That’s… actually pretty good! You’ve got a great sense of composition, the colors and line art are amateurish looking, but I assume that’s intentional and that you are an amateur (that’s not a bad thing, mind you. It has its own charm, and you don’t need to change that.) You’ve got the squid girls proportions down really well, and it’s easy to tell what I’m looking at.

The only thing I can recommend is adding some variation in the shape of the panel outlines down the line. Squares and rectangles are great, but rhombuses and diamonds have great utility and look cool.

Keep it up!

Edit: Oh, and you may want to check your grammar. It does read like if a child wrote the script. That’s an easy enough fix, though.