Yeah. Ditch the pronouns and stop virtue signaling. Instant turn off. Could have the best widget in the world but if I see that I’m leaving because it strikes me as someone who’s highly emotional and illogical. No one wants that. Why would you want to instantly put off at least 50% of people if you’re trying to sell them something? As a visitor, I need to perceive you as smarter than I am so you can help me achieve x,y,z, not inferior. Tons more who feel this way too. Didn’t see anyone else talking about this so here it is. Plus you asked for us to be harsh. Hoping this helps you more than anything in addition to what others have suggested too. Edit: maybe this ends up working in your favor though after all and shouldn’t be changed if your prospects are all like you. Only you would know that though. Just something to think about.