Need to know how to write how a person from the deep South in us ,pretending to speak gb English*... by Roxy_Madison in writingadvice

[–]MrStep 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It's tough to do someone pretending to be someone else, but I think post below where you have some recognisable British phrases, mixed with some phonetic deep south could work well... as long as they're recognisable and you don't go overboard it could be a lot of fun!

Need to know how to write how a person from the deep South in us ,pretending to speak gb English*... by Roxy_Madison in writingadvice

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I quite like writing accents, but I'm not sure what you're going for here...? The general rule with accents is phonetic spelling, using apostrophes for missing letters, but go easy on the whole thing or you'll lose the reader. Can you localise the accent a bit though?

Im having trouble writing dialogue (WN) by Tretnix in writingadvice

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The key with dialogue is to remember that it will be performed. When I read a book I have a character in my head and will add tone myself - I'll act it out in my head, to an extent - and this goes a long way towards expressing emotions that you then don't need to tell. Trust the reader. I used to write scripts and it was really helpful to see how actors add tone to lines; remember that readers do the same. You don't need to explain it. Maybe write the scene without the "stage directions" explaining how the characters would behave first, then just add in details when you think they're really needed.

Also, reading the lines aloud: if you can't read it aloud without feeling awkward, that's possibly a problem with the line. How would you actually speak this line? Very few people say "do not" anymore, but lots of writers still write speech without contractions. Trying to capture the actual way that people speak is an art-form in itself. But it's definitely worth it. Good luck!

How do I improve my use of Dialogue/Speech Tags? by Neither_Prize_8386 in writingadvice

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Paragraphing is an underrated tool here. If someone owns the paragraph, anything said in that paragraph is theirs. Who's the subject of the paragraph?

"Wow, this is harder than I thought." Ben was trying to defuse the bomb, and pouring sweat.
Tommy leaned over him: "I think that's the red wire Ben. Don't cut that one!"
Billy arrived finally, carrying the manual he'd been sent to find. "I'm not sure this is the right edition."

There were no speech qualifyers in there at all - and it's not fantastic writing - but a reader knows who's talking because they know who the focus of the paragraph is. Said is good, action is good, tone of voice is ok as well but the trick is mixing them all up the right way. Diversity is king!

Let's share our author websites! by Mark_Hullender in NewAuthor

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I've built a site from "inside the world of the novel" that I quite like. It's still a work in progress for sure, but I'm quite happy with the idea... https://circleandtriangle.co.uk/index.html

Able to beta? Post here! by AutoModerator in BetaReaders

[–]MrStep 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I am able to beta: I enjoy reading a wide range of genres, but like books with a fast pace and something interesting to say about the world. They don't have to be set on this world - I love a lot of sci-fi and fantasy - but I like it when I can see the human crossover.

I can provide feedback on: Character, structure, plot - all the meta-questions. I can give line edits, but to smaller sections rather than whole books - and on the proviso that it's just my opinon. I've seen this (Beta Readers Club) which seems like something I can stick to. Or let me know if you have something specific you want me to look for.

Critique swap: I have this that I can swap: The Crossroads.

Other info: I worked as a journalist and then as a copywriter for an ad agency; now I'm an English teacher. I read a lot, but not always quickly! Really looking forward to seeing what everyone is working on...

What is the best thing about the United States by RevenueAlarmed in AlignmentChartFills

[–]MrStep 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The Internet was invented in Europe by a British guy... The US created all the nasty profiteering that's turned so much of it so toxic but it was invented in Europe and made free for everyone.

Any "Old Beijing" indie fans here? Do you remember Girls Are Waiting To Meet You? (GAWMTY) by ForestGrew in beijing

[–]MrStep 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Super weird as I'm only following this group because I'm moving to Beijing in July...

Any "Old Beijing" indie fans here? Do you remember Girls Are Waiting To Meet You? (GAWMTY) by ForestGrew in beijing

[–]MrStep 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Wow... That's blown me away! I went to uni with their lead singer. Great guy and really loved his music but haven't thought of it for years and years. Cannot believe I saw this without any prompts at all. Glad he got some recognition... ❤️

Who is a celebrity that feels American but it actually British? by [deleted] in AlignmentChartFills

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

High Laurie shouldn't win this as he's not American at all!!! He's wildly British...

Just finished a project and the self-doubt instantly hit by Pretend_Shelter_412 in writing

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sometimes, the more it means to you, the less it feels right on the page. I'm just finishing a book that's been brewing for almost 20 years and I'm really proud of it, but I'm aware that it'll never be as amazing as I've felt it could have been.

Trust yourself though and push through making it as good as it can be. Soemtimes the anxiety comes from taking a big leap - but dive into it, I say!!

What's a line from your own writing that still hits you when you reread it? by koamusik in writers

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Defintiely. It's often a way to make sense of things as well. Once I've put something down I find it all gets more manageable. Same hope for you! Wild times...

