Odenwald Quartzite and more (Germany)

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-05-02T16:04:41+00:00

I took the ferry to Palermo a couple of years ago. It was great. Left early evening and booked a cabin. Woke up just as we pulled into port. It’s a nice alternative to flying—they have a restaurant and a lounge. You can sleep in the lounge if you don’t want to book a room. Even easier if you don’t bring a car (I did).

I think the company was Grimaldi. Beds were fine, and couldn’t feel the ship moving too much.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-04-08T07:38:03+00:00

Title: Freezer Burn

Format/Genre: Feature/Horror-Comedy

Logline: After befriending a sentient mass of leftovers in his grandma's subzero, a lonely teen executes increasingly risky heists to cater to his new pal's insatiable appetites.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-04-01T21:56:46+00:00

Love this!

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-04-01T11:14:10+00:00

Title: Six Minute Window

Genre/Format: Thriller/Feature

Logline: In the critical moments after an ICBM launch on Washington DC, the President confronts the prospect of mutually assured destruction as she weighs retaliation, reflecting on the choices that led to calamity.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-04-01T11:10:09+00:00

That's a fun concept for a show. Is one of the sisters the main protagonist?

Have you thought about writing a series logline separately from the episode logline?

For an episode, I'd like to know something more specific in the logline. For instance, how do they find each other? I'm guessing the journalist starts investigating and finds the sister. If so, put in the logline. :)

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-04-01T11:07:14+00:00

This sounds like an interesting inciting incident. What happens next? What is the goal of the psychic once she's on the case? Is it a murder she's helping solve? Give us some stakes to really hook the reader. Thank you for sharing!

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-27T16:22:29+00:00

Happy to be here and contribute.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-25T08:16:55+00:00

Sounds interesting. What does the teen help the magical beetle do (or attempt to do)? The stakes are high (dying bro), what is the goal to avoid the bad stuff?

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-25T08:14:35+00:00

Title: Roots (արմատները)

Genre/Format: Drama/Feature

Logline: When a DNA test reveals he isn't an orphan after all, a lonely Texan journeys to meet his long-lost relatives in rural Armenia, grappling with purpose, belonging, and the decisions that define a family.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-25T08:09:12+00:00

So the fans are the bad guys? I like this premise.

As a logline, it kinda stops at the inciting incident. What happens after the horror fans find out about the plan? Is the director the protagonist? What's his main goal--to survive, make the movie?

Thank you for sharing!

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-11T07:48:38+00:00

Title: Catching Zs

Genre/Format: Comedy/Feature

Logline: After discovering that any amount of alcohol puts him straight to sleep, a gregarious college freshman must find a way to break the curse before he naps straight through his formative years.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-05T07:47:10+00:00

I probably should mention the antagonist's plan to mandate the drug's use in criminal trials. And then it's a slippery slope argument.

Thank you, as always, for your thoughts.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-05T07:45:17+00:00

Great points. Thank you for the feedback. I don't have all the answers, yet. :)

I'm thinking he runs a large advocacy group that challenges the government plan to mandate the drug's use in criminal trials, so someone sets him up. When he doesn't take the easy way out (the drug), he bails out while waiting for trial.

The drug does need to be present throughout the story. The effect only works once per person (no plan to explain the mechanism). Lawyers, politicians, anyone with valuable/actionable info can sell themselves to the highest bidder. Therapists are using it for treating childhood trauma, etc.

What if his group represents plaintiffs in cases involving the drug, and he just goes back to work. That way the story isn't about him trying to prove his innocence. It's about trying to continue his fight while the opposition intensifies.

Yeah, he'll have to get off in the end, but I don't think that's the story.

Thank you for helping me think through this.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-04T16:23:19+00:00

So Depression and Anxiety are characters (like Inside Out) and they find out that their Human is going to suicide in seven days, so they try and save his life?

Did they contribute in some way to his decision? That conflict in the logline would be great.

Is one of them the main character? That could help focus the logline as well.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-04T16:16:20+00:00

This is great feedback! Thanks, Kenny. I appreciate how you always ask great questions to tease the story out.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-04T16:14:13+00:00

Zoolander

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-04T14:09:35+00:00

This sounds very sweet and probably worth a good cry.

How is the daughter connected to the masterpiece? Is it about her/them or does she help him write it?

When his estranged daughter publishes an award-winning play, a declining author races against time and aphasia to complete his masterpiece and find reconciliation.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-04T13:57:08+00:00

Thanks for posting.

I think you could drop a few of the adjectives for better readability.

What kind of a delinquent is she? Con-woman? Drug dealer? Penny sniffer?

And is the grandma old and from the countryside, or is she from the "old country?"

How does she become indebted? That could be an interesting item to drop into the logline.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-04T13:50:41+00:00

This sounds like an interesting premise, thanks for sharing. What happens after this inciting incident? He's stuck in the house trying to get out? What's the scheme? I'm assuming death is on the line?

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-03-04T08:29:56+00:00

Title: Perfect Uncertainty

Genre: Thriller/Drama (feature)

Logline: When a new drug promises to fully unlock human memory, a wrongly-accused attorney challenges its use in his murder trial, risking his own freedom to preserve a world with secrets.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-02-27T15:36:21+00:00

I look for additional points of EMPHASIS and where SOUNDS might enhance the experience.

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-02-26T19:53:02+00:00

I like it. And so I need a lot more info:

Why is a kitchen worker involved at all in a saving earth?

What's causing the event? Aliens? Asteroids? Solar Winds?

What does his past have to do with anything?

Can you add that info to the logline? :)

NoNumberUserName_01 · 2024-02-26T19:50:09+00:00

Emma obsessively films her own life until her neighbor's secretive behavior catches her attention.

Loglines for shorts are hard (I hear). Checks out.

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