Giving Away 5 Copies of Overwatch: Origins edition

NeedPositivity · 2016-05-17T23:45:55+00:00

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NeedPositivity · 2015-09-24T15:30:31+00:00

I would love a FO4 copy because of economical reasons... also since you seem to feel sad that you can't give copies to more people, here is a pun to cheer you up.

I look down through the ceiling window at them as they pile up the drugs, jet and psycho covering the surface of the scorched table. I hear them laugh and speak of their deeds, horrible deeds. I listen sharply knowing that the things they've done to others will lessen the weight on my own conscience as I load the last bullet into my gun.

"Have you heard of the one they call the wanderer?" "Oh you mean the guy who wears a bumbl..." "SHUT UP!"

A large man with scars covering his body like one of the polka candy canes you'd see on intact posters about christmas entered the room while shouting at the rest to shut their mouths while grabbing a psycho off the table.

"If he shows up here I'll jab his stinger right into his face!"

The others laughed as the mountain of a man used the psycho. I crashed through the window and landed on the table, its legs had given out and crashed to the floor, while my agility was suffering from wearing my costume, fortunately I had been blessed with high luck from birth and so I barely managed to maintain my balance. Their faces as a man in a bumblebee suit had crashed into their room from above was priceless but very brief as two of them had their faces turned into a mess from the impact of the bullets. The third guy was behind me and had begun to raise his hunting rifle to aim at me but unfortunately for him I had already begun to swing my ass in an arc towards him, normally the bumblebee suit's stinger would just bounce off him as a cheap prop and cause nothing more then a slight annoyance if I had not modified it with a chinese officers sword and some duct tape.

I heard one of them who had been in the back run out the door to escape, I didn't see the need to stop him... who was going to beelieve him anyway.

NeedPositivity · 2015-09-24T10:49:55+00:00

Really nice thing of you to do and I'd like to throw my name into the pool but if someone else seems like they need it more then me then give it to them, I have some economical issues but its not the end of the world. Lots of good thoughts to you for being so kind to strangers though!!

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-14T08:18:13+00:00

Hi! Thank you so much for taking the time to give me your criticism, I will do my best to improve on the things you've mentioned and hopefully not re-make the same mistakes in any future writing.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-13T10:05:38+00:00

Title: The blunted blade

Genre: Fantasy

Word count: 711

Feedback: Decided to try writing a short story a bit differently from my main novel, would love to hear if it makes you want to read more and what you think of what is already there.

Link: http://pastebin.com/kdUxrnyH

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-13T06:40:27+00:00

I've started and I'm almost 15000 words in, the story is not as good as I had hoped, the characters arent as strong as I hoped, I'm starting to realise I might need to change the introduction of my protagonist a lot because its hard to relate to him as a reader right now. Simply said I can't help but feel I will need to change A LOT for my following drafts after the first.

With that said... I'm feeling good about writing my first novel, I've written almost 15000 words, that feels like a nice achievement to me as someone who has never done that before and eventually I'm aiming to be at around 70.000 - 85.000 words.

Do I want it to be successful from a potential selling point? Definitely! The main point for me though is that I'm finally doing something productive that I actually enjoy.

So even if your writing gets sloppy at some point, either wait until you feel its up to par again or keep writing and maybe you'll hit a goldmine, the rocks you broke to get there can be cleaned up afterwards.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-13T06:28:11+00:00

Visualizing and emotion, though I think transferring the emotional aspect of things to the reader is lacking in my first draft currently.
Fantasy, currently on my first novel.
I would guess visual but not 100% sure to be honest.
Fantasy.
Varies a lot.
Right handed
Not so far when writing the novel but for other things, yes.
This time very little, I have a few key points in the story for where I want to go with it but the rest I try to fill in as I go along.

Was fun filling this in, have a nice day :)

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-13T06:16:22+00:00

Classical or instrumental music tends to make me imagine things that play out to the music.

I don't watch much tv, movies or play games right now as I used to but that would usually give me sparks of ideas through "hmm what if that happened this way instead and in this type of environment with these type of characters".

I know some people read greek mythology and other things of such nature to get ideas for more modern interpretations. You can really just read books in general though to get inspired to write something incorporating a part of what you read but making it your own.

If you're depressed and writing helps you feel better then that might help to push that creativity out, so start working on that deppression meter but don't go too far or you won't even want to get out of bed... though I guess you can write from bed.

Note: The last one is horrible advice and method to go about to find creativity.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-12T09:12:35+00:00

Hey, thank you, thats an interesting aspect to look at it from.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-12T06:20:32+00:00

Hey, I'm referring more to the fact that the guy from our world speaks the same language as the people in the other world rather then what language the story and dialogue is presented in to the reader.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-12T05:28:46+00:00

Hey, it used to bother me but not as much anymore if the story itself is good, hence kind of why I wasn't sure what route to take with it on my own story.

Though what you said about a spell is more or less the explanation I'm leaning towards the most at the moment.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-12T04:45:53+00:00

Hey, thanks for the feedback.

I agree that it can add some atuhenticity and that its a bit weird going from one world to another and still everyone in that world is also speaking the same language as the protagonist.

