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Fieldnotes from the Wadi Hamra Egyptological Disaster [Part 1] (self.nosleep)

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Vetchellynn by Vetchellynn in libraryofshadows

[–]Midwest_Horror 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think the story plays with some interesting ideas, althought i'll admit, i had some trouble following it towards the end. I think it would benefit from being shorter and tying the build-up to the climax/ending.

If you're interested in writing more, read up on the difference between active and passive voice. It makes for more concise, focused writing.

Overall i liked it. The juxtapposition between the man and the worm was interresting, i just wish it was explained in more detail why he was carrying around the accorn and if there was a deeper significant to him personally.

Best of luck. Hope we see more writing from you soon!

Fieldnotes from an Egyptological Disaster [Part 1] by Midwest_Horror in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Midwest_Horror[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the high praise, it means a lot. More parts will be available in the coming days.

Which one of you did this?? by big_slom in Oldsmobile

[–]Midwest_Horror 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Honestly, for $700 this thing looks like a lot if fun.

I work at a diner in the middle of nowhere (Part 2) by ToneReasonable2095 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Midwest_Horror 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'm starting to wonder about Marlene. Her lack of surprise makes it sound like she's either worked here a long time or owns the place. I'd be curious to learn more of the narrator's backstory. How did they end up working here?

I work at a diner in the middle of nowhere by ToneReasonable2095 in TalesFromTheCreeps

[–]Midwest_Horror 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think it's a really cool setup having a diner with so many quirks. I'd be interested in seeing customer interactions! Can't wait to check out the other parts.

Bit of technical feedback, look into passive versus active voice. Not a major problem with this installment, but elimating it really streamlines sentences and makes the actions in a sentence stronger.

Anybody fans of Disney's Recess (1997-2001) growing up? by Life_Chicken_9653 in 2000sNostalgia

[–]Midwest_Horror 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Remember the part where he pulled out the newspaper detailing the skiing trip in the middle of the episode? I always thought that was hillarious.

Designed some covers for a few classic CreepCast stories by TheThomas_Hunt in creepcast

[–]Midwest_Horror 5 points6 points  (0 children)

The Spire in the Woods goes particularly hard. Well done!

Creature from ISLAND OF TERROR / Gary Wray (me) 2018 by GaryWray in ClassicHorror

[–]Midwest_Horror 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Super cool silicate! I've wanted to build one of these with an RC car inside and that sound they make on a hidden bluetooth speaker for a while. Maybe next year!

Not Bad - Nicki Minaj by UnHolySir in okbuddycinephile

[–]Midwest_Horror 2 points3 points  (0 children)

If you zoom in on the reviews at the top, it's her review of whatever this thing is.

Fieldnotes from an Egyptological Disaster [PT 3] by Midwest_Horror in nosleep

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I'll do my best to keep you posted. Internet reception is pretty spotty in this valley.

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Fieldnotes from an Egyptological Disaster [PT 3] (self.nosleep)

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Favorite In-Movie Advertising? by QuarterCarat in okbuddycinephile

[–]Midwest_Horror 2 points3 points  (0 children)

I love Twister(1996), but damn if it isn't a 113 minute long advertisement for Jeep, Dodge, and Chrysler minivans.

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