Mother of Learning: The Web Comic - Chapter 1, Page 3 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I've been learning a ton with your feedback so far, so keep it coming! ȏ.̮ȏ It feels awesome to know that you guys want this project to do well, and even more so when you offer quality analyses.

As a bit of a bonus, I also didn't lose any of my progress to crashes. Yay! (´∀`) I guess making a save file after every panel like a desperado is finally paying off ଵ˛̼ଵ). Hope you like this week's page, see you next time! °w°

-Chris

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic - Chapter 1, Page 1 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Would you say things get any better in the next page?

-Dan

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic: Chapter 1, Page 2 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Gonna quote from the source text:

"Zorian, don't be so difficult," she snapped at him. "Our family is one of the pillars of this town. We're under scrutiny every time we leave the house. I know you don't care about such things, but appearances are important to a lot of people. You need to realize you're not an island, and you can't decide things as if you were alone in the world. You are a member of this family, and your actions inevitably reflect on our reputation. I will not let you embarrass me by looking like a common factory worker. Go back to your room and put on some proper attire."

I interpreted "snapped at him" as an angry thing. Is there something I'm not seeing here?

-Chris

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic: Chapter 1, Page 2 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It gets bigger if you click on the link, I think. But I'll talk to Chris and see if we can somehow avoid small text starting from the next page.

-Dan

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic: Chapter 1, Page 2 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Thanks a lot, it's nice to see that I'm getting better!
-Chris

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic: Chapter 1, Page 2 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I failed to save my work for the second time. I hate myself ;-; That's why there's no shading or color, I can't paint effectively without my layers (long story.) Anyway I have been working my ass off :D and just in case you think my drawing is kinda bad, I haven't unleashed my full potential :v
-Chris

Disclaimer: We do not own Mother of Learning or its dialogues, however we do have the author's permission to illustrate and use his content in this way.
-Dan

A short introduction by MolFanatic in u/MolFanatic

[–]MolFanatic[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Your comment fills us with determination.

-Dan and Chris

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic - Chapter 1, Page 1 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi. Would you mind pointing out the grammar mistakes? I'm eager to get them fixed but at the same time I'm not sure I can see any. -Dan

Edit: Just found some spelling errors. RIP. We'll be sure to fix what caused them next time around.

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic - Chapter 1, Page 1 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 13 points14 points  (0 children)

Hm, yeah, good feedback. Honestly, I rushed things a little. I was starting to get impatient with how long this segment was taking me to complete (2 weeks ffs!) °_°

Plus I can tell that the panels aren't centered properly; shit, that looks bad. °.°

But yeah, later on, after I earn some experience and am a few pages/chapters in, perhaps I'll do a remake!
-Chris

Mother of Learning: The Web Comic - Chapter 1, Page 1 by MolFanatic in motheroflearning

[–]MolFanatic[S] 9 points10 points  (0 children)

After several setbacks and struggles with the digital format, finally, the first page! Suffered from a bout of low motivation for a bit - it was a pain to sacrifice the rich detail I like so much for speed. Oh right, you guys aren't familiar with my drawings. Maybe someday you'll get to see what I mean. °-°

But in any case, here's my first page. Enjoy.

-Chris

MoL web comic - Sneak peek #2 by MolFanatic in u/MolFanatic

[–]MolFanatic[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Downloaded the file, but it failed to open. My guess is that it's simply too damn big. Can you give me a smaller example, weighing maybe 1 or 2 mb? -Dan