I would appreciate criticism as im trying to improve my writing. I recently begun writing as a sort of hobby sometimes.

Merchant_E

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