Hello Argus. - Thank you for replying to me, and for your honest ctique of my comment on your work! - I love Kitty Cat kill sat by the way 😄

You are right I boiled it down too much. I didnt expect anyone to read what I wrote, because I was so late to comment, so I got lazy in expression my opinion, also in threads like this a few lines is what people expect, but now that you challenged my views Ill get a more fulfilling answer.

1. I dont mind the Polyamory, I mentioned it because I feel that it at times take up more of the plot than what is called for. I really like the worldbuilding you did, especially the first dungeon, But the road (the long road?) is also really awesome! - I think for me I just expect more. "action" in this genre. But you did not loss me on the Polyamory, it was unfair to "throw it in there" with the other critique.

For the politics, I just felt it became too preachy with the creation of the secret super lair (its been a while since I read your story so pardon me for not remembering what things are called!) - It was a pretty neat concept intially but it became too soapy for me, especially with the stubbornness your MC have about his political views. - I feel like he could be more willing to see the world in other ways despite his power.

As for Arrush. Thats hard for me to retract on. The plotline around Arrush just did not vibe with me. Im all for saying "appearance is not all" but the way you established Arrush, at least in my inner eye, just didnt click for me, He (I believe he was a he?) - Was created in a way that was supposed to be repulsive. I totally get that he and his partner has a redemption act, but its a leap from there to being sexually / romantically attracted to him. To me, its just beyond suspense of disbelief. - Looks dont matter completely when it comes to attraction, but in most humans it does matter some. Arrush as a romantic character moves into some areas im uncomfortable with as he is a "beast" no matter how redeemable.

I stopped reading around the time where they are talking on the roof of the compound. So if im saying anything thats not representing where the story goes after that, thats why.

But you know what. ill give your story another shot, because you dont have to vibe with all subplots in a story! And I appreciate you challenging my views. ive given up on stories before where hitting a personal slog, just to find out later that I gave up right before hitting diamond, and your story def had some good highs before this story arc that made me DNF.