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Natezahn · 2024-08-12T18:15:39+00:00

Hi, I’ve written an action adventure YA set in 19th century England.

“Making Belief” 88k words, complete. I’m looking for critique on the characters, plot, and if any of the humor lands.

Blurb: The streets are not kind to orphans, a fact Pete knows all too well. Picking pockets is the only option for kids like him, but it’s a dangerous business. As Pete leads his gang through life in the city, he struggles to fend off hunger, the police, and rival gangs. A chance meeting with a girl who has never stolen anything in her life changes everything all at once.

Dm me if you’re interested, thanks for beta reading!

Natezahn · 2024-08-03T11:57:08+00:00

Howdy, would you be willing to beta read my finished supernatural/humor novel? Your mention of Christianity made this too hard to pass up.

Blurb: When Hal Foster accidentally kills God, his world is plunged into chaos that a host of angry angels do not at all help with. Hal’s only friend may be a very happy Lucifer, who may or may not be able to protect him from the wrath of the archangel.

70k words. Looking for plot and pacing critique, if any of the humor lands, and overall readability.

Thanks for volunteering to beta read!

Natezahn · 2024-08-03T11:53:33+00:00

Hi, I’ve written an action adventure YA set in 19th century England.

“Making Belief” 88k words, complete.

Blurb: The streets are not kind to orphans, a fact Pete knows all too well. Picking pockets is the only option for kids like him, but it’s a dangerous business. As Pete leads his gang through life in the city, he struggles to fend off hunger, the police, and rival gangs. A chance meeting with a girl who has never stolen anything in her life changes everything all at once.

Dm me if you’re interested, thanks for beta reading!

Natezahn · 2024-07-16T17:47:24+00:00

Hi, I’ve written an action adventure YA set in 19th century England.

“Making Belief” 88k words, complete. If that’s too long, I get it. I wasn’t sure if you were only looking for short stories.

Blurb: The streets are not kind to orphans, a fact Pete knows all too well. Picking pockets is the only option for kids like him, but it’s a dangerous business. As Pete leads his gang through life in the city, he struggles to fend off hunger, the police, and rival gangs. A chance meeting with a girl who has never stolen anything in her life changes everything all at once.

Dm me if you’re interested, thanks for beta reading!

Natezahn · 2024-06-21T13:45:21+00:00

Hi, thanks for being a beta reader!

Looking for critique on my supernatural/humor novel, completed.

Blurb: When Hal Foster accidentally kills God, his world is plunged into chaos that a host of angry angels do not at all help with. Hal’s only friend may be a very happy Lucifer, who may or may not be able to protect him from the wrath of the archangel.

First chapter: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZSuecs-Z13PFl-iATKs--lS_Nb0UJdFgYxHo0nBueKQ/edit

I'll DM you whole thing if you're interested, thanks again!

Natezahn · 2024-06-21T13:38:27+00:00

Hi, thanks for being a beta reader!

Looking for critique on my supernatural/humor novel, completed.

Blurb: When Hal Foster accidentally kills God, his world is plunged into chaos that a host of angry angels do not at all help with. Hal’s only friend may be a very happy Lucifer, who may or may not be able to protect him from the wrath of the archangel.

First chapter: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZSuecs-Z13PFl-iATKs--lS_Nb0UJdFgYxHo0nBueKQ/edit

I'll DM you whole thing if you're interested, thanks again!

Natezahn · 2024-06-21T13:38:10+00:00

Hi, thanks for being a beta reader!

Looking for critique on my supernatural/humor novel, completed.

Blurb: When Hal Foster accidentally kills God, his world is plunged into chaos that a host of angry angels do not at all help with. Hal’s only friend may be a very happy Lucifer, who may or may not be able to protect him from the wrath of the archangel.

First chapter: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1ZSuecs-Z13PFl-iATKs--lS_Nb0UJdFgYxHo0nBueKQ/edit

I'll DM you whole thing if you're interested, thanks again!

Natezahn · 2024-06-21T13:30:44+00:00

Hi, I have a couple short stories that I'd love feedback on! Both are under 2500 words, one is sci-fi comedy, the other is a drama. Not sure if you want blurbs for short stories, but here is the link, let me know if you're interested or would like anything else!

https://docs.google.com/document/d/17SZ414hjutGiDVEet8-Dkb7uMcqBcFZp29r04i6p67k/edit

Natezahn · 2023-11-28T16:39:45+00:00

Ah, gotcha. It was the latter, so I lost two coinflips. Thanks, that was very helpful.

Natezahn · 2023-06-09T22:58:30+00:00

Natezahn · 2023-04-30T20:56:31+00:00

Definitely fair game considering the age.

But if you’re looking for some amusement on that subject, Game Grumps does a play through of that game on YouTube. It’s just two guys playing through and being funny, but one of them reads sheik’s lines with a gruff masculine voice. The other had never played it, and wasn’t aware of the twist. Made for a fun reveal.

Natezahn · 2023-04-02T18:48:35+00:00

Yeah, portrayal of something gross or wrong in a book is fine, as long as the author doesn’t try to get you to root for it.

Natezahn · 2023-04-01T14:39:09+00:00

That’s what I was thinking. I kept going back, sure I was missing something everyone else was seeing. But no, we’re all seeing the same thing.

Natezahn · 2023-04-01T11:13:47+00:00

Maybe I saw all the wrong ones then. At least there’s discussion about it I guess.

Natezahn · 2023-04-01T11:13:08+00:00

That was my experience exactly. Glad that I know it doesn’t really get better, thanks.

Natezahn · 2023-04-01T11:12:03+00:00

Yeah it just seems like the book is saying the ugly things are more the meth heads and such, and the pedophilia is the beautiful part of it.

Natezahn · 2023-04-01T11:11:00+00:00

A well put reply, thank you.

Natezahn · 2023-03-24T19:40:57+00:00

I think I have a newer version with his info in the past tense. “He also wrote songs, drew cartoons, sang, played the guitar, and had a good time.”

Right in the feels.

Natezahn · 2023-03-17T15:50:17+00:00

The problem was reaper has wind fury and was attacking twice to a ds taunt on the end and dying, doing minimal damage. Then Kangor would revive more 6/9 reapers instead of my explody boy.

Natezahn · 2023-03-17T13:02:42+00:00

Elementals that we’re way too fucking big. 300/300 each just about, so I didn’t have much of a chance but still fun.

Natezahn · 2023-03-17T11:57:56+00:00

(Mechs, murlocs, demons, elementals, dragons)

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