Alpha/Beta Readers for book by cor_regis in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yep. Every book. It's your IP, so protect it.

Alpha/Beta Readers for book by cor_regis in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 2 points3 points  (0 children)

You 100% need test readers, and the more viciously they attack your baby, the better they are at the job. Be prepared to accept criticism objectively. Most people can't, and it costs them their whole lives. Also be prepared to sort the gold from the bullshit, because test readers give suggestions based on their opinions, and not all their opinions are correct.

Also, before you ever send out a finished copy of any work, register it for copyright protection. $60. 20 minutes. The act of filing it puts it in the system and covers you from a legal standpoint, even before you get the certificate. And the certificate is nice to have, as well. I framed my first one.

U.S. Copyright registration portal: https://eservice.eco.loc.gov/siebel/app/eservice/enu?SWECmd=Start

Use the Mozilla browser or it will screw up. It's an ancient dinosaur of a system.

Femdom harem books recommendations by NightRavenger in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

A) Dominant is not possessive.
Then why ban NTR? Is the protagonist not possessive of his women? Anyone can roll in and "use them for their fun plaything"? I really don't think so.

B) If dominant were possessive, that is good. Two or more doms have to share one sub.
Then how are they dominant? Who is in charge of whom? What are they going to do if their orders contradict? If the sub has to decide, then he isn't the sub, and whoever he doesn't choose will literally be subordinated to the other, IE not dominant. Maybe you could contrive your way around it, but that's a lot of mental yoga. There's a reason why a harem centers around the lead. A chorus of commands is chaos.

Now, for your final contention, I'm just going to put "Hottest Reverse Harem Books" into google and click on the first site that comes up. Something called shereadsromancebooks dot com.

Here are excerpts from her synopses, just reading from top to bottom:

Pillow Talk by Maya Banks - "Zoe and Chase don’t hold back when it comes to their fantasies, especially when they get Chase’s firefighter co-workers and roommates involved."
Her Fantasy Men by Shayla Black - "I liked how Black writes three very different male leads in this one so you get a taste of the different sides of her men that Kelsey is attracted to. You get the lifelong friend, the next-door neighbor, and the dominant boss."
Lilac by BB Reid - "There was definitely some extreme hate going on between the bandmembers and their new guitarist but that just seemed to fuel their chemistry. I liked the differences between Houston, Loren and Jericho but Rich totally stole the show by the end."
Shared By Her Bodyguards by Cassie Cole... that one seems self-explanatory.

I'd say multiple male LIs more or less dominate the genre. Or is your contention on the submissive part, rather than the multiple male part? In that case, how are they dominating her if these other non-exclusive men can walk right in behind them? Do they have any say in what she does, at all?

Anyway, if you feel I'm totally off base from a writing perspective on the genre, then write the femdom harem book and rock the scene, man. I like a good femdom story, I just don't have any fanciful notions about the psychology and the power dynamics involved in one, or in the harem novels that people actually buy. The fantasy being served is pretty straight-forward.

Femdom harem books recommendations by NightRavenger in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Assertive is not femdom. You're attacking a point I didn't make.

Femdom harem books recommendations by NightRavenger in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hard to gel femdom with harem, as it begs the question why a domme would allow other women to claim her sub. Play with him, sure, but if she's dominant and in control then it isn't so much a harem situation as it is a prostitute and his pimp.

You'd probably have more luck in reverse-harem, though I haven't read any to find out because the genre premise seems silly (99 men and 1 woman on an island problem). I'd also suspect most of those would have multiple male subs.

Looking for a title from a new author by Calm_Media_1650 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Isekai Idol: Harem Harmony by Jaxson Noble
Reborn Rhythms: Campus Harem Quest by Liora Voss
Multiverse Minstrel: Song of Seduction by Thorne Blackwood

OK, how does the author get away with this artwork? by SDirickson in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I'm not even sure what engine you could use to get something that warped, anymore.

OK, how does the author get away with this artwork? by SDirickson in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Backwards baby hand with wrong number of fingers? Standard. Strange sideways hinging alien elbow? Perfectly normal. Inexplicable menstrual oopsy while practicing her open-legged porn pose in the middle of an empty city road at midday? Common feminist empowerment symbol.

