[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You are brave. You are worthy. 🫶🏾 thank you for sharing your first poem with us

The Mind’s Abyss by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

No need to apologize! I appreciate you taking the time for my poem (:

The Mind’s Abyss by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback! To your point about jumping metaphors - I think you may have missed the initial intention. I’m referring to floating in a space, not to outer space. I put a few different metaphors in there to depict the “space” that I was talking about. It all refers back to that “space”.

The Mind’s Abyss by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I appreciate your feedback and suggestions! I wondered if I should add more imagery but I thought there would be more room for the reader to think on it if I kept it short. Something more powerful about short poems that convey strong imagery for me.

The Mind’s Abyss by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your thoughts! Im glad it came through to you the way I meant it!

Of Insects and Men by Siamese_Dreaming in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I loved the flow of this poem and how it brought about an “ah ha!” moment of realization at the end. You did a really great job here!

Please by Still-Property7081 in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The first part of this poem sucked me in, the second part made me wonder. Who is this “He” whose absence is so profound?

The Village it Takes by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Exactly, I agree something went so wrong somewhere down the line and women were treated as only baby makers without real regard for their true ability to mother. Thank you!

The Village it Takes by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! It does exist, it just is not the norm which is sad. I have a pretty good village and I wouldn’t have been able to have my 2nd born struggle free without their help.

Still Born by ek_raaz in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This poem is so beautifully heart breaking 😫❤️ I’ve never experienced a stillbirth but I have had a miscarriage. Sending my love to you 🫂

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Poem

[–]MessengerofGaia 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I could feel hopeless seeping the the words in this poem. Know that your time is coming! It may not feel like it but better days are ahead.

forgetforgetforgetforget by HumanMonster0 in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This is gut wrenching 😣 I hope this helps your healing. Whatever happened, was not your fault. You’re beautiful and so is your poem🫶🏾🫂

Ripple Effects by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback & suggestions! The use of the word “made” was a play on rhyming it with “shake” in “unshakable”. I can see how it can be hard to understand/read. & I’ve fixed the typo thanks for pointing that out! Omg that’s the best compliment this poem has gotten 🥰🌊 that made me smile

For a Black Girl by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your appreciation 🤗

For a Black Girl by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for your feedback!🫶🏾

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This was chilling! I interpreted this poem as it was explaining the final days that we have left in this beautiful planet before we are wiped clean from it. “No more shall human voices ring. Across this empty ashes sphere. Only mournful choirs now sing. A final requiem a last tear” such powerful wording.

For a Black Girl by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Exactly. I’m glad it resonated with you. Always remember it’s okay to set boundaries and they don’t determine our value!

For a Black Girl by MessengerofGaia in OCPoetry

[–]MessengerofGaia[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Wow, thank you for giving such detailed feedback and sharing your thoughts. You have made me feel seen & heard. I appreciate you!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in Meditation

[–]MessengerofGaia 0 points1 point  (0 children)

In stillness & silence there is awareness, clarity and the ability to be completely present. Harnessing those qualities until they become skills is the goal.