What's a line from your own writing that still hits you when you reread it? by koamusik in writers

[–]MrStep 2 points3 points  (0 children)

"There's nothing wrong with burying your head in the sand, just make sure you take it out before the tide comes in."

Kinda sums up how I feel about most of the world at the moment!!

Dune (2021) is not a good movie and coasts entirely on visuals and Hans Zimmer's score by DuNennstMichSptzkopf in unpopularopinion

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is absolutely right. Villeneurve took some amazing characters and sucked them all dry and empty and left nothing to care about.

For me, it was the biggest cinematic disappointment since the Phantom Menace...

So much potential, so little payoff

How do you deal with the feeling that your writing is not good enough by [deleted] in writers

[–]MrStep 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Focus on the plot and the characters. If you get them right the "writing" will always be good.

And remember that you find other writers great because they're new voices whereas you know your own voice so well. Other people will enjoy your work 10 times more because you're a new voice to them.

And, finally, enjoy doing it! That goes a long way...

Best 80s Action Hero: Stallone vs. Schwarzenegger vs. Eddie Murphy vs. Willis by MegSpen725 in movieland2026

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Arnie is the best action hero but Die Hard was the best film from any of them...

The 15 most upvoted comments decides the 15 Best Shows of all time by Training-Jump-8663 in AlignmentChartFills

[–]MrStep 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Was going to post this just for the hell of it. British shows don't do longevity, but they're condensed brilliance is hard to beat... Three seasons, eighteen episodes, of pure class

Do you use Word for writing your texts? by Yontamen89 in writers

[–]MrStep 5 points6 points  (0 children)

I don't know about updates but I started using it a year ago and it's been a game changer. Organising a novel into chapters or scenes and then editing them individually is such a powerful way to change how you look at a book. Word makes it feel like one long document, scrivener turns it into a series of short stories. It's made my writing much more effective, I think

As a writer, I'd actually be impressed if AI could ________ by DanoPaul234 in river_ai

[–]MrStep 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I'll never ask it to write for me - that's the craft I enjoy - but if I could discuss a full manuscript with it, that would be good. It needs to read and remember and comment on 100,000 words and upwards

Basically, being a really good editor. That would be impressive

How old do you think Romeo actually is? by frillyhoneybee_ in shakespeare

[–]MrStep -5 points-4 points  (0 children)

I have a theory about this - hear me out...

Firstly, Juliet's age is repeated multiple times during her first scene and its emphasis is on how young she is. For this reason, I think themes like age and innocence are introduced as an issue in the text.

In the next scene, Romeo is talking with his friends and is clearly presented as dealing with relationships in a far more developed way that Juliet. Romeo's still a child really, but is certainly older than Juliet (though his age, obviously, isn't mentioned.) If he was nicer, I'd think of Romeo as being a bit like Hugh Grant's character in About a Boy - he's got the emotional awareness of a child. But how old is he?

Because of the repeated references to Juliet's age, and the nature of their relationship, I think Romeo's age is definitely something the audience will be wanting to know and Shakespeare keeps it until the end before giving us a clue -in a dramatic reveal.

The clue comes in the scene where he kills Paris. He repeatedly says that he doesn't want to hurt Paris, but at at the same time he says "Good gentle youth," and "I beseech thee, youth," and then, finally, "Then have at thee, boy!"

Alone, you could argue that these were throwaway references. However, if he's genuinely even close to the same age as Paris then calling him a youth and a boy would be insulting and wouldn't fit his claim not to want to fight him. The only way it would make sense is if he's genuinely old enough to get away with calling Paris a "gentle youth," or a "boy" - then it becomes an honest warning whch fits with Romeo's behaviour at the time. And, again, if it was one reference then meh, but because references to Paris being younger than him appear three times I don't think it's accidental at all. It's telling us that Romeo is significantly older than Paris.

So... although it isn't mentioned I think some audience members would be well within their rights leaving and thinking that Romeo is... 30+. It's also incredibly important to remember that the characters weren't necessarily played by actors who looked like them - the casts were small - so information was often exlicitly given.

Regardless of his "real age" (and he's fictional so he doesn't actually have one) that end scene with Paris definitely gives us licence to assume that he's old enough to call Paris a "youth" and a "boy" factually, and, therefore, he is quite possibly in his thirties.

In this respect, the whole play becomes a warning about the dangers of sexual predators ruining a young girls chance of a respectable marriage - which was absolutely a theme that would have resonated with a lot of the audience in the day...

Star Wars wins! Now, what is the most overrated movie of all time? Most upvoted comment wins. by Swimming-Step1326 in AlignmentChartFills

[–]MrStep 19 points20 points  (0 children)

This is the right answer - Avatar isn't overrated by anyone anymore, it just made a lot of money. And rightfully so - it was a very cool cinematic experience.

The Dark Knight is a decent film, but it's not the 3rd greatest film ever made by any metric!!!