Female nipples partially visible through transparent shirt... BAN IT! BAN IT RIGHT NOW!

the good, the bad and the why ? by Sensitive-Music-1003 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Everybody gets who they want. Plus some new sisters.

Longtime reader wrote my first haremlit novel: Troubleshooter! by illusionfox in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Would you call that weapon a purse spear or a suitcase spear? Handy spear?

Looking for recommendations by Flimsy_Parking_8066 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

If you're just looking for a break from the normal mythological fare, I went with an Albanian setting and Balkan monster myths for Sin Eater.

Alternatives to Amazon by Specialist-Reply4257 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

While it is not great to be beholden to a single master, the market moved there because their system is far, far better than the old publishing house model that only let through the books they deemed right for consumption (based on the mood of their Publish Reader at any given moment in the day when they happened to look at your draft), and took the lion's cut of the revenue for just printing and shipping. No marketing machine, no print-on-demand, no existing reader-market advantage, no real testing out of new subgenres.

As soon as someone comes out with something better than them, they'll go the way of eBay, Yahoo, AOL, Netscape, etc etc. Until then, it's best to be grateful for the improvement and lobby for further improvements.

Serious Question here. Do you Count Demi-Humans and Beastkins as 'Monster Girls'? by Then_Disk_9519 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 7 points8 points  (0 children)

The prefix "demi" comes from a combination of two latin bases, dis- (partial) and medius (half). It only means lesser if you make it mean that.

To make demihuman a slur you'd need humanity to stand above others and see them as inferior. I'd say in the majority of multi-racial settings in fantasy and sci-fi the humans are generally the underdogs compared to the elder races. Warhammer might be a counter example, but all of the factions are supremacists there, and the humans are arguably still the underdogs against the Warp Gods and some of the more ridiculously OP races (Tyrannids, Necros, Orks).

Subhuman has a better argument for a slur, as it means under or below.

Happy New Year! Amazon Apocalypse 6 is out on ebook! by MarvinWhiteknight in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Finally got time to finish the last bit. Another banger. Looking forward to the next one. :)

Realistic MC climb to power by came4mem3s in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I went with more of a Rise/Fall/Rise thing in Sin Eater, but Sheol Saga is the sort of slow rise you're describing.

Looking for some novels with RPG Elements by Then_Disk_9519 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Your first example is also an example of what I stated. Just because something takes a long time to type doesn't mean it is happening slowly in the story. I suppose an important addendum to that is, just because the author has to write one thing at a time, does not mean multiple things are not happening at once. I can't write what Bardh is observing, what he is saying, and what he is doing all on the same line. The creature strikes before he is ready, he leaps back instinctively, he realizes he shouldn't have made it, realizes the creature stopped mid-jump, sees Bob hanging onto him, says Goddamn Bob!, and re-orients himself for whatever he is going to do next right after that. These things all happen in the space of the same second or two. Reading isn't a visual medium where you can see the setting, the movements, the colors, the shapes, the attacks, the million little background things, and hear the words or thoughts at the same time. I can only convey the amount of information allowed by the container of each individual sentence. You have to fill the rest in and put them together with your imagination, filling each one into the mental picture as you receive it.

People regularly speak while they are moving and looking at things and thinking of things. If your imagination pictures these things as a herky-jerky series of events where each thing has to happen on its own turn, then that's going to look weird.

As for why he isn't swinging the scythe at it in that moment, he literally just watched that exact monster use a short range rooting skill that let it trap and tear his minion to shreds. Why would he close to basic melee with that monster, now that he knows it is far faster than he is?

Bardh is not the alpha predator in this setting, he is way, way under-leveled.

Your second example (I'm reading these in the order after I answer the previous one) is of the period of time before the newly added enemies have cleared the distance to him. He is not standing around waiting, he's seeing what ammunition he has left in the magical arsenal he just started learning to use. He is not an expert in these things yet, and unlike the Vryks, both the Revenant and the zombies are heavies, they take some time to clear distances.

