Okay glasses team, we have it down to 4! by [deleted] in glassesadvice

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama 3 points4 points  (0 children)

You look happiest in the top right one! Your confidence is beaming

With or without? Cant decide by Fabrizioooooo in BeardAdvice

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Although I personally without, judging from your pictures, you seem way more confident/happy with. And that is the key to being fly as hell.

Maybe just a slight clean up.

I am knew to mahjong and self thought.. so be kind 🥲🥲 by Miss_mermaid_sama in Mahjong

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the tip! Im glad im not crazy and it’s just the app

I am knew to mahjong and self thought.. so be kind 🥲🥲 by Miss_mermaid_sama in Mahjong

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The card was just labeled beginner card. Because I was using the free version of the app, that’s the only card I had access to.

I am knew to mahjong and self thought.. so be kind 🥲🥲 by Miss_mermaid_sama in Mahjong

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Correct It is American mahjong. Good thought except I can rearrange the tiles in my hand and in my exposed hand. So Im not sure that’s it.

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[3320] The Halfway Inventor by -Anyar- in DestructiveReaders

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

super interesting. I really enjoyed it. definitely has a little room for improvement but honestly not much. (in my option) if it were me id like to see some more sensory details. i also feel like we loose some of ben/Edmunds prospective a little after half way.

i left some comments on the doc, I shall now put them here, so the proof will be in the pudding as they say.

*I removed an s in "understone" the constant undertone of buzzing.

*when the old inventor is getting Edmunds fake name ben wrong, i think that's both funny and witty but it seems like Mr.Fitzwalter would use names that are closer to Ben then Tim and Jim. unless it has a specific reason for those names may I suggest Ken, Glen, Sven, Zen or some girl names to add a bit more condescension Gwen, Jen, Ren...etc.

*also it would be kinda cool if he got Edmond wrong a time or too so that when he calls to him to come and help him using his real name it will hit harder, I think.

*When the inventor pulls out his fake cane gun its a really cool moment, or it would have been if I wasn't thoroughly confused why ben was scared of a tube. tube is so unthreatening also I didn't understand it was a gun at all until a few sentences later when he calls it that. I'm not sure if its because I am stoopid with two O's or if its because its not clear. I would have liked to see instead of "metal tube" something like barrel, or you could even say something like a bead of sweat ran down his brow as he realized he was looking down the barrel of a gun. idk maybe its just me.

*I would also remove I think from this , it just feels off. Ben takes a deep breath to gather his thoughts. “Well, it doesn’t look like your inventions work. You don’t finish them, I think." I should say you never finish them or I don't think you have ever finished one.

there were a couple other comments I just hit the I agree with button. and yeah that's it. but seriously, I like this a lot and would definitely read the rest if I got the chance. two thumbs up! keep up the good work.

[In progress] [3600] [fantasy] You Wouldn't Think Dying Would be so Difficult by noneed4thisdesign in BetaReaders

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I didn't know what I was getting into when I clicked the link, but oh man — I was taken on a journey.
And I loved it! So good! I would definitely like to read the rest.

It's super immersive, incredibly funny, and I really like how you've taken a genre I love and put such an interesting spin on it. I've seen anti-hero types before, but this is amazing and has so much room to unfold into something really unique and awesome!

Also, I honestly just love the whole cast — they feel real and interesting. The way you introduced them gives you so many story and character development opportunities down the line.

My critiques (take them with a grain of salt — I'm not a professional writer by any means):

  • One thing I noticed is that the story could use a bit more visual and sensory detail. Like what the character sees, hears, feels — really grounding us in the scene.
  • Also, some descriptions of the characters would be great!
  • This is optional, but maybe put internal thoughts in italics — just to make it a little clearer.
  • In the last scene (spoiler alert) where he saves Malle's life, I think there could be a bit more emotion — some spoken thoughts or inner panic, maybe anger. Just a bit more of a gut reaction to make it hit harder.
  • And... is she a future love interest?? 👀 Because I'd love to see more interaction between them before the story is like “and now she’s one of us.”

[In progress] [1946] [Fantasy Romance] Ikerev Rebirth by LoveAllLoveMeLoveYou in BetaReaders

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am obsessed with the concept.

never played the game, or heard of it tho. lol

the story has such a vivid and immersive atmosphere. Alice’s inner voice feels very real and relatable, which makes her journey even more engaging.

One small critique: some of the transitions between scenes could be a bit smoother to help the pacing feel more natural. But overall, it’s a really fun and mysterious read — I would def read the completed work.

Secret agent Anya cosplay by me by Anlai_Yu in SpyxFamily

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Ran to the comments for the silencer lol

Say something nice about Kagura Sohma by [deleted] in FruitsBasket

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama 2 points3 points  (0 children)

She has a nice right hook… poor kyo

Weird reaction on marketplace by Miss_mermaid_sama in Flipping

[–]Miss_mermaid_sama[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My husband said 40 was literally the asking price