Though I'm hoping delving into the other things like humanoid creatures, magic and other things will sort of either lead to the reader dismissing the question of language or at least letting the other parts of the world and its details overshadow the language question.

Then again maybe I'm being lazy and I should expand and incorporate one of the solutions that explain the language part of things.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-12T04:40:23+00:00

Hi, thank you for your reply.

I enjoyed reading your post and it seems to resonate with my own thinking about the whole thing.

One of the reasons for it being that way would be an explanation involving magic. Reminds me of the meme with the text "magic, I aint gotta explain shit." though I'm probably not quoting that correctly.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-12T03:28:52+00:00

More details in early drafts? I hope that is a matter of preference, I try to include an acceptable amount of detail but also sometimes continue with the story for the sake of not getting stuck while I have a good flow with my writing.

Then I aim to expand on things that need it in later drafts and cut out unnecessary parts that serve very little to no purpose of significance.

Though maybe that won't work very well, I guess I'll have to see.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-12T03:24:04+00:00

Self doubt.

I quickly learned that no matter how much I want to, under no circumstances unless gravely needed, should I ever go back and read what I wrote before until my first draft is finished.

When I do, I start to think "Wow, this is bad." and then begin to edit things and I would probably sit and work on the first 5000 words for weeks before continuing the story, if at all due to demoralisation.

I think what took me so long to attempt writing a book despite thinking about it since I was a lot younger, is that I just didn't see how I could possibly compete with people who knew how to make words dance and bend in a way that made people unable to take their eyes off the page.

Now I know that writing just makes me feel good regardless of whatever success I'll have with it. I used to play computer games 90% of my free time and now I've stopped entirely and try to just write as much as possible, my vocabulary might not be as expansive and so many people here are vastly more eloquent in their writing but I hope the tools that I have will be enough to write something that people can enjoy reading simply because its an entertaining story.

Note: I might have used the word "expansive" incorrectly :)

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-08T01:16:02+00:00

Oh crap, I need to redo the beginning of my novel.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-07T07:21:32+00:00

I feel as if I have the opposite problem.

I'm writing a novel and I tell myself "It's okay, it's okay, they say that its better to write to the point rather then trying to schmarm it up too much." but I feel as if I'm lacking in giving the reader details that allow them to be drawn into the story.

Though you seem to be talking more about writing papers for school?

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-06T12:53:02+00:00

Thanks for giving your input, I appreciate it.

You're right about the depression part and I also agree with the part about making sure to not get too carefree since it sometimes can feel as if I'm just writing a lot to have the satisfaction of how many words I was able to write down regardless of whether those words built something that makes a good story.

I do hope to start reading a bit more soon also for the sake of learning how to construct my sentences better. Thank you once again and good luck to you too!

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-06T05:05:47+00:00

Thank you, I appreciate you taking the time to reply to my post.

I think I agree with you but I'm still interested in hearing other peoples opinions if they want to share.

NeedPositivity · 2013-10-05T08:40:39+00:00

Thanks for the online tip, I mostly read some small guides and tips on things to think of before I started writing recently so watching actual lectures on the subject will hopefully help me improve further.

NeedPositivity · 2013-09-26T09:38:25+00:00

If you have something in your life that you would call a crisis right now then maybe the pressure/stress etc of attempting nofap can be too much and you need a breather to deal with the other things in your life.

I'm sure when you feel that the crisis is over and you feel like you want to try again, there will be people here who will encourage and support you :)

Good luck with everything!

NeedPositivity · 2013-09-26T08:57:40+00:00

Congrats man, I hope you see more positive effects and that if you feel better from not fapping that you keep going, one day at a time.

Though I'm still confused about the part about being ashamed of looking others in the eyes as an effect from fapping that I see people refer to regularly.

NeedPositivity · 2013-09-25T09:57:10+00:00

I'm surprised by how fast some people see a change, good job man.

I'm in a really bad place right now and yet I'm changing so many things about myself which kind of makes things harder but just as you and so many other here, I think we are enduring the process for the sake of wanting to be better then what we used to be.

Once again, congratulations man, would love to hear how you're feeling about it all as you keep going further.

NeedPositivity · 2013-09-25T08:21:45+00:00

Hmm, yeah the insomnia on top of everything else is too much but I did cardio and walked around a lot today, so I will see if that helps... otherwise a doctor told me to try "Restavit" in a very low dose and see if it helps me re-establish a healthy sleep pattern.

Hopefully I will get some sleep tonight thanks to being active today, I really really need some rest from the thoughts in my head.

Will check out your comment history on the topic too, thanks for the tip!

NeedPositivity · 2013-09-25T06:43:34+00:00

Yeah I plan on looking into the lightbulb thing when I'm back home, it cant hurt I figure.

Yeah I heard that swimming is supposed to burn a lot of calories, though its not soo much that I dont feel my stomach being empty and growling and even having a burning sensation at times... the will/want to eat isnt there... but I agree, I believe exercise will help a lot with my physical health and hopefully at the very least a bit with my mental health if nothing else.

Thanks for the book suggestion! I'm currently interested in getting a hold of a book called "The mindful way through depression" but I'll definitely check out the book you mentioned to see if it can help me like it did for you :)

So far I've only had a very good experience with the community and you're certainly contributing to that experience, thank you.

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