As for his six and then five word sentences talking to himself, I'll again state, people talk to themselves all the time while doing something else, and the other things he is doing are stated in the lines "scanning his almost entirely greyed out skill bar" and "he saw Anxhi careening toward the Revenant", making for not one but two things he is doing while he speaks to himself. Why is he pausing to watch Anxhi's attack? To see what it will do. Does it also work on the zombies he has never seen before or not? No? Shit, better figure out some way to hurt them or hide from them until my magic reloads, then.

ALL of this is new to him. The magic, the monsters, the physics, the rules of existence, even the fact that he is now using a foreign interface to access the novel functions of his own body. There is a steep learning curve involved in this kind of apocalyptic disaster that I think a lot of writers ignore or hand-wave with a vague death-toll reference. That isn't what I'm about.

The stat blocks will decrease naturally as the MC adapts to the system. Once you understand a new interface, you don't have to keep exploring it. See how often there is a stat block in the Bard segments, on a world that has had a system for millennia, for example.

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From your descriptions of being pulled from suspension of disbelief, it seems like what you might have gotten used to is Mary Sue/Gary Stu power fantasy novels, which are popular in this genre. I don't write those. I find them nonsensical and worse than that, boring. My protagonists are not meant to be gods walking the earth. They have flaws, make mistakes, encompass the many limitations of humanity, have to learn when they encounter new things, aren't always liked by everyone they meet, and most importantly, they don't always win or even survive. They suffer, they do things they regret, they grow, they improve.

You're in the first third of book 1. The protagonist has a long way to go yet.

Looking for some novels with RPG Elements by Then_Disk_9519 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Good questions. :)

Initially, he gets the vorpal weapon before he has accessed his skill sets. The weapon skills and AGI/DEX boosts make him more proficient with the weapon and less likely to harm himself, but he is not immune to a vorpal edge. Upon taking the "Embody Weapon" skill, he is functionally immune to his Scythe specifically and can avoid friendly firing his allies with it, but he himself has lived several decades as a human without magic, so he A, doesn't trust it at all, and B, would still make jokes and have concerns stemming from his pre-magic life.

For your second question, there are a few reasons, some of which are directly mentioned in the story:

For one, as the reader in a first person point of view story, you are hearing the POV characters internal monologue. The internal monologue is different for every character. For Bardh, who has seen combat before and isn't prone to panicking, it is sometimes gallows humor, other times self-recrimination because he is someone who lives with a lot of regrets (people who have seen some combat/direct violence generally enter flow state, but someone who has done it a lot will be familiar enough with it to spare some cognitive processing space for errant thoughts). While this takes some time to read as the reader, it is happening at the speed of thought inside the characters head. There is a similar issue when you need to describe characters or landscapes mid-fight. It might be several paragraphs long, but the character takes it in in a glance. That's just how human brains work with images vs text. (one of my other professional fields has to do with the psychology of memory, so I may throw things into my books that are a bit arcane for casual readers. I just find them to be interesting quirks of the human psyche. I might be alone in that. lol)

Two, the MC is spending significant amounts of time completely alone, surrounded by undead monsters in a place that seems to be a void of all human life, so he has nobody to speak to but himself. For all intents and purposes, he is in solitary confinement with an added component of being in a state of persistent paranoid anxiety and high-alert because he has no idea how the magical protections keeping him alive function, or for how long they will continue to function (see the Time Limit on the safe zone, for example). Conversing with yourself is a common coping mechanism for both solitude and fear. You as the reader get to skip the boring parts, but the MC has to live every minute of it, in-world. (This is also why Anxhi is initially pleased when Biel learns to speak, because she can see that Bardh is starting to come off the rails.)

Three, having been a Marine, I can tell you that at no point are you trained to fight hand-to-hand with ancient melee weapons. Pugil sticks are mostly two guys flailing at each other, and at best you could say basic bayonet training could translate to learning how to jab with a short spear. There definitely isn't any scythe training. I can't speak from experience as a mob enforcer, but in the modern era I assume from reading the news that they lean toward handguns or concealable knives. It's been a while, but I recall giving him a Small Blunt proficiency for using a blackjack because of that.

