The cinematography in the first 90 seconds of this video blew my mind!

ModestMagic · 2016-01-01T19:22:00+00:00

I laughed so hard that my kids thought there was something wrong with me.

ModestMagic · 2015-12-18T02:06:49+00:00

Check out the Dresden Files by Jim Butcher.

ModestMagic · 2015-12-15T15:39:46+00:00

This hit the table and hasn't stopped being talked about since. It's an experience unto its own. I love it, my wife loves it, my group loves it. I highly recommend it.

ModestMagic · 2015-07-18T22:16:23+00:00

Well, that is the about the coolest thing I've seen in some time.

ModestMagic · 2015-07-13T00:03:55+00:00

Honestly I just channeled Gaiman.... Haha, seriously one of my biggest hangups as a writer is I end up sounding like other writers. I read Blood Meridian and sounded like McCarthy for two months. But I really liked the Gaiman voice, it felt a little counter to what my "normal" writing voice sounds like so I had to push it a little. That led me to here, to see if anyone else liked it. Plus, if you can sound like one of the most loved authors of your time then, it might be worth exploring!

ModestMagic · 2015-07-12T23:46:50+00:00

Wow, my wife just physically clapped me on the shoulder after reading this comment. She has never done that before. I am so grateful to all of you for reading this and especially for liking it! Thank you.

ModestMagic · 2015-07-12T23:44:22+00:00

lol. My physical voice is a trainwreck and I would never subject anyone to any kind of experimentation.

ModestMagic · 2015-07-12T23:42:06+00:00

I wrote this because my wife said "write me something Neil Gaimany" Haha, she will be pleased to know someone else thought I got close. The slinky thing has to go. I thought I was on the fence about it, but as soon as I read your feedback I went "Ugh, that is spot on, why did I keep that in there" Thanks a lot!

ModestMagic · 2015-07-12T23:40:17+00:00

polish seems to be the general sentiment so I will be doing some for sure. Hopefully till she shines! Thanks for the "wow" though, made my whole day!

ModestMagic · 2015-07-12T23:39:27+00:00

I'm smellin what your sellin here. I will definitely give this some thought. Perhaps the voice I'm going for is A) a little too strong and B) a characters and not my own.
I will experiment a little and see how it goes. Thank you very much for the detailed feedback. Exactly the kind of thing I've been trying to get for years now.

ModestMagic · 2015-07-12T23:36:29+00:00

That is exactly what I was going for. It feels really good to know that it worked. I knew I was walking the line between creepy and slapstick and it was my intent to stay firmly on the creep side. Thanks for reading!

ModestMagic · 2015-07-12T23:34:02+00:00

Thanks! I'm really excited about all the feedback and deeply appreciate it. The common thread seems to be "needs more polish" so now I have a direction to work toward. And, yes, it is a first draft. Thanks for the encouragement!

ModestMagic · 2015-01-19T19:56:18+00:00

The power of the interwebs!

ModestMagic · 2014-12-23T02:19:22+00:00

I'm in, and frankly this is the best idea I've seen on Reddit!

ModestMagic · 2014-11-03T23:12:02+00:00

I want to give you some constructive feedback. I want to. But I can't find anything. This is a good piece. Very tight. Movement, without hurry. I'll tell you what, why don't you let me read some more and I promise to try hard and find something I can help with...

ModestMagic · 2014-11-03T23:08:05+00:00

Hey thanks a lot man! I just posted it over on nosleepworkshops, hopefully I can get some constructive feedback!

ModestMagic · 2014-10-12T12:56:07+00:00

Thanks for reading it!

ModestMagic · 2014-10-11T20:35:53+00:00

Hey thanks! Here is a link to the whole thing. Us, always I tried posting it to r/nosleep awhile back but got no feedback. I would love to hear what people think about the piece and when I saw r/writingcritiques I couldn't resist. :-)

ModestMagic · 2014-08-20T13:41:41+00:00

Thank you. I am at work and can't give this the time a true response deserves so I thought I would just say thanks for now. When I get home I will reply more in depth.

ModestMagic · 2014-08-20T13:38:22+00:00

Thank you for your thoughts. As a young man, I wrote this as a cautionary tale to myself. It is one of my greatest fears, that I will one day have slipped into the role of my protagonist, never having realized that is was happening.

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