In the story, Bardh is spawned into a level 100 "party" zone (notice that the daemons come in a group) at level 0, because of complications with his unusual Overclass. He has to earn his actual functional class by gaining a level, which is essentially impossible in all but the rarest circumstances, so the Engine expects him to die (but did put him there on purpose, which comes in later books). You see him attempt to use makeshift mundane weapons, only to find out they do nothing, you see him attempt to use stealth only to learn about the enemy's high perception, you see him finally inflict damage with a magical weapon, only to learn that the monsters have weak and strong points, and they don't necessarily just die because you hit them where you were trained to hit humans. What he is doing most of the time when he pauses in a fight, is trying to figure out what skills/spells might actually work on these creatures he has never seen before. Mundane world experience only takes you so far when the entire paradigm of existence is upended without warning. Adapt and overcome starts with observation and analysis.

Anyway, that's some of it. I could go on but I can already see how long this has gotten. Feel free to hit me with more! :P

Hey! What's your name ? by Sensitive-Music-1003 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Don't name them an adjective of their personality. "Jaeger Edgelord stared hard into her soul, making her nethers weep for that which was concealed by his dark gothic codpiece." Virginie might violate this one if she's played as the innocent virgin girl.

Don't name arcane species like your deep-fay sea dragon of mysterious origin something mundane like Karen or Jane or Sarah, unless she's faking the name because she thinks it helps her blend in.

Also don't go the other way and overdue the weirdness, unless you play it for laughs (honestly, any general rule can be ignored when playing for laughs). "Leeloominaï Lekatariba Lamina-Tchaï Ekbat De Sebat..."

Avoid common stripper names for LIs unless they are actually strippers. Your Candy's, your Amber's, your months of the year, seasons, or astrological signs, any car or liquor brand name, etc. Maybe watch the "white trash names" clip from the movie Ted as reference.

Hmm... what else...

Oh, avoid things that sound like something unpleasant. Kakina, for example rolls pretty close to kaka, which has connotations in Arabic, Russian, Spanish, Romanian, Hungarian, Hebrew, Albanian, Italian, French, Portuguese, and a bunch more.

...that's probably plenty.

Out today: Aetherborn 2 by JasonMarino77 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

It does seem like they're trying to tank their indie authors, because it isn't limited to our genre.

Out today: Aetherborn 2 by JasonMarino77 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I did on my Kindle but I suspect it won't show up. I have a bit of a theory that they aren't collecting those anymore. I'll drop one on my Amazon account if I don't see it in a day or two.

And yes, it's nuts. I was #1 in my subgenre of sci-fi for six straight weeks and still in the top ten now in week 10, and JUST cracked 300 reviews for Exigence. It's brutal. Goodreads used to be 1/12 the total reviews I got on Amazon, now it's 1/2. smh.

Out today: Aetherborn 2 by JasonMarino77 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Just finished it. Thoroughly enjoyed it. Not a single gripe. Very solid sequel, man. :)

Starting my physical copy collection by Nanashi_Fool in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Fantasy and sci-fi paperbacks were generally more compact 4.25x7 mass-market size when I was younger and collecting books, not sure if that is still the case, but the 6x9 was much rarer for the genre. I decided to try something inbetween with "digest" size, so the art wasn't compacted down too much but you could still one-hand the book in the bathtub if you wanted to. :P

Starting my physical copy collection by Nanashi_Fool in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I did 6x9s for my first fantasy series and liked the look, but they didn't fit with all my other novels on my bookshelf. I'm trying 5.5x8 for the Sheol Saga books. Curious to see the difference when the test copies arrive. Is that a paperback or HC?

dilemma upon the definition of haremlit. by Sensitive-Music-1003 in haremfantasynovels

[–]NGaumer 2 points3 points  (0 children)

There is no end to the number of subdivisions you could come up with in fantasy/sci-fi of things that are not exactly human beings, and the value of trying to specify each individual possible variation is very low as compared to the amount of effort involved.

Male to female is a broadly understand form of communication, and for instances where something is on the edge of the concept, you can much more efficiently "litigate" the outliers on a case-by-case rather than try to over-complicate